While the plot is well laid and there are a handful of likeable characters, there are several issues with this book, that although the Author is new to this craft, can’t be overlooked.
The dialogue is often rushed and sloppy, characters always know everything the second it becomes relevant to the conversation at hand, chance meetings occur and strangers divulge crucial information to forward the plot several times, for no rhyme or reason. Because characters know everything about any topic that is relevant, there is little intrigue or tension, nor any mystery or things to get excited about.
Most notable to me, the tense of the writing also slips a few times “Ayleen was vs Ayleen is”.
There are also a few moments near the end that made me groan, particularly some odd set ups for future novels.
Like many books, the story stands well for the first 80% and unfortunately takes a nosedive in the final pages. I was particularly disappointed in the resolution with the main villain, and the epilogue.
All in all, the Author should be commended for the obstacles he overcame while writing this book. It inspired me to purchase and read his first novel. Despite its flaws, there is the bones of a good story here, and I hope the sequel is able to improve upon the issues of the first book.