3 stars
Well. The story was actually quite decent, somewhere between 3,5 and 3,75 stars.
BUT:
POV changes!!!
I get why the author prefers to change the POV's in order to show what everyone is thinking. However, if you want to do something like this, you should:
a) somehow mark the change in POV, because how the hell am I supposed to know which "she" are you talking about right now when you suddenly change it in the middle of the page.
b) when you switch the POV, keep it that way for more than two pages before switching back. It gives me whiplash and I have no clue who's mind I am in. This could be circumvented by better division of who is who.
"She" is a nice and useful pronoun but in lesfic it doesn't exactly explain which MC we're talking about.
Other than that, if you ignore the weird switches, it really wasn't half bad. But English is (technically speaking) my fourth language, so a confusing writing style really hampers my understanding and subsequent enjoyment of the plot and it annoys me immensely.