I’d like to thank the author and her team for the opportunity to read an ARC in exchange for an honest review. I appreciate the effort and creativity that went into crafting the story, and there surely is potential here. However, while I found certain aspects interesting (dragons bound to their human form is a new take), I also encountered many issues and shortcomings that affected my overall reading experience. I’d like to address them in order to provide constructive feedback for the author and so other readers know what to expect.
Firstly, I think I may have received an unedited version of the book. There were so many grammatical errors, punctuation errors, syntax errors, contradictory sentences, etc. I was making highlights and notes on my Kindle version as I read (in the event that the author might want to be aware of these issues), and I was having to stop and make a note every other page or so. It got to be so tedious that I had to change my strategy to only highlighting major issues that wouldbe obvious to the average reader. By the end of the book, I had 142 highlighted errors. I also highlighted some sentences that I’d have to re-read two or three times to understand what was trying to be said because the wording was so off. At one point, the spelling of a character’s name changed. The author was calling the capitol city both the “capitol” and the “capital,” and sometimes both spellings would be used on the same page. Also, sometimes it was capitalized, and the next paragraph it wasn't. Issues like this could be remedied with a good editor.
In terms of the story itself, I did not enjoy the complete lack of world-building or development of any events or characters. It was very “info-dumpy” in parts and nothing felt well thought-out. Things happened one after another, but it felt very forced because there was no development of anything. It was like “... and then this happened… and all of a sudden, so-and-so was saving me… and then this happened… and then we’re finally there, and BOOM, this happens, and then I cry, and then this happens, and all of a sudden BAM, and then this happened…” Like, it felt like hours would have passed between some of these events being described, but these multiple events were taking place within the span of a few paragraphs. I felt like I was almost reading a rough outline of what the author wanted to cover in a chapter, not the actual written chapter itself. The main female character was probably the worst protagonist I’ve ever read. She was impossible to like. She was never developed as a character, and the only thing we ever learned about her was that she cried over literally everything, could never think rationally (despite supposedly being trained at a prestigious knight academy that only took the best of the best), and had an unnatural, creepy obsession with her brother. Jenna was honestly so dumb she was infurating to read. She was unable to see the larger picture in other characters' actions and would hold it against them and cry about it constantly. To make an analogy, it was like if one of us were in a bad car accident and a passerby had to break our window to pull us out to save our life. If this had happened to Jenna, instead of saying “Wow, thanks for breaking my window to save my life,” she would have surely said “OMG, why did he break my window? Does he not love me? If he did, he would respect my property. I can never trust him again. Why would he do that to me?!? This is an unforgivable act!” and then she’d burst into tears and bury her face in her brother’s chest. If you don't like hyper-emotional female leads, this book is not for you. Jenna would cry multiple times in a single chapter for most chapters of the book. When I got 92% done, I started counting how many times she'd burst into tears. Within the last action scene and final ending/closing scene, she cried seven separate times. SEVEN. Another issue was that the romantic relationships in the story were so forced it was painful. I never felt invested in any of her relationships, but especially not with her main love interest, because we knew almost nothing about him except he liked to scowl. And I would bet money that the author doesn’t have any male siblings, because the way Jenna would act toward her brother had me thinking it was foreshadowing that they were going to end up together as a couple. Like, we’re talking during car rides, while sitting between her brother and her love interest, she’d snuff her love interest and scoot closer to her brother and they’d ride with his arms around her shoulders and her head on his shoulder. They’d hug in the morning, she’d take a shower, and then she’d get out 10 minutes later and run up to him and jump into his arms again, following by them doing some dumb handshake or hair-ruffling. They would ask about each other the minute they woke up, they'd say things to each other like "I belong to you and you belong to me." We were able to tell from the first chapter or so that they had a close bond- we didn’t need to have them spooning and hugging and cuddling every time they were together in order to drive the point home. I was super weirded out, and I was convinced they were going to profess their romantic love for one another any minute. The largest missed opportunity in the book was the lack of development and exploration of the villains ("Shadow dragons"). They were intriguing, but we never knew what they really even were, how they came to be, how their magic worked… nothing. They were just the "Shadow dragon" bad guys, and that's all we got in that department.
Despite my many criticisms, I think there was potential due to the unique spin on dragons and the exploration that could be done with the connection cords. The draft I read would serve as a good outline for the author to dive back in and really start developing the world, characters, settings, events, and plot. All of the glaring issues aren’t unfixable, and with a good editor and some elbow grease, this book could end up being acceptable.