Every time I go to the library, I pick up a book by an author I’m unfamiliar with. Sometimes I find someone I like but probably 80% of the time I’m disappointed. I had hoped to enjoy “Burn Out” since Ms. Muller has several novels under her belt and I was hoping, if I liked this book, there’d be a big catalogue I could delve into.
This book started out pretty good…but went downhill quickly.
Positives:
It was a very easy read, very fast moving. Yet, despite that, with only 100 pages remaining (probably another hour and a half) I decided to give up. That's all I got.
Negatives:
One) The story started out with a good premise. The rancher and friend of our protagonist, Sharon McCone has his niece murdered. Sharon, who apparently is unsure what she wants to do with her life, is unsure if she wants to get involved. She does (no surprise) but okay, good stuff, interesting premise.
However, Ms. Muller kept adding more and more and more characters. The story went off in so many directions it was hard to keep track of. After 200 pages, with only 100 pages remaining, I gave up. I couldn’t keep track of who was who and how everything tied in
Two) Writing style. This is just my opinion, of course, but I found Ms. Muller’s style very very choppy. She constantly leave words out and much of the novel is sentence fragments. Sometimes, that’s okay. But when the bulk of the novel reads like bullet points, it’s a big negative for me. For example (this is not direct from the book but you’ll get the idea.) **Woke up. Bacon and eggs for breakfast. Showered. Dressed. Went to see Susan. Cloudy. Traffic***
Ironically, and what I found very unprofessional was not only did the author write like that but characters actually talked like that. Example:
“What can you tell me about Janet?”
“Sweet. Funny. Silly bit smart. Pretty.”
UGH!!!!
You get the idea.
Another thing she did was write certain scenes like a play: Example:
At the kitchen table when the phone rang.
“Good morning. How are you?” Steve
Very annoying…in my opinion anyway.
One more thing that I also found annoying is the fact that the protagonist and her husband call each other by their last name. “Hey McCone.” “Hey Ripinsky.”
Hey Muller, how about dialogue that rings true, okay!
This book was written in 2008, yet I wonder if it was written 15 years earlier and the author just dug the rough draft out of a box and sent it to her publisher without updating it. Or better yet, how does her editor allow things like this to go through.
The protagonist constantly says, “I called her on my cellular phone.” When was the last time you heard someone say “cellular phone.” By 2008, people called it “my cell” or “my phone” or “my cell phone.” But cellular phone??? What’s next, watching her television set in living color and listening to music on her hi-fi stereo system???
The protagonist looks up things online. Oh, wait, no she doesn’t. She “goes onto the net.” Again, when was the last time someone said “the net.” I havent heard it called that since that Sandra Bullock movie by the same name, probably 20+ plus years ago.
I also laughed at the fact that Sharon McCone, our protagonist who runs her own security firm still (even in 2008) 1) still uses dial-up, and 2) still has an answering machine and not voice-mail.
Also, not to split hairs, but the protagonist tells us something like “I went on the net and Google told me that so and so had a criminal record.” Well…not really. Google is only a search engine. This wouldn’t be a big deal if this was the only thing I found laughable but it detracts from any realism.
Three) Ms. Muller, do a little research. Your readers will thank you. In one part, our protagonist is dealing with a detective in Las Vegas who works for, as the author says, “The LVPD.” WRONG!! It’s the LVMPD (Las Vegas Metro Police Department). And if you live in Las Vegas, it’s called “Metro.” No one calls it the police or the cops. Its Metro. “Slow down, there’s Metro.” Hell, dial 9-1-1 and they answer “Metro Dispatch.”
That may seem petty but it would only take the author 30 seconds of online research ( or should I say looking it up on the net and being told by Google) that it’s Metro. Other authors, like Michael Connelly or Brian Freeman or CJ Box who have written scenes dealing with police in Vegas call it Metro. Why cant Ms, Muller??? It takes away realism.
We all speak differently based on what part of the country we live. Some places drink a Coke, some a soda, some a pop. A hero, a hoagie and a sub are all the same thing, just depends where you live. A freeway, highway, parkway and expressway are all the same thing. Again, it just depends where you live. If you live in NY, you take the train, San Francisco you take the BART or Cal-Trans, LA you take the Metro Rail. Just like in Vegas, the cops are called Metro.
Also, she is writing one scene where our protagonist visits the house of someone in Nevada. The person’s front yard is not grass bur rather rocks, pebbles or cactus. This is common practice if you live in the southwest due to water restrictions. Anyway, as our protagonist visits this person with rocks and cactus in the front yard, the author actually writes, “I think it’s called westernized.”
HUH???
Anyone who lives in NV or AZ or NM or so CAL knows its called "desert landscaping." Again, do some research. It shows very lazy writing.
I really wanted to like this book and this author but sadly didn’t. The basis for a good plot was there and perhaps with a better author this could have been an enjoyable read