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August 31, 2024DNF at 16 pages
Interesting premise, but the writing wasn't up to snuff. My internal editor would not shut up while reading the first two chapters.
Every seen felt like a laundry list of "They did x. They did y. They did z."
Logan pushed open the screen door and closed the front door behind him, locking it n the process. Then he let the screen door close behind him by the hydraulics. The man stepped back half a step to allow Logan to descend the stairs first. Then he followed about two steps behind Logan. Logan could now see a long dark car parked at the curb. He didn't recognize the make and model, but it was clearly expensive. It, too, was way out of place in the neighborhood. At the bottom of the stairs, Logan rounded the corner of the house and walked the depth of the house. Then he crossed the additional 20 yards to the man [sic] door on the back wall of the garage."
And this is just about every paragraph. It's like, "why use one word when I can use many?"
Ross doesn't seem to trust his audience to work out what's happening without lengthy explanations. Every action is catalogued, and every gesture is thoroughly picked apart for all meaning.
The man looked at Logan and smiled, tight-lipped. It suggested that the smile was forced, but there wasn't any solid evidence to prove it was.
Yeah, I kinda got that it was forced from it being tight-lipped...
Or my personal favorite "explain to death":
"Others like you, but not you?" Logan repeated with an abrupt ending to the last word indicating a question.
I hate to pan this book when the author was kind enough to gift a free copy, but a lot of the issues I have could have been solved with an editor.
I won't leave a star rating, since I don't feel I got far enough in to give the book a proper one. Let's leave it at, "This one just isn't for me."
Interesting premise, but the writing wasn't up to snuff. My internal editor would not shut up while reading the first two chapters.
Every seen felt like a laundry list of "They did x. They did y. They did z."
Logan pushed open the screen door and closed the front door behind him, locking it n the process. Then he let the screen door close behind him by the hydraulics. The man stepped back half a step to allow Logan to descend the stairs first. Then he followed about two steps behind Logan. Logan could now see a long dark car parked at the curb. He didn't recognize the make and model, but it was clearly expensive. It, too, was way out of place in the neighborhood. At the bottom of the stairs, Logan rounded the corner of the house and walked the depth of the house. Then he crossed the additional 20 yards to the man [sic] door on the back wall of the garage."
And this is just about every paragraph. It's like, "why use one word when I can use many?"
Ross doesn't seem to trust his audience to work out what's happening without lengthy explanations. Every action is catalogued, and every gesture is thoroughly picked apart for all meaning.
The man looked at Logan and smiled, tight-lipped. It suggested that the smile was forced, but there wasn't any solid evidence to prove it was.
Yeah, I kinda got that it was forced from it being tight-lipped...
Or my personal favorite "explain to death":
"Others like you, but not you?" Logan repeated with an abrupt ending to the last word indicating a question.
I hate to pan this book when the author was kind enough to gift a free copy, but a lot of the issues I have could have been solved with an editor.
I won't leave a star rating, since I don't feel I got far enough in to give the book a proper one. Let's leave it at, "This one just isn't for me."
January 24, 2024
To start with there are a couple (and I mean, literally two) really well written scenes, and a number of ideas and concepts I like. For me the execution is just not there. I don't mean to demean the author by saying this -- because it's not really a bad thing -- but this reads like a YA/Middle grade-level book. And yet, on another level, that is truly being too kind.
I try to give every book five stars because it's an effort just to create a book. The ratings start to fall when the effort doesn't extend to the production of the book. Misspellings, technical and formatting mistakes, and the biggest sin of spending almost an entire book "telling" and not "showing," really reveals that the time wasn't put in to make this as great of an experience for the reader as it could be.
The book is not a waste of time, but I wouldn't recommend it or feel the need to continue in the series. (if there wind up being more.)
*Note: I received a free copy of the book from the author at a writing group meeting.*
I try to give every book five stars because it's an effort just to create a book. The ratings start to fall when the effort doesn't extend to the production of the book. Misspellings, technical and formatting mistakes, and the biggest sin of spending almost an entire book "telling" and not "showing," really reveals that the time wasn't put in to make this as great of an experience for the reader as it could be.
The book is not a waste of time, but I wouldn't recommend it or feel the need to continue in the series. (if there wind up being more.)
*Note: I received a free copy of the book from the author at a writing group meeting.*
December 19, 2023
I really enjoyed this book. I was gifted an original signed copy, as if by magic!
My philosophy department usually goes to the local brewery, North country, for some drinks after a guest speaker visits our school. One night I pulled this book from a shelf and was reading random pages to my group, not thinking anything of it.
A short while after, during a different meeting, as I was leaving north country, I glanced inside the free little library right outside and must have been noticed because when I got back to my car the author of this book drove up to me and asked me my name and if I liked to read. I said yeah! And he handed me a signed copy. He drove off saying magic is real and I agreed! It definitely felt like a magical moment.
I finally had the chance to read this over winter break and it was a page turner! My favorite character was midnight (: I lost my little black cat last winter and I was happy that midnight was saved from the shelter.
Thank you for gifting me with your creativity, I hope others can get enjoyment from this fascinating story as well 😊
My philosophy department usually goes to the local brewery, North country, for some drinks after a guest speaker visits our school. One night I pulled this book from a shelf and was reading random pages to my group, not thinking anything of it.
A short while after, during a different meeting, as I was leaving north country, I glanced inside the free little library right outside and must have been noticed because when I got back to my car the author of this book drove up to me and asked me my name and if I liked to read. I said yeah! And he handed me a signed copy. He drove off saying magic is real and I agreed! It definitely felt like a magical moment.
I finally had the chance to read this over winter break and it was a page turner! My favorite character was midnight (: I lost my little black cat last winter and I was happy that midnight was saved from the shelter.
Thank you for gifting me with your creativity, I hope others can get enjoyment from this fascinating story as well 😊
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