The Mafia King: To Insanity

The Mafia King #1

by S H, K.D. (Editor)

Two broken souls scarred with wounds from their demons, playing a dangerous game of trust and love.

Isabella Knight is a girl running from her traumatic dark past where fate leads her to Vincenzo King the boss of a feared Mafia in New York who is also living in his darkness will they be fall in love or drive each other to insanity?

Genres: Dark Romance, Mafia Romance, Romance, Dark, Enemies To Lovers, Smut, Forced Proximity

500 pages, Kindle Edition

Published November 7, 2022

Reviews

[Abby Dickerson · Rating 1 out of 5]

i gotta stop taking tiktok recommendations

[K · Rating 2 out of 5]

This book is in desperate need of an editor. I lost count of how many spelling and grammatical errors there are. The layout of the book reminds me of those apps where you pay for each chapter. There are no chapter numbers and new chapters start on the same page as the previous one. There is also a lot of extra drama that could have been broken up into another book to cut down on the length of this book. I think with an and editor this book could be great.

[Maria · Rating 1 out of 5]

Not every book recommended on TikTok is good, and this is one of those

[Charlize]

dnf at 2%
like i know 21 pages really isn’t much in a almost 500 page book but like i just couldn’t do it. like for 19 of those pages i was really confused like i had to check that i wasn’t in the middle of a series or something because like something would happen and then a sentence later i would swear we were in a completely different situation. like i get that she was meant to be confident or whatever but aside from the grammatical errors i literally could not read past the line "I bet my boobs aren't the only things that are big" like i audibly said nope and closed the book on my kindle. i’m sure me in my wattpad era i would have really liked this book but current me just simply can’t do it like that line may just be one of the worst things i have ever read.

[toilandtrouble · Rating 2 out of 5]

i have never in my life dnfed a book in the middle, at the start i was loving the book i felt like isabella was doing too much at the airport scene but i decided to ignore that shit and continue reading. Then i had a few comments but also decided to ignore that because maybe it will get better you know? but halfway through i was soo done with it the characters were starting to piss me off, there was literally no plot happening it was just isabella and that vincenzo (probably didnt write his name correctly) guy arguing nothing interesting was happening, And you know i can live with that okay. but the writing was soo bad i actually had to take a few minutes between each paragraph to understand what was going on who said what and what happened it was just getting too much like the book had no plot and the characterrs felt …forced maybe? idk but all of that and i just kept pushing myself saying its gonna get better some books just start of so slow but the amount of typos and bad writing was my last straw that i just dnfed i even just started looking at the last few chapters to see what has happened and it still felt like the writing was bad and that nothing changed at all and dont get me started on how long the book was it really DID NOT need to be dragged on that long, how can a book be so long yet no details were mentioned barely any characters description i swear if you asked me about the charterers appearance i would tell you one has a beard and the other god knows how she looks like. overall i think the book had potential and so did the characters i love me some badass charcters but they were doing too much and i just felt at some point that it was unnecessary the amount of scenes i had to tell myself to ignore was too much. it was sosoosos cringy and the lack of using punctuation was insanee i can not tell you how much i had a hard time reading because of the lack of punctuation. i can really see this book starting of on wattpad. but if the book was ever re edited LIKE REALLLYYY WELL then i might think of rereading because as i said it had potential

[Kaitlyn Hughes · Rating 4 out of 5]

It was good, started out on wattpad then author moved to kindle. There was a few typos but it was still a good book.

[Alanna · Rating 3 out of 5]

The edit is rough on this one. Plot was great. But writing needed to be more thoroughly proofed.

[Ardisa · Rating 5 out of 5]

I read it on wattpad and I liked it, now I'm waiting for the second book.

