Once again, I find myself comparing a YA novel to another YA novel I’ve read recently. I don’t do this because I can’t describe it accurately without comparison, but because it is too similar not to mention. It’s as if one author read the work of the other author and thought, “Hey, that’s an interesting idea! I should write a story like that, too -- and maybe make it better.” The only problem here is that the story just ends up being the same, with only a few differences here and there.
The novel to which I am comparing this is Significance, by Shelly Crane. In both novels, there is this strange, mystical connection between the main love interest. They both fall madly in love -- practically instantly after first meeting each other -- and are in physical pain when separated for too long. Also in both stories is the appearance of the super villain, who comes to the heroine through her dreams. My final comparison (which is, sadly, not limited to these two novels) is the utter lack of proofreading that went into this project. Seriously, people, would it hurt to have a freaking proofreader!! So many misspelled words, missing punctuation (including periods at the end of the sentences), and horrible grammar. At one point, the narrator shares that “My parents, Dane and Clarissa, had banners…” which really confused me, because I knew that her parents names were Jason and Grace. (It should have read “My parents, Dane, and Clarissa had banners…”. Come on, people, these are very basic rules, here!) I might be able to forgive a few of the punctuation errors, given that I read this on a Kindle, and they tend to change things around a bit, but since when does adding an apostrophe make something plural? Answer: NEVER!
Moving on, I found the initial description of the string very confusing. It’s almost as if it was over-explained. Despite the thorough explanation, I still never got a really good image of it in my head, so I felt myself sort of glossing over the references to it in the rest of the book. I feel as though a simpler description might have been better.
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The concept of traveling between dimensions was interesting, but I was literally rolling my eyes at the whole “past lives” part. I’m seriously getting tired of that current trend in YA fiction. And what's with the sister being their long-lost daughter from another life? What the heck? Can you say bizarre?
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The name choices bothered me a bit, and I see I’m not the only reviewer on Goodreads who thinks so. Willow strikes me more as