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The Forbidden Alpha
A rejected mate must leave the packhouse. That’s the rule of the Crestmoon Pack.
All my life, I’ve been bullied and considered weak by my entire pack. My only redeeming factor was that my father died a hero. Maybe that’s why my mate, who happened to be the future Alpha, rejected me. He just couldn’t take a weakling to be his Luna.
Now considered a lone wolf and stripped of my dignity, I wandered deep into the woods and stumbled upon a far worse fate.
The Blood Moon Pack was a legend. A horror story that adults tell little kids to scare them off. They were said to be the strongest, most fearsome werewolves in the land. They were as powerful as they were ruthless. And I just landed right in the middle of their lair.
Their Alpha was formidable, alright. But he was also the hottest creature I’ve ever laid eyes on.
Living in the Black Moon Village, I learned that my father didn’t die by their hands, as I was told. A traitor within the Crestmoon pack sent my father to his death.
Desperate for revenge, I made the Blood Moon Alpha a deal. I will do all his bidding. And he will personally train me to become a better, stronger fighter.
There was only one problem, though: my attraction to this dark Alpha was becoming stronger.
And when I come face to face with my former mate, I will have to choose between my mate bond and my real feelings for this forbidden Alpha.
All my life, I’ve been bullied and considered weak by my entire pack. My only redeeming factor was that my father died a hero. Maybe that’s why my mate, who happened to be the future Alpha, rejected me. He just couldn’t take a weakling to be his Luna.
Now considered a lone wolf and stripped of my dignity, I wandered deep into the woods and stumbled upon a far worse fate.
The Blood Moon Pack was a legend. A horror story that adults tell little kids to scare them off. They were said to be the strongest, most fearsome werewolves in the land. They were as powerful as they were ruthless. And I just landed right in the middle of their lair.
Their Alpha was formidable, alright. But he was also the hottest creature I’ve ever laid eyes on.
Living in the Black Moon Village, I learned that my father didn’t die by their hands, as I was told. A traitor within the Crestmoon pack sent my father to his death.
Desperate for revenge, I made the Blood Moon Alpha a deal. I will do all his bidding. And he will personally train me to become a better, stronger fighter.
There was only one problem, though: my attraction to this dark Alpha was becoming stronger.
And when I come face to face with my former mate, I will have to choose between my mate bond and my real feelings for this forbidden Alpha.
- GenresFantasyParanormal
294 pages, Kindle Edition
First published July 24, 2022
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September 13, 2022
I finished it so I could write this
So the author has a storyline and plot. It faithfully follows the common trope of rejected mates. That’s literally all the positives I have to share.
The author is a teenager. That’s not a problem in itself, to have a teenage writer. The problem is when the author’s life experience and maturity level are so much younger than the chosen subject matter, it ruins the story. Stick to more age appropriate content for now.
I’m not being harsh, just real. Have someone over the age of 21 read your explicit scenes before you publish.
For that matter, have someone over the age of 18 read your arguments/couples fight scenes. Your characters sound about 14. As you’ve written them all as adults, this is a huge problem.
English isn’t your first language. Have someone fluent in English and in your own native language translate your text for you. Don’t rely on auto translations. Everything becomes distorted and very, very choppy.
If English IS your first language, then frankly you should be embarrassed and ashamed. You cannot ever be an author without first learning the tools of your trade.
This is like watching American idol and the judges tell the singer they could have done so much better had they done a better job at picking a song for themselves.
So the author has a storyline and plot. It faithfully follows the common trope of rejected mates. That’s literally all the positives I have to share.
The author is a teenager. That’s not a problem in itself, to have a teenage writer. The problem is when the author’s life experience and maturity level are so much younger than the chosen subject matter, it ruins the story. Stick to more age appropriate content for now.
I’m not being harsh, just real. Have someone over the age of 21 read your explicit scenes before you publish.
For that matter, have someone over the age of 18 read your arguments/couples fight scenes. Your characters sound about 14. As you’ve written them all as adults, this is a huge problem.
English isn’t your first language. Have someone fluent in English and in your own native language translate your text for you. Don’t rely on auto translations. Everything becomes distorted and very, very choppy.
If English IS your first language, then frankly you should be embarrassed and ashamed. You cannot ever be an author without first learning the tools of your trade.
This is like watching American idol and the judges tell the singer they could have done so much better had they done a better job at picking a song for themselves.
September 21, 2022
LOTS OF ERRORS!
Okay, the story was good...but lord have mercy. The grammatical errors were rough. It's as though there was no proof reading done. I had to sift out what the author was trying to say. Needless to say, I finished it. Only to find that IT'S NOT THE END!