[Georgia X · Rating 4 out of 5]

i read this ages ago and i remember loving it until every possible terrible trope could happen happened.like wtf,also the book was poorly written but oh well

i’m going to do some research on whether he gets his memory back before starting the second book xx

[Mariam K]

Okay this book was kinda good but it wasn’t written as good as other books, I couldn’t finish it

[a · Rating 3 out of 5]

I cant even put all the problems with this book into one review but ill try my best

CONS
- The main love interest were constantly arguing
- Isabella always biting her lip like give it a rest
- Multiple grammar errors constantly appearing
- No chapters just a block of pages and when something happened it would be stated e.g , “START OF SEX SCENE” as if we didn’t know already
- It felt like a sloppy wattpad written book
- Safe to say that the book needed an editor

PROS
- Lorenzo was funny and i loved him
- Strong fmc
- Everyone in the mafia loved and feared the fmc
- Bond between Maria and Isabella
- Bond between the 3 boys and Isabella
- The very few romance aspects

[Filippa Skog · Rating 5 out of 5]

Amazing book!!

So first of all I want to say that The Mafia King was the first mafia book that I read and that was before I started reading "real" books if I think right I read it in 2022 in December. But anyway now to the review. (I reread the book to read the second one)

So to start we need to talk about the characters, for starters, Isabella is a queen for how strong-minded she is but also how she got through the things she did in the past and also in the book, but also how she handles Vincenzo. I also love how the author did not do her wrong in her character like she would say shit like "I'm so weak" but instead she was a strong woman. Another thing about the romance and tension that was always there from the first look, In that It wasn't purely a sexual connection but was also an emotional which I loved. Isabella as a character is also very stubborn and will never listen to another man and that also means Vincenzo.

I'm a very emotional person so this book is a ride with emotions, and that's also because when you think they are happy something happens so they "break up", sometimes I got mad because shit always happens to them and they never get any break or happy ending. But I will still love the book.
This book also has some spice in it and yeah I love that too.

One last thing was that Isabella wasn't new to the mafia, Vincenzo thought she was innocent till she told him she was dragon.

I loved how they drove each other to insanity.

[athousandbeds · Rating 1 out of 5]

I DNF at 2% which may seem a little extreme, but the writing was very reminiscent of my Wattpad days. It wasn't necessarily bad, but it felt exactly like reading on Wattpad (before the ad era). I know that the author did come from Wattpad, and this book also came from Wattpad, so I give her credit. Prop's to her for making a published book. However, I just wasn't feeling the book. There were a good amount of typos, and I constantly had to re-read sentences because I didn't know what was going on. The premise of the book is intriguing, and I would definitely give this book another try if it were revamped a little.

[Jess · Rating 1 out of 5]

I’m not being funny but for the life of me I cannot finish this book. I have no idea how it was published on Kindle- perhaps the plot is good but I only got a few chapters in so I have no idea.
The spelling and grammar mistakes make me wanna gauge my eyes out. It isn’t surprising that this book comes from Wattpad.
One day, when the grammar and spelling has been reviewed thoroughly, I may try to reread it.

[Sarah Hutchinson · Rating 5 out of 5]

good read

I’m patiently awaiting for book 2.. there’s so much in this book that left unanswered question, the story line is awesome I’m hoping there is some new surprises in store

[Karma · Rating 3 out of 5]

Idk why everyone (i mean the reviews that immediately pop up for me anyways) is hating so bad on this book. Yes it needs an editor to review it but as long as u have 2 brain cells to rub together u can easily figure out which word the author meant to use. To me personally (this is speculation i havent looked into the author) it seems like English may not be the authors first language so idk maybe give em a damn break??

Rating⭐️- 3.5/5
Plot 🗺️- 3.5/5
FMC 💁🏼‍♀️- 3.8/5
MMC💁🏽‍♂️- 4/5
Side characters 👯‍♂️- EASY 5/5. Lorenzo KILLED me
Spice🌶️-2.5/5

I FREAKING LOVED THE DRUNK SCENES. I split my sides cackling. I wanted to be drunk with Lorenzo and the guys 😆 i damn near passed away laughing. Also the turns this book took! Im a hard person to keep engaged with a book and there were times i would speed read thru but overall it kept my interest. I was BIG mad tho about what happened to Vincenzo. HOW DARE THEY DO ME DIRTY LIKE THIS. I jumped to book 2 and now im praying this man gets it together bc i didnt read this book for them to not be together.

