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The Seed
After running away from home, Roman Haynes returns to Jackson, Mississippi where his mother has fallen ill. Upon his arrival, Roman is confronted with his past which continues to hunt him.He is reunited with the first man he ever loved, Daryl Alston. The cowboy who won him over with his crooked smile and eyes to which Roman fell victim to. However, with Roman being away for so long, Darly had no choice but to move on and find another. This, of course, was what Roman had feared upon arriving where it all started. From family secrets and lost love, to the quest for self-discovery; The Seed is Roman's story of how one must travel through the dark in order to grow within the light.
124 pages, Kindle Edition
Published October 22, 2021
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November 11, 2022
This was such a genius story. I think it is one that has never been written before and we need representation like this. I think this author is paving a way to open to more story’s that reach to ALL people. I know that was part of the mission they said in the authors notes.
For the Author: Since I am the first review I have seen on amazon and good reads, and this is self published, I wanted to leave some suggestions since these books are self published.
I found one typo, on page 56.
There were some contradictions and parts that were unclear. For example there were what seemed to be three I love you scenes with Daryl, but each time they were mentioned to be the first time. (Except the fantasy, that was a good touch).
It felt like the relationship with Hudson was super rushed, maybe needed like one more scene to solidify that they got along and liked eachother.
I don’t think the baby involved was talked about enough.
How the relationship was resolved with Anika and Darly seemed to be missing, as the reader I was very confused and it felt like it just skipped to “ok everything’s fine I guess”. I am curious what is their relationship like as co parents. She went from screaming and hating him to then no explanation and friendly
Hudson was mentioned as Anika’s brother and I gasped but then Roman didnt have any reaction, which lead me to think “was this something I was meant to know” or is this a twist. Because if it was a twist there needed to be a reaction or something. It was mentioned so casually as if it was a given when it indeed left me shook.
Christian is introduced as Lena’s husband, but later on the page he is now the boyfriend, so that was a contradiction.
Some of the sentences were a bit wordy and took away from the flow of the book. For example:
Pg. 90 “It’s nothing. I would have done it for anyone who sought help. I’m only doing my job and helping those in need” The part that says “helping those in need” is a bit forced and not necessary. Since “help” is said just the sentence before, this is implied. I would stop it at “only doing my job” or take that last sentence out entirly and just end with “sought help” it gets the point across just fine with that. So it would read “It’s nothing. I would have done it for anyone who sought help” or “It’s nothing, I would have done it for anyone who sought help. I’m only doing my job”
Pg. 92 “He was deserving of love, and happiness, but I am afraid that I wont be the person that he needs to have such blessings” The “such blessings” is a bit much and feels forced and elementary. I would just stop it at “that he needs”. Because you already listed the blessings, no need to repeat it, it gets the message across without specifying at the end what you are referring to, we already know that from the introduction of the sentence. So it should read “He was deserving of love and happiness, but I am afraid that I won’t be the person that he needs”
Pg. 92 “the last thing that I wanted to do to him was hurt him, he deserved so much more than that” You actually dont need the “to him” because we know you are still talking about the same him so it just feels repetitive and interrupts the flow. Instead I would just say “ The last thing that I wanted to was hurt him, he deserved so much more than that”
Pg. 101 “ Perhaps change was possible, and my mothers dream of restoring our family seemed to be a bit more possible”. Having the word possible twice does not flow very well, I would use a synonym and say “ perhaps change was possible, and my mother’s dream of restoring our family seemed to be in sight”
Pg. 101 “ Her heart is filled with nothing but love and kindness, the perfect ingredients for motherhood” not sure why, but this sounded weirdly placed. What I think would be more meaningful and tie into the story better, would be to say “ I know Lena would make such an amazing mother because she reminds me so much of my own”
Most of the pages were amazing and the story itself was SO GOOD. There were so many twists and turns I could not out it down and finished it in two days. Since you are self published, I thought I would leave some notes because I want your work to go far but I noticed there were not any reviews for your books yet.
I really hope you do not take offense to any of my comments or think “who does she think she is telling me how to write” I have never written a book, yet, I am currently working on one, but as a reader I wanted to share some honest feedback to help your books be the best they can be.
I really hope you see this and I am wishing you luck.
Your story’s are so good I’d definitely reccomend.
For the Author: Since I am the first review I have seen on amazon and good reads, and this is self published, I wanted to leave some suggestions since these books are self published.