Aside from the errors. The constant crying of Celine....all the tears, tears, tears. So frustrating. Didn't help that this book felt like it was written for a teen....like the author was trying her hand at adult writing.
I would like to read the next book in this series but honestly I don't want to be disappointed. I'm trying not to be harsh but this book had potential and it's frustrating that it feels not fully developed.
Okay, the story was good...but lord have mercy. The grammatical errors were rough. It's as though there was no proof reading done. I had to sift out what the author was trying to say. Needless to say, I finished it. Only to find that IT'S NOT THE END!
Aside from the errors. The constant crying of Celine....all the tears, tears, tears. So frustrating. Didn't help that this book felt like it was written for a teen....like the author was trying her hand at adult writing.
I would like to read the next book in this series but honestly I don't want to be disappointed. I'm trying not to be harsh but this book had potential and it's frustrating that it feels not fully developed.
November 15, 2022
this story isn’t over
The abrupt ending has me searching for the next book. I just really want to know how the story will end. Such a big cliff hanger. I’m happy love finds a way but the villains need to be dealt with. Guessing the next book will provide the answers????
The abrupt ending has me searching for the next book. I just really want to know how the story will end. Such a big cliff hanger. I’m happy love finds a way but the villains need to be dealt with. Guessing the next book will provide the answers????
July 30, 2022
Not Great
This book has a potentially good storyline but it's shockingly bad in the editing department with misspelt words, missing words or wrong-placed words which can leave you a little confused!
Also, the author likes to use the word "Tsk" (in which I'm assuming the character is tutting!?) a lot and I do mean a lot!
Shame because it does have the potential to be a good read with a lot of tweaking!
This book has a potentially good storyline but it's shockingly bad in the editing department with misspelt words, missing words or wrong-placed words which can leave you a little confused!
Also, the author likes to use the word "Tsk" (in which I'm assuming the character is tutting!?) a lot and I do mean a lot!
Shame because it does have the potential to be a good read with a lot of tweaking!
August 15, 2023
Good idea to the story, a lot of grammatical errors that made it tough to read in some spots, and found myself repeating the same lines and phrases. Needs a good editor to create a better flow of the story.
September 14, 2022
not what I expected!
This book was one I wanted to like, I really did! But the editing left something to be desired…. First, who is the MC… Lucas or Tyler? There was name switches throughout the whole book, the wording was off, and the female lead was also confusing, first she’s weak, and cries all the time, then she’s strong, then back to weak and crying again…. I struggled to finish the book, but I will not be following the series after this one!
This book was one I wanted to like, I really did! But the editing left something to be desired…. First, who is the MC… Lucas or Tyler? There was name switches throughout the whole book, the wording was off, and the female lead was also confusing, first she’s weak, and cries all the time, then she’s strong, then back to weak and crying again…. I struggled to finish the book, but I will not be following the series after this one!
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April 7, 2023Story base is extremely good. Kept me rivited to find out what happens next, could not put it down. It took a little bit to really get going but it never left you hanging, just wanting more. the only disappointment was when it ended.. there does not seem to be a part 2 or continuation out yet so just wondering if that will be coming soon. . Cant wait to read the rest of their story.
September 14, 2022
I read this book and I'm hooked. Many people have different opinions but in my opinion, this book has a great plot! The characters have great chemistry and I really want to read more of this love story.
July 30, 2023
Good story line needs to be edited.
The storyline was good but there were many grammar mistakes it trips up the story line. It’s confusing for a reader when the timelines shift. One mins she’s walking in to serve lunch then next she’s so happy she survived the dinner…this confuses the reader. Time lines and plot lines and character development are the building blocks readers need to enjoy a story. Also word choices you cannot cook words but you can cook food. Many times the main character is discussing a guy but refers to him as a her. This trips the reader up and they lose focus on the story. Several times I had stop and try again later. All that said the story of girl earning her place in the world through determination and overcoming her weaknesses is a good one. Just needs a good editor.
The storyline was good but there were many grammar mistakes it trips up the story line. It’s confusing for a reader when the timelines shift. One mins she’s walking in to serve lunch then next she’s so happy she survived the dinner…this confuses the reader. Time lines and plot lines and character development are the building blocks readers need to enjoy a story. Also word choices you cannot cook words but you can cook food. Many times the main character is discussing a guy but refers to him as a her. This trips the reader up and they lose focus on the story. Several times I had stop and try again later. All that said the story of girl earning her place in the world through determination and overcoming her weaknesses is a good one. Just needs a good editor.