The FMC is also hilarious and slightly unhinged. She the Dragon and she will end u if u touch whats hers 😈

[Venus · Rating 2 out of 5]

After reaching about a third way through the book, I physically could not force my eyes to continue reading. They were shutting on their own accord.

I don't expect formatting/grammar perfection especially from an indie author who may not be able to access professional resources to edit their books. (I myself suck at grammar as one can tell from this review, but the book was this x 10 unreadable). The formatting could be fixed easily with minimal effort. It would take one round of quick editing to get rid of the simple/BIG mistakes.

If you have KU, and don't mind the imperfections, then go ahead!
I don't suggest buying a paperback as it almost doesn't feel like you're reading an actual novel.
The issue may be because the author used to write on wattpad and when transferring to self publishing they didn't fix the formatting. I stopped reading wattpad a few years ago but went on it a couple weeks ago and this looks exactly like copy pasting from the title/subtitles/chapter headings to the very end with no formatting changes.

[Ella :) · Rating 2 out of 5]

I had so many high expectations for this book and was disappointed. The characters' personalities seemed to change constantly from start to finish, If Isabella is the 'Dragon' and can kill multiple men when on a mission, why at the beginning of the book did she need saving multiple times because she "couldn't fight them off"? Don't get me started on how many tropes got thrown into this book some for absolutely no reason. I feel it was unnecessary to include the amnesia trope (I absolutely hate that trope btw), and the pregnancy trope seemed to be squeezed in there just to add more drama to the mix (I love the pregnancy trope when it is done well, this, however, was poorly added and didn't do the trope justice)
I feel Maria's death was also unnecessary and just kind of ruined the story for me. I am continuing the series just for some hope of redemption for this weird mix of a plot.

[Amelia Helms · Rating 1 out of 5]

Had so much potential

Honestly this had great potential to be a very interesting read but I couldn’t get out of the first chapter because of all the grammar and punctuation errors. I did skip to the end to read the about the author and let’s just say, it’s awesome that you are a student and you wanted to bring your dream that you have had since you were 12 to life but for the sake of everyone’s sanity PLEASE take this down and have it edited properly then put it back up and I, along with so many others, will be more than happy to read it and give it a better review. For now though you might want to just stick to nursing school until you can give 100% of yourself to writing.

[mimy · Rating 2 out of 5]

dnf at 52%

Lisennn it was bad, but good. I will love to read it again after it was checed for the misspells and once the story line is more uniformd. Cuz att one point she was cornered in a steet alley by a guy who wanted to rape her, and she kept screaming for help but then 2 weeks later she killed 4 guys one her own while they all hold her at gun point? one moment she is the most fears person the next she is just a girl?

also doing a 360??? no the saying is a U turn or a 180

i really really gave it a shot but she kept changing the story and the dynamics it really feels like when she wrote it she never read the last chapter again and just kept writing forward
like i said i would love to read it again after it was checked by someone cuz the story is original and has a lot of potential

[Ade Stonis · Rating 4 out of 5]

Alright, honestly what the hell did I just read. Did I like it yes, did I hate it yes. I feel like it just dragged on too much. It was a total rollercoaster because as soon as we get one good thing about 12 other bad things came up! It was a constant running and hiding situation and we didn’t even get a proper ending. If I’ma read a 498 page book that has grammar errors and at times was super confusing/ frustrating to read, what’s the point if we don’t even get a semi good ending(aka they didn’t talk in the end). As much as I hated it, there were times that I really like it so I kept reading but once I got to page 400 I honestly only stayed for Lorenzo.

[Tiffany Bumgardner · Rating 1 out of 5]

DNF

TikTok lies.

The writing of this is terrible. It was literally painful to read. The author put freaking subheadings (smut scene, sexual scene, flash back etc) like just call your readers stupid already. I despised it.

The writing was juvenile and many reviews compared to wattpad which I haven’t read but this isn’t book quality. This is word vomit on a page that needs an editor and a lot of work. Character building, plot building and story
Boarding.

I wanted to give this a try I pushed myself to hit 50% but I was flipping through before it ever got there. I can’t force myself to keep trying, I’d rather bang my head off a brick wall.

[Dominique · Rating 3 out of 5]

good story

Characters were great. I just think at some times they kinda blended together with the same style and attributes. I would have liked to see them more separate at points i felt like all of them had the same personality as Isabella like they were the same ppl. I loved the twist and turns and the anxiousness of the story. I loved how it wasn’t a romance that was a month long and it was forever, i like that it was real and took time. There were lots of errors in the writing. It would have been even better if those were fixed. I am ready for the next part though! I need to
know the ending,

[Dallas Walker · Rating 1 out of 5]

Came from booktok… wishing I didn’t.

I’m so sorry. I try to be positive when writing reviews. I understand not all writing styles are the same, nor are the ways books are set up. After all every author has something unique to their style. However this said, I DNF’d part way through chapter 2.

Why? Well, I just couldn’t go on. The Kindle edition was poorly structured, badly edited, and the sentences just didn’t make sense. I had no clue who was talking because the same sentence and paragraph changed often between characters.

Booktok did me dirty

[Lex Wheadon · Rating 2 out of 5]

I can typically push through spelling /grammatical errors and they don’t effect my reading experience… however that is not the case here

I could only make it through the first 10% before I had to DNF. The story line has a TON of potential but it is in desperate need of an editor. I couldn’t follow along with all of the errors and thought maybe I was reading a very rough draft that got published on accident. Would definitely read/finished reading if the book was edited and rereleased though.

[Amber Almanza · Rating 1 out of 5]

tried to keep reading it

I love my dark mafia romance book but everything that’s happens is just one thing after another that just doesn’t make any sense , you don’t the main girls age so ur trying to piece together flash backs, and from the beginning it just didn’t make sense that they had enough money to leave a go across the country but yet stayed by an abusive stepfather but yet both birth parents died so how was there a stepfather … also a lot of grammar mistakes, felt like this book jumped all over the place

[Essie · Rating 2 out of 5]

2.3 / The potential for this to be good is big. Unfortunately, there are so many grammatical errors that it is hard to understand at times. There’s a great amount of commas yet an abundance of run on sentences.
Also, the plot is completely everywhere. Multiple scenes are repeated as if the author forgot they wrote it. Also, the timing was completely off and overall, this book was just terrible in terms of cohesiveness.
HOWEVER, this book reminded me of the old Wattpad books that I used to read - where the writing is terrible but the storyline is captivating.

[Ali Marie · Rating 1 out of 5]

I legitimately wish I could give it no stars. Saw the Author on tiktok bought it big mistake shouldve used KU total waste of money. Extremely cringey. First book ever in my life to DNF. The "im not like other girls" is so strong in this one in the absolute worst way written as a total edgelord. There is no way this wasn't written by a child and the only people saying it's good on tiktok have to be children. Poorly written poorly edited. Try reading your books before theyre published??

[Jenee Westjohn · Rating 3 out of 5]

I want to mark this 5 ⭐️ so bad but the amount of grammatical mistakes is too much. But if you can get past that, please do! The story and world that was built is amazing! Isabella is funny and Lorenzo is the younger brother that can be such a pain.

The author takes us on such a ride building these characters stories and I hope they do not stop writing. I just hope they get an editor or awesome beta team to help them when it comes to formatting/grammar.

[Lesley Baker · Rating 1 out of 5]

could not read

I was so excited to read this book. I had seen some excerpts from it and thought I’m going to love this. Read the first paragraph and thought to myself absolutely not. This book may be great but needs some serious editing. So many grammatical errors just can not get past them. They are everywhere in every sentence. I’m willing to give it another shot if there is ever a time when this gets the proper edit it desperately needs.