It wasn't till I took my first breath as a vampire that i realized that every hope and dream that i had came true.I looked to mu creator and thanked him for granting my wish my dream.I turned and kissed him on his soft lips.Now and eternity was made better by his presence.I looked at him with gentle eyes ;His skin now was warm to the touch.He locked eyes with me and moved with me as I swayed making sure that he was the only thing i saw.We were so fluid;Moving without the slightest flaw.
The story its self was pretty good.There are a lot of printing mistakes and off sentences almost as if the writer did not have someone else proof read before printing.Over all not bad for a first timer...