I was in the midst of writing this review when Goodreads crashed, so here’s just a quick rundown of what I didn’t like:
- Our female main character consistently lusts after her quasi step father, who is NOT the love interest. He is the love interest’s father. She fantasizes about this guy seeing her and her boyfriend (his SON) getting it on.
- There’s a way to write teen sex scenes (or near sex scenes). YA romance does this so well (Jenn Bennett, Talia Hibbert, etc), but this is not a teen romance! This is a new adult romance meant to be hot and spicy for adult readers. In flashbacks, these characters are 14 and 15, and the male lead (15 yo) is consistently written as sexy for an adult audience. Really skeeved me out. Same with the “present day” - they are only 17 and 18 years old, which was such a jolt while reading explicit sex scenes. Why not just age up the characters a couple of years so adult readers aren’t reading about explicit sex between minors?
- There is a very drawn out sexual assault scene. Just because you can, doesn’t mean you should. Not every detail needs to be written for a scene to come across as scary, horrifying, or reprehensible. Less is more.
- Setting - where are we? What country? And why is it raining almost every single time the characters go outside?
- Repetitive gestures - the main characters do not move naturally. At first, some straddling, sucking in the neck, pressing abdomen into back, is standard in a new adult romance. But every single time the characters are interacting, even if the scene should not be sexual?
- Continuity Errors - happens throughout the book, but the most glaring was when the male lead has taken off his pants and belt buckle, only for him to take them off again in the same exact scene a couple pages later. Characters actions should be kept track!
- Thin Relationships - every single one of them. We don’t see the main couple have too many big conversations. What do they have in common, aside from lots of sexual attraction? No proof within the text that this couple would actually make it. Same with the mother/daughter relationship, Tate’s one friendship, and her interactions with her quasi step dad. We’re told about their dynamics, but they’re never shown. And, any tension or conflict is wrapped up much too quickly with no payoff.