I bought this book for a $1 at a library book sale. On that note, I found lots of issues/inconsistencies with this stories, which follow below.
The story itself was boring, in my opinion. I had a hard time staying focused on it because I didn't feel much was going on. I'd say the majority of the book I was skimming looking for the action. Any surprises or twists the author might have thought she included in this story, yeah, there were none. This story was too predictable.
Question/Comments:
Is the author from England? I'll go into detail about that further down.
At the beginning of the story, Victoria is talking to her lawyer. He's going in and out because of the connection. To fix the connection error, he changes channel. Huh? On a cell phone?
Victoria didn't know that John was a former marine until she meets up with him at her house and takes into account the name of his agency--Semper Fi investigations. Strangely though, in several of her flashbacks she refers to him as her marine.
There was a BIG mistake relating to Esme. While the reader doesn't know how old Esme was when Victoria decided to take her to England, the fact Esme speaks with a British accent would not happen, even if she'd learned to talk while in England. If one of the parents speaks with an American accent, the child will have an American accent. I can't imagine Victoria was gone all the time, hence she gave up her dream job to take care of Esme, that Esme was only with her nanny and it was her that taught her to speak. And why would Esme refer to Victoria as 'mummy' not 'mommy'?
Speaking of Esme, there are a lot of phrases and words that a five-year-old would not be saying. For example: "I'm tidy;" refers to her dress as a frock; "Oh, you," when John tells her her doll is almost as cute as her; "Yes, lovely isn't it," regarding her dolls dress; or when she's telling John why American Girl dolls are so popular--"...part of the appeal lies in the books..." This is not five-year-old speak.
The first time John leaves Victoria's house at the beginning of the story, we're told that he was angry and sped through the gates as they were about to close. Why would they have been opened to begin with?
How does a seventeen-year-old boy not know that he could have women pay him for sex? I could understand if his parents were strict, so he was always at home and shelter from society, but that wasn't the case with Jared. Yet, he somehow realized when he and John woke Deedee up the one night--her answering the door in a see-through nightie--that she'd checked John's crotch to see if he had a hard-on. No sense there.
The reader learns that John has a large penis. Yup. And it's during his highschool years (where did these young guys--John and Jared grow up), that he learns there are females waiting for the type of equipment he had to offer. Really? Isn't that what females look for in general unless they're lesbian, asexual, etc.?
Why do authors that involve the military/soldiers always have the male soldiers as killers? No wonder the majority of the world believe all soldiers go overseas and kill people.
Victoria is reminicising about the past with John. She says how he's always dressed nicely. When they'd go to the beach he'd wear nice shorts, tank tops, and t-shirts--the majority being made of silk. Who wears silk to the beach?
There were some questionable words/phrases: dinked, 'tony friends,'" Jared didn't give a 'rip', "this was all dicked up."
Deedee decides she's going to plan John and Victoria's engagement party. Why did no one simply stop her? God forbid, they can't have an extended engagement (whether pretend or not). That right there tells you that they'll end up marrying, whether the reader realized that or not.
Speaking of marriage (not that I really was), why did they say anything to Esme? Victoria doesn't want to lie to her daughter, yet who would Esme have heard about the engagement news from? It sounds like she's always with her nurse (who knows the truth). Yes, saying it's a pretend engagement won't get a five-year-old's hopes up.
Victoria states that if she had to chose between protecting Jared or Esme, she'd chose Esme. Of course, Esme is her daughter, but Jared is the one who needs protection at the moment. Strangely, she states this right before her and John go in to talk to Esme about the pretend engagement.
Why did the author make PJ so young? Yes, shes' only about 4-5 years younger than Jared, but when there's an almost eighteen-year-old boy/man getting boners from a recently turned thirteen-year-old girl, gross...innappropriate. He comments that it probably would have happened had it been any girl even though he thinks of her more as his sister. That was somewhat disturbing as well, especially if she'd been younger.
How long was John living at Victoria's before doing any real work towards finding Jared? It seemed like he was more focused on her father's death, especially since he stated he was really good at finding runaways.
Victoria is introducing John to her friends Pam and Frank. They talk about her father's service and then about golf. Frank mentions two guys that had been at the service who he and John should golf with. For whatever reason, this upsets Victoria and I have no clue why. "Well that was amazingly thoughtless...But he (Frank) wouldn't hurt you for the world, Tori." She ends up stating that only she was allowed to badmouth her father. I've reread that scene and see nowhere when Frank said anything bad about her father.
John doesn't want Victoria to go with him to Denver while he looks for Jared. Yes, because him going alone and attempting to confront Jared is a good idea since the kid doesn't know him and knows the police are looking for him.
After getting Jared off the hook for his father's murder, were the cops involved in finding the real killer at all?