I found one typo, on page 56.
There were some contradictions and parts that were unclear. For example there were what seemed to be three I love you scenes with Daryl, but each time they were mentioned to be the first time. (Except the fantasy, that was a good touch).
It felt like the relationship with Hudson was super rushed, maybe needed like one more scene to solidify that they got along and liked eachother.
I don’t think the baby involved was talked about enough.
How the relationship was resolved with Anika and Darly seemed to be missing, as the reader I was very confused and it felt like it just skipped to “ok everything’s fine I guess”. I am curious what is their relationship like as co parents. She went from screaming and hating him to then no explanation and friendly
Hudson was mentioned as Anika’s brother and I gasped but then Roman didnt have any reaction, which lead me to think “was this something I was meant to know” or is this a twist. Because if it was a twist there needed to be a reaction or something. It was mentioned so casually as if it was a given when it indeed left me shook.
Christian is introduced as Lena’s husband, but later on the page he is now the boyfriend, so that was a contradiction.
Some of the sentences were a bit wordy and took away from the flow of the book. For example:
Pg. 90 “It’s nothing. I would have done it for anyone who sought help. I’m only doing my job and helping those in need” The part that says “helping those in need” is a bit forced and not necessary. Since “help” is said just the sentence before, this is implied. I would stop it at “only doing my job” or take that last sentence out entirly and just end with “sought help” it gets the point across just fine with that. So it would read “It’s nothing. I would have done it for anyone who sought help” or “It’s nothing, I would have done it for anyone who sought help. I’m only doing my job”
Pg. 92 “He was deserving of love, and happiness, but I am afraid that I wont be the person that he needs to have such blessings” The “such blessings” is a bit much and feels forced and elementary. I would just stop it at “that he needs”. Because you already listed the blessings, no need to repeat it, it gets the message across without specifying at the end what you are referring to, we already know that from the introduction of the sentence. So it should read “He was deserving of love and happiness, but I am afraid that I won’t be the person that he needs”
Pg. 92 “the last thing that I wanted to do to him was hurt him, he deserved so much more than that” You actually dont need the “to him” because we know you are still talking about the same him so it just feels repetitive and interrupts the flow. Instead I would just say “ The last thing that I wanted to was hurt him, he deserved so much more than that”
Pg. 101 “ Perhaps change was possible, and my mothers dream of restoring our family seemed to be a bit more possible”. Having the word possible twice does not flow very well, I would use a synonym and say “ perhaps change was possible, and my mother’s dream of restoring our family seemed to be in sight”
Pg. 101 “ Her heart is filled with nothing but love and kindness, the perfect ingredients for motherhood” not sure why, but this sounded weirdly placed. What I think would be more meaningful and tie into the story better, would be to say “ I know Lena would make such an amazing mother because she reminds me so much of my own”
Most of the pages were amazing and the story itself was SO GOOD. There were so many twists and turns I could not out it down and finished it in two days. Since you are self published, I thought I would leave some notes because I want your work to go far but I noticed there were not any reviews for your books yet.
I really hope you do not take offense to any of my comments or think “who does she think she is telling me how to write” I have never written a book, yet, I am currently working on one, but as a reader I wanted to share some honest feedback to help your books be the best they can be.
I really hope you see this and I am wishing you luck.
Your story’s are so good I’d definitely reccomend.
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January 26, 2023
This was the first book I've read from Dakota Perry and the author did not disappoint. There was never a dull moment when reading this story. My interest was kept from the beginning to the end of the book. Every chapter kept me wanting to read more. I needed to know if Roman would end up with Daryl or the hot nurse, if his mother would live, and if his dysfunctional family would get it together.
The main character Roman Haynes was written to where I'm sure people could relate to him, if not to his entire character (I hope not you'll understand once you read the book) at least some of his characteristics. I also appreciate that Dakota put a trigger warning on the first page of the book. However, without spoiling the ending I wouldn't mind if there's a part two, because it ended open. Meaning, the reader can imagine what Roman's life would go on to be like after the last scene.
The main character Roman Haynes was written to where I'm sure people could relate to him, if not to his entire character (I hope not you'll understand once you read the book) at least some of his characteristics. I also appreciate that Dakota put a trigger warning on the first page of the book. However, without spoiling the ending I wouldn't mind if there's a part two, because it ended open. Meaning, the reader can imagine what Roman's life would go on to be like after the last scene.
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