July 6, 2023
Celine thought once she turned 18 everything would change for her but happens when everything goes wrong. Her mate rejects her and banishes her. What happens when everything she knew was a lie? As she grows closer to the revival pack of her old pack the Alpha, Lucas lines are crossed and truth comes to light. Can she prove she’s worth more than her old pack thought she would be? Lucas, has shut himself off to the world around him and focusing on his pack and keeping them save and strong. But happens when a lone wolf comes to be in his pack? What happens she opens his eyes to so much more? Highly recommend this book! Really hopefully there is a second book! As this ended on a cliffhanger!
January 10, 2024
The story had some potential, but the poor grammar made it virtually unreadable. I finished it because I felt like I had to, but the spicy scenes I had to skim because they made me feel uncomfortable, almost as if they were written by someone young and inexperienced. Many phrases were severely overused (huffing sighs every 10 sentences). Celine was not overly relatable or likeable. And for being a shifter story, I think Celine shifted maybe 3 times in the entire story. The constant crying and stuttering and cluelessness made Celine a weak character. She sounded 15 when I think she was supposed to be an adult.
February 1, 2023
Good in theory
it was a decent plot but there were so many grammatical errors that it made it hard to read. The FMC came off as young and dumb. Even while she fell in love with Lucas she cried about everything. Theres emotional, and theres Emotional! I felt like I wanted to slap her and snap her out of it. Lucas’ character is fantastic but I’d love to hear more of his family and past mate background to kind of round out the story. I skipped a lot of the internal dialogue to get to the actual story and still felt like I didn’t miss much. Good in theory, but missing a bit.
it was a decent plot but there were so many grammatical errors that it made it hard to read. The FMC came off as young and dumb. Even while she fell in love with Lucas she cried about everything. Theres emotional, and theres Emotional! I felt like I wanted to slap her and snap her out of it. Lucas’ character is fantastic but I’d love to hear more of his family and past mate background to kind of round out the story. I skipped a lot of the internal dialogue to get to the actual story and still felt like I didn’t miss much. Good in theory, but missing a bit.
July 30, 2023
She's way to whiny and childish thinking
This book is written for children/young teenagers who still crave love and affection and acceptance. The fact that the female lead spent the entire book trying to get attention and love but acting like a spoiled child when she didn't get or crying at the drop of a dime made me not find her likeable in anyway. From the moment she saw her mate doing all he could to reject her she should have let him do it quietly and then left with her dignity in tact.
This book is written for children/young teenagers who still crave love and affection and acceptance. The fact that the female lead spent the entire book trying to get attention and love but acting like a spoiled child when she didn't get or crying at the drop of a dime made me not find her likeable in anyway. From the moment she saw her mate doing all he could to reject her she should have let him do it quietly and then left with her dignity in tact.
May 30, 2023
Wow. Great storyline and plot.. but hard to follow at times.. LOTS of errors. Misuse of words. Used the word “already” a lot.. it was weird.. just.. had to mentally take them out as I was reading. Also the main character stuttered. A LOT. Like unnecessarily.. almost in every sentence she spoke.. and it was annoying at best.
Still good storyline.. but the errors and issues with the writing itself brought the stars down to a 2.
Still good storyline.. but the errors and issues with the writing itself brought the stars down to a 2.
October 26, 2022
grammatical errors first of all, second the storyline is good but you notice that the writer has little expreience. I found myself skipping over pieces. This is book 1 of a series, that was not clear when i started reading and would have liked to known cause i like to wait for the rest of the series so i can read all of them at once. I do not know if i will reading book 2 of this story tho
July 7, 2023
VERY HARD TO READ
The plot is good, but it was definitely not proofread before published. Along with bad grammar and failed autocorrect, the story is very choppy. You can see where the writer was going so you can assume and still make it through, but especially ending with a cliffhanger to make you read another, it is just not worth the effort.
The plot is good, but it was definitely not proofread before published. Along with bad grammar and failed autocorrect, the story is very choppy. You can see where the writer was going so you can assume and still make it through, but especially ending with a cliffhanger to make you read another, it is just not worth the effort.
August 13, 2023
Good read, but needs edited.
I enjoy reading stories like this. But this could use some major editing. There is an overuse of the word "already" when it should either say "anymore" or just not be there at all. Overall, it was a decent read, and I look forward to reading the next book.
I enjoy reading stories like this. But this could use some major editing. There is an overuse of the word "already" when it should either say "anymore" or just not be there at all. Overall, it was a decent read, and I look forward to reading the next book.
September 28, 2023
Not bad, it's a promising start, it just needs a better grasp of the language, some editing and mostly life experience. The characters and the intimate scenes look like written by a minor lacking the knowledge of age appropriate behavior for grownups. Can't wait to read her books 5 years from now :)
November 4, 2023
umm
Great story line, but that’s where it finished. A proof reader is strongly recommended for any new novels from Raven Ashley, it reads like a draft.
The main character is very naive and in her own head a lot and I found myself skipping a lot of her dialogue to just make it to the ending. It is frustrating as the book had the potential to be a great book.
Great story line, but that’s where it finished. A proof reader is strongly recommended for any new novels from Raven Ashley, it reads like a draft.
The main character is very naive and in her own head a lot and I found myself skipping a lot of her dialogue to just make it to the ending. It is frustrating as the book had the potential to be a great book.
November 15, 2023
Hard to stop reading
I couldn't put my kindle down. I just wanted to keep reading. Now trying to find the 2nd book to this if there is one. I love a book I can't stop reading and this was one. Different to the ones I have read.. now I have to look for a new book if I can't find number 2.
I couldn't put my kindle down. I just wanted to keep reading. Now trying to find the 2nd book to this if there is one. I love a book I can't stop reading and this was one. Different to the ones I have read.. now I have to look for a new book if I can't find number 2.
December 10, 2023
Wow!!
The plot was really good but could of been better if this story was written better! The grammar was not there and I really wanted to love this book! I normally do not allow the reviews stop me from reading a book!!! Well I wish I for once listened!! This author has potential and love to see her get a better editor who proof read her books!!
The plot was really good but could of been better if this story was written better! The grammar was not there and I really wanted to love this book! I normally do not allow the reviews stop me from reading a book!!! Well I wish I for once listened!! This author has potential and love to see her get a better editor who proof read her books!!
October 16, 2022
Full of errors, crying low self esteem female. I wasn't a fan of the beginning, middle was somewhat good but then last bit was bad again. And the worse part story didn't even finish. We were left with a cliffhanger. I'm not going to continue with the next book whenever it comes out.
October 22, 2022
Good plot poor writing
The plot of this book was great, however, it really needs to be edited. It took forever to finish reading because I had to re-read passages multiple times to understand context.
The plot of this book was great, however, it really needs to be edited. It took forever to finish reading because I had to re-read passages multiple times to understand context.
February 2, 2023
Good read—not your typical shifter story line
I like the storyline. Seems like the authors native language is not English —pronouns are messy. Occasional verb tenses are odd. I like the characters and the story line. Where is book 2?
I like the storyline. Seems like the authors native language is not English —pronouns are messy. Occasional verb tenses are odd. I like the characters and the story line. Where is book 2?
May 27, 2023
What’s the name of the second book?
I truly enjoyed this book. Do you only thing that I didn’t really care about was that she was always crying. I was looking to see about the second book but I can’t find it. I truly hope you do write it I want to thank you for your creativity.
I truly enjoyed this book. Do you only thing that I didn’t really care about was that she was always crying. I was looking to see about the second book but I can’t find it. I truly hope you do write it I want to thank you for your creativity.
July 9, 2023
I like the premise of the story and it had a lot of potential but my goodness the grammar was atrocious. Lots of parts that didn’t quite make sense so skimming was the only solution to understand what was being said.
July 10, 2023
Girl wolf meets boy wolf
This tale should have been easy to read, but so many spelling mistakes and grammar didn’t allow the tale to flow.
I don’t think I’ll read the next episode.
Two and a half stars.
This tale should have been easy to read, but so many spelling mistakes and grammar didn’t allow the tale to flow.
I don’t think I’ll read the next episode.
Two and a half stars.
July 13, 2023
Great story
I wouldn't call it a dislike, just that this was not a traditional wolf story. No sparks, she couldn’t tell certain things. Took too long to get to the intimate part.
All in all it was good. Liked the part where she still felt the bond.
I wouldn't call it a dislike, just that this was not a traditional wolf story. No sparks, she couldn’t tell certain things. Took too long to get to the intimate part.
All in all it was good. Liked the part where she still felt the bond.
July 22, 2023
Horrible Writing & Editing
The book has so many errors, not just grammar, but wrong words, and changes to the character names at times. I ended up just skimming through it because it was too awful to actually try to make sense of all the mistakes. Editors exist for a reason!!!
The book has so many errors, not just grammar, but wrong words, and changes to the character names at times. I ended up just skimming through it because it was too awful to actually try to make sense of all the mistakes. Editors exist for a reason!!!
July 26, 2023
This was an ok read to pass the time. There was nothing super exciting and it was a lot of the same thing happening over and over again. You could totally skip 3 or 4 chapters ahead and really not miss a whole lot. A lot happen with nothing really actually happening.
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