This book had all the makings of a five star read. "Feminist thriller". Murder mystery. Sister rivalry. A plain midwestern girl trying to enter an elite, inaccessible society of women. Sounds like some good fucking food. Except this is what I gleaned from the synopsis, not what the book actually holds.
The Herd itself, possibly the most exciting aspect of the story and one which has the most wasted potential, is nothing more than wallpaper. Glitzy backdrop to a mundane story. I would have loved to read a story actually set in The Herd-- in fact I felt I had signed up to read this story, and then felt cheated. The Herd (as a setting) is just brimming with possibilities, it literally makes me mad that none of the other hundred better directions were explored. Complicated dynamics amongst the founders. Secrets and cliques amongst its members. Or how about the EXTREMELY low hanging fruit of the fact that this place that claims to support "women and marginalized genders" is just another inaccessible Goop-like space for rich white women, so exclusive that a light skinned brown MIDDLE EASTERN WOMAN is constantly othered. Are there no black women at the Herd? No trans women? (Nope, there aren't.) I would have loved to see that explored, challenged, threatened, taken apart.
A few other alternate storylines: (sorry, I was so bored reading my mind was constantly wandering and "fixing"): The Titan or whatever that company was called tries to acquire the Herd, makes offers, maybe threatens them?? a-la Burlesque (lol) and its members try to put up a fight. Or do some nefarious shit and destroy the Fortune 500 corporation threatening to destroy them and their values, even if they burn in the process-- now there's a feminist thriller. Or, alternately (similar to the actual book) Eleanor gives into the deal and the rest of the Herd actually has to sit in the consequences of that decision, and we watch it lose everything that made it special, watch resentment fester towards Eleanor, watch her crumble in the face of her decision. OR we actually see a desperate Katie who isn't friends with the Herd's founders but only the little sister, just desperate to get into this exclusive group, willing to do anything, enchanted, only to discover darkness (a la Secret History). Or, ah, the Anti-Herd, utterly underutilized, actually does something, or doesn't (because who needs to read about white men's take on women) but they're an actual presence in the story somehow. Maybe the Herd is also a secret society that goes about finding these men and destroying their lives. (Ripped off Dietland's Jennifer, certainly, but there's a feminist thriller.) OR Mikki isn't a fixture in the Herd, but a woman with dignity who cut off her thieving friend after she stole her idea, but comes back with a vengeance a decade later-- an actual lawsuit? something more underhanded? Another idea I had about a quarter of the way through-- how interesting it would have been had the book been set in the same place but a different time; a decade back or a decade further. A decade back we get to watch Eleanor (but a well realized Eleanor) graduate Harvard with stars in her eyes, steal her friend's idea, step on necks to rise ahead, but we're twisted up as we read her ascent as we are also full of admiration for her as she fights for women. (Because let's be real here she's not fighting for marginalized genders, lol). A decade forward-- assuming Eleanor actually goes to Mexico without telling anyone instead of dying, and leaves the Herd to her hapless friends-- Eleanor comes back, and she wants everything back, but the place she left isn't the place she returns to, and she has no place anymore, and we watch her unravel.... and hey maybe THAT novel ends with a climax on the roof, one we actually see, two women pushed to the edge and willing to do anything for The Herd ....
Okay, I could go on forever with my half baked ideas, but that's because I'm legitimately miserable about the Herd alternate universe novels I wish I'd read instead of the one I got. But let's talk about the *actual* book now, lol.
The feminism was very basic white feminism, i.e. "he could never know what it's like, because he's not a woman", without any attempt at nuance or intersectionality. As mentioned above, it would have been great to see a serious challenge to this brand of "girl boss" feminism.
The characterization was very weak. It was to the point that I was constantly complaining to my friend, who was reading it with me (sorry I subjected you to this back when I thought it would be awesome) that I couldn't tell the voices apart. Not just in dialogue, mind you, but in the middle of their POVs. These women were so indistinguishable that in nearly every chapter I had to go back and check whose POV chapter it was because I kept getting lost, going "wait who is, who's this happening to?" I didn't even realize until the end, when I was gathering my thoughts for this review, that there were only Hana's and Katie's POVs, lol. For some reason I thought we read a few more. That's how much the POV voices stood out in my mind.
