To give a fair review, one should rate a book according to its genre. This book is romance erotica; it would not be fair to compare it to "Pride and Prejudice" and lament the lack of witty word play.
This genre is all about fantasy ... giving the reader a fantasy. And since the reader is presumed to be female ... the fantasy is female-oriented. Also, lots of ellipses. Really ... a lot of ellipses ... especially in the first half of the book. No other form of punctuation, apparently, is as serviceable as a good ellipse...
This is what I learned in this book about female fantasy: Gay men will meet you and fall in love and only want to have sex with you from then on. A gay male couple in love will meet a woman and question their sexuality ... the attraction is so strong. A man has rock hard muscles and rigid abs. A man having sex never has trouble having 3 orgasms in a row ... because you are so hot and desirable. Even a gay man will want to marry you (with his ex-boyfriend) because the sex (with you, the super-hot woman) is so mind-blowing. A man making out with you is "prowling" on you or over you. And finally, someone you've had little contact with since first year college (and no contact at all for several years) will invite you to her wedding. Oh yeah, and also, having two men f*ck you at once will break through your emotional barricades and help you to love yourself and form a lasting, loving, committed relationship ... with two men, who are not gay any more (except one is, but he only wants to have sex with a woman now ... not just any woman of course, but you, only you.) Ah, bliss ... emotional commitment and double penetration.