This book was worse than it needed to be, and I can only review the first five or six chapters because I abandoned it at that point. Dialogue is just filling space, and far from advancing the plot it only serves as excuses to insert the occasional "for cryin' out loud" or "indeed". The Xbox didn't exist in 2000 (when the SG story that this book builds on was aired) and, even if it did, the joke with Hammond mentioning it is weak. Most of the stuff in the dialogues is simply weird. "MALP telemetry checks out," what kind of acknowledgment is that? That the MALP radio is working? Who cares? What about "God's speed," what's with that old spelling of "Godspeed"? Is there a significance there? "Slicker than Exxon Valdez was Jack's initial reaction", how cringe is that? And what does it even mean?
What about "Welcome to Ierna, I do not need to tell you how your arrival has astonished us" then? That's code for "I, the author, cannot be bothered to tell you how astonishing it was for this people to see that their Sungate actually communicates with other worlds even though it should've been the most important thing in the history of the planet."
And then the aliens -- come on, a civilisation literally focused on media creation but who think that a year 2000 camera is "so small"? After 150 years of doing nothing else but working with cameras?
And a ban on Knowledge, with a capital K? Who designed the TV studios for these people? Their high-end TV screens, the distribution network? How can you do that without Science, with a capital S?
"And here's me without a Bible...", this is definitely something no Stargate writer ever would've put in Jack's mouth.
But the thing that really destroyed it to me was the dictator, Ennis (and his gang). This is NOT what a dictator is like. Dictators don't allow newcomers access to their stuff; in fact there would be no reason to let them live altogether. Dictators can't be challenged in their beliefs, by their daughters or newcomers or consciences. They would simply kill them, or at best banish them away. Dictators don't come down for a chat with the people that they persecute, at least not before they'd been properly tamed. I don't care that "aliens do things differently", it would've been easier to sell that they have three eyes and five legs, rather than this.
Characters behave totally irrationally for very little narrative purpose, to the point where the story becomes simply boring, inconsistent and annoying.