I've read some reviews (and heard from my friend who was reading this along with me) that these women are unlikable, and I disagree. I love reading about unlikable women; flawed women, fucked up women. These women were unremarkable. The definition of vanilla. They left no impression in my mind. I do agree that it made it hard to care about them, or their "tragic pasts" or their "secrets" or what happened to Eleanor. Honestly it was just tiring reading about them worry about and mourn Eleanor while not understanding the least bit why they care about her. And this isn't a slight on Eleanor (she was the most interesting to me, and I'm starting to think it's because we didn't spend much time with her haha) but a critique of the writing. Why did these women become friends? Why do they care about each other? Why do Katie and Hana care about each other? Yes, they're sisters, but show me. It honestly felt to me that every character barely tolerated everyone around them and it made it hard to stay in their heads. As for the friendship with Eleanor, if that was truly a stars-in-my-eyes "she made me feel lucky" "she made me feel special" "I wanted to borrow from her power" etc etc then that's interesting as fuck, and they should have expanded on that and how hollow that is (a la The Secret History and Bunny) instead of barely being able to malign her as they genuinely mourned their "friend". For a long time Mikki was the most interesting, and that's because she was the most quirky and seemed to be the kindest, genuinely, from the little we got from her. (Which made the plot twist more bizarre, and not in a good way, but we'll get to that later).
Let's talk about the writing real quick. A lot of the prose was overdramatic and boring, describing the most minute things in aggravating detail in a way that I *think* is supposed to highlight how on edge and tense the characters are, to remind you we're in a THRILLER, but it just... drags. I want to quote it exactly but no way in hell am I going to go fishing in this book for a quote: basically someone "bonks", literally "bonks" or almost "bonks" her head on the table or something because her phone rang. The other thing I remember most about the prose is just lots of flowery language and bad metaphors meant to give physical movement to feelings: "the awkwardness plumed", "sadness billowed in me", "a heady sadness billowed like incense". Also, repetitive.
Let's get back to our basic girls. Both of them are haunted by a secret they just REFUSE to reveal to the reader (until they reveal them very randomly... without prompting.... just because) and this non-subtle teasing (at one point Hanna and Mikki literally look each other in the eye, in front of the reader, and say "we won't talk about THAT") is about 80% of the suspense in this novel. The rest is the murder mystery (and it's really hard to care, let alone feel titillated). Hanna's secret is boring as hell, and no I won't talk about the last little *twist* in the epilogue. Classic "I know what you did last summer" innocent, drunk folks accidentally killed someone, or thought they did. Katie's.....
Sigh.
Sigh.
I'm really struggling to decide whether this was queerbaiting or not. On one hand, I really like that Katie (and Eleanor for that matter) liking women isn't treated as a defining characteristic. It is, however, treated as a plot twist. The person in Katie's past is literally referred to as Chris for god's sake, an intentional mis-lead so that the reveal can be as shocking as possible. Ugh. Why does women liking women have to be a plot twist. (Not going to lie though, that was when I was most engaged, sitting up straight and flipping fast. Unfortunately it was a mere two pages before I was bored again.) And it can't be ignored that Katie does end the novel on a positive, even hopeful note, with prospective paramour Ted; a man. There's nothing wrong with any of this (I guess? Maybe someone can help clarify what I'm feeling) but it didn't sit right with me. This is also reinforced by the fact that the only other somewhat queer representation we have, Eleanor, is also married to a straight man. In the end I can't decide if these are actually queer women or if they were both experimenting. Katie seemed genuinely in love (in the one and a half page synopsis we got) but she also never mentioned her relationship with this woman to anyone else. (When she did tell Hana at the end, it was conveniently vague; both what she said specifically and Hana's "aww sorry girl" response). Has Katie dated other women in the past? Is she a bi woman, or something else? We just don't know. (Well, we don't know much about any of these characters to be honest. They are cardboard cutouts.)
The plot. Boring. *Not* predictable, because it made no damn sense. Every time a character had an epiphany I had to pause and think and maybe even reread to try to understand what it was they just understood. It was strange because the flowery prose overly explained every feeling but barely hinted at the actual thoughts, the logical train of thought that led to the deduction. It was all about "the sharp intake of breath" or whatever as they realized something, and I'm left here scratching my head wondering what happened now. It doesn't help that every little development was very unexciting, something about a phone or a photo or a comment someone made once. Not to say this kind of drama moved by minor, mundane events can't be done well, but needless to say this wasn't done well.
Now... the whole plot twist... The reveal of "what really happened" was unsatisfying and borderline irritating. We're supposed to believe that Mikki is such a terrible person that she could blackmail her friends for tens of thousands of dollars a year and kill Eleanor in a fit of anger after hearing about the acquisition that would make her rich friend even richer. Because... she takes Krav Maga and had an artist knife in her hand? If she's capable of hiding so much hate (and it has to be there, if it can bubble up so fiercely) for a decade, while also being the nicest of the friends (it seemed that way to me, clearly meant to mislead) then she must be psychopathic or doing some A level suppressing and it's all coming up now. I would have liked to actually learn more and sit with it instead of hearing the villain speech. And she did really seem like a Cartoon Villain, especially when she hit Katie on the head with a lamp and literally STABBED her closest friend in the chest, yet it wasn't very clear how either woman felt about Mikki at the end.
Basically, I wish Eleanor had gone to Mexico.