Painful to read.
The writing seems formative, as if written by an AI. There's such little warmth or feeling to any of the writing. I hate giving authors poor reviews, but.. I couldn't get past ten pages before skipping ahead to see if it got better.
Pros- The story concept is pretty nice. There is potential. The story is pretty short, so even if the writing style makes you want to pull your hair out, at least you can get through it pretty quick.
Author really needs an editor and some mentors who can help teach a more natural writing style, as it's really the only main issue.