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Moon Wolf
During many battles there had been reports of wolves or warrior’s wearing wolf skin on all fours fighting alongside those on foot. One legend even suggests that there will come a time and need of a Warrior who would be female. She will be the one to unite the Native American People as a whole and warriors of all shapes and sizes will battle alongside her to defeat evil that threatens the very lively of humanity and the Earth. About a hundred or so years have passed since the legend was first told and due to genetic defects and disease, natural shifters or purebloods among Native Americans have decreased dramatically. My name is Niamh (pronounced Neev) Kimberly Indu Wa-yah and I am the Warrior Woman. Sometimes the Myths, Legends, and Folklore are true.
228 pages, Paperback
First published February 14, 2013
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July 28, 2013
This short story was in desperate need of an editor, good friends to proof read and make suggestions, or quality beta readers.
Indu, the heroine of our story came from mixed lineage, Native American Indian and Irish. The premise of the story as stated was:
“She will be the one to unite the Native American People as a whole and warriors of all shapes and sizes will battle alongside her to defeat evil that threatens the very lively of humanity and the Earth.”
I thought – cool that sounds pretty good. We started out with wolf shifters, great runs in the woods, one in touch with nature, some Native American lore, and a young girl who did not want to embrace her destiny. We had several deaths of family members, spent some time in Ireland, where the reader is exposed to some Celtic folk lore, and our young girl learns & trains in the ways of the Celtic lore. Time passes, the family moves back to the states, Indu goes off to college, still not wanting to embrace her destiny, and shortly after graduation we have more family deaths. Indu now alone without family, starts to have young men show up seeking her favor, and desiring to be her mate. Somehow and I’m not sure where, or why, the story takes a really BIG turn, and we now have werewolves, vampires, sprites, and faries entering our plot. Indu is bitten by a vampire and becomes a hybrid. ( the line from the book: but when you wake know that you will be the first hybrid ever in history.” “Hybrid?” I thought. She replied “Half Wolf Warrior and half Celtic Vampire. ) uh…so how did we get here? And do we really want to be here?
Ok the story has shifted big time; we have lots of testosterone vying to be Indu's mate (werewolf and vampires now included), Indu ‘s powers are growing and she whips these men into shape, and flatly states she does not want a mate. Needless to say, a mating does occur, and it happened like out of nowhere! The story continues to deviate from its stated goal or plot, lets see we have a "long distance rape scene" as Trevor flexes his power over Indu, then a long drawn out kidnapping, and torture scene is included that has nothing to do with the story line of "uniting the Native American Peoples"; after the rescue of Indu, Cleo and Tear, everyone seems to find their intended mate (all within 4 days of this awful event mind you); then they burn Trevor’s bar down, and the story just ends… The author eludes that this is the beginning of a series, well cliff hangers I understand, but this books ending is just not satisfying.
I felt the writing didn't flow well, the story timeline was always in question for me, I was never sure what country I was in, and there was little connection, emotionally, or physical between the couples, in fact there was never really a defined hero for Indu for the first 3/4's of the book, it's not until after the mating that we now have a person we can attach to our herione, and begin to hope they have their HEA! There was no consistent plot, I felt like I was reading a story with ADHD. The sex scenes seemed out of place, and poorly written and did not bind our characters together as couples (example, you've been kidnapped, chained to a wall, tortured, beaten, your sister has died at the hands of the captors, and 4 days later you mate with a strange shifter you meet in the woods, loose your virginity, have awesome go on forever orgasms, and exchange the "I love you phrase" - really! ). There were redundant passages, incorrect words used, and so many spelling errors.
No people have been united, no great battles have occured, Indu is not a practicing vet (guess she really didn't need college), the murder of her sister has not been avenged, and I haven't had a well written sex scene!
I usually don’t harp on spelling and grammatical errors as I for one can’t spell well, but I ended up making a list of some of the funnier ones….
The chief had decided that we should have a bomb fire to welcome our guest to the ranch.
I caught my composer
He licked my lips coxing them opened as he deepened it.
As he sat them in the floor next to the bed,
He continued to walk to her, when he was beside of her he sat down looking at their reflection in the water.
rode with me in my Truck. (why is truck capitalized?)
we went downstairs. When we were at the bottom we were met with stairs and growling.
He put his hands firmly on my waist as he growled a dominate growl.
I regained my composer and said “This is Drew,
so we can speak in an atmosphere that isn’t so laud?”
As we pasted Liam at the bar I glanced and saw Triad and Trina speaking with him as he showed teeth and nodded in our direction.
