DNF @ 11%
The writing is too awkward and amateur for me to enjoy the story, which is shocking because this author has been charging money for her work for many years. A lot of the dialog doesn't sound natural because the author has characters randomly not using contractions and making odd declarations about things that aren't phrased the way people normally talk. Another problem is that the writing is very stiff and lacks emotion. Actions are described in rigid sentences, there's no attempt to establish flow between sentences and there's little description of emotion. Oh, except when characters act OTT as if they're in a Saturday morning cartoon. That's when emotions are described in detail. Yay. Anyway, the rest of the time, it feels like reading an instruction manual. Making things worse is that the narrative constantly grinds to a halt as the author awkwardly shoves info-dumping paragraphs in. There's no attempt to insert the information in a smooth, natural way - it's just crammed in between lines of dialog and most of the information is pointless (such as telling us the backstories of random side characters who are part of the MC's racing team).
There's also no chemistry between the MCs, despite the author constantly telling us how attracted they are to each other. There's instalust but nothing else. The sequence of events right before I DNF'd is a perfect example of what was wrong with the author's execution of this story:
The MCs have barely spent time together, then the author has them randomly kiss and one of them runs off 'as fast as he could' afterwards because that's how 28 year olds usually deal with their emotions. Then he bumps into his ex on the stairs he's running down (he comes to a 'screaming halt' and 'gulps' when this happens) and everything stops as they have an awkward, pointless conversation about the ex's new job. That's followed by a scene from the other MC's POV, where he's having a phone conversation with his sister, who sounds like she's quoting from motivational self-help books as she awkwardly keeps pointing out how wonderful her brother is. The conversation also grinds to a halt constantly because the author feels the need to awkwardly cram in details about the siblings' family history. The part where the author deliberately stops things so she can carefully explain what the sister's husband's full name is and what his relationship with the sister is like, I knew I couldn't continue.
Everything about the writing and execution was amateur and it's too distracting for me to continue. It's too bad because I can't seem to find a well written MM sports car racing romance, but my hunt will continue.