” I said “could you be any vagor?”
How dare he enter feared with Indu and me that night,
Please bring the editor back, take your original plot and develop it without all of the crazy “mash up” of PNR/UF plots found in other books out there, integrate the cross cultural folk lore better or get off of that path.
This book was so close to being a DNF, but I stuck it out…not sure it was worth it for me in the long run though, a one star read for me
Indu, the heroine of our story came from mixed lineage, Native American Indian and Irish. The premise of the story as stated was:
“She will be the one to unite the Native American People as a whole and warriors of all shapes and sizes will battle alongside her to defeat evil that threatens the very lively of humanity and the Earth.”
I thought – cool that sounds pretty good. We started out with wolf shifters, great runs in the woods, one in touch with nature, some Native American lore, and a young girl who did not want to embrace her destiny. We had several deaths of family members, spent some time in Ireland, where the reader is exposed to some Celtic folk lore, and our young girl learns & trains in the ways of the Celtic lore. Time passes, the family moves back to the states, Indu goes off to college, still not wanting to embrace her destiny, and shortly after graduation we have more family deaths. Indu now alone without family, starts to have young men show up seeking her favor, and desiring to be her mate. Somehow and I’m not sure where, or why, the story takes a really BIG turn, and we now have werewolves, vampires, sprites, and faries entering our plot. Indu is bitten by a vampire and becomes a hybrid. ( the line from the book: but when you wake know that you will be the first hybrid ever in history.” “Hybrid?” I thought. She replied “Half Wolf Warrior and half Celtic Vampire. ) uh…so how did we get here? And do we really want to be here?
Ok the story has shifted big time; we have lots of testosterone vying to be Indu's mate (werewolf and vampires now included), Indu ‘s powers are growing and she whips these men into shape, and flatly states she does not want a mate. Needless to say, a mating does occur, and it happened like out of nowhere! The story continues to deviate from its stated goal or plot, lets see we have a "long distance rape scene" as Trevor flexes his power over Indu, then a long drawn out kidnapping, and torture scene is included that has nothing to do with the story line of "uniting the Native American Peoples"; after the rescue of Indu, Cleo and Tear, everyone seems to find their intended mate (all within 4 days of this awful event mind you); then they burn Trevor’s bar down, and the story just ends… The author eludes that this is the beginning of a series, well cliff hangers I understand, but this books ending is just not satisfying.
I felt the writing didn't flow well, the story timeline was always in question for me, I was never sure what country I was in, and there was little connection, emotionally, or physical between the couples, in fact there was never really a defined hero for Indu for the first 3/4's of the book, it's not until after the mating that we now have a person we can attach to our herione, and begin to hope they have their HEA! There was no consistent plot, I felt like I was reading a story with ADHD. The sex scenes seemed out of place, and poorly written and did not bind our characters together as couples (example, you've been kidnapped, chained to a wall, tortured, beaten, your sister has died at the hands of the captors, and 4 days later you mate with a strange shifter you meet in the woods, loose your virginity, have awesome go on forever orgasms, and exchange the "I love you phrase" - really! ). There were redundant passages, incorrect words used, and so many spelling errors.
No people have been united, no great battles have occured, Indu is not a practicing vet (guess she really didn't need college), the murder of her sister has not been avenged, and I haven't had a well written sex scene!
I usually don’t harp on spelling and grammatical errors as I for one can’t spell well, but I ended up making a list of some of the funnier ones….
The chief had decided that we should have a bomb fire to welcome our guest to the ranch.
I caught my composer
He licked my lips coxing them opened as he deepened it.
As he sat them in the floor next to the bed,
He continued to walk to her, when he was beside of her he sat down looking at their reflection in the water.
rode with me in my Truck. (why is truck capitalized?)
we went downstairs. When we were at the bottom we were met with stairs and growling.
He put his hands firmly on my waist as he growled a dominate growl.
I regained my composer and said “This is Drew,
so we can speak in an atmosphere that isn’t so laud?”
As we pasted Liam at the bar I glanced and saw Triad and Trina speaking with him as he showed teeth and nodded in our direction.
” I said “could you be any vagor?”
How dare he enter feared with Indu and me that night,
Please bring the editor back, take your original plot and develop it without all of the crazy “mash up” of PNR/UF plots found in other books out there, integrate the cross cultural folk lore better or get off of that path.
This book was so close to being a DNF, but I stuck it out…not sure it was worth it for me in the long run though, a one star read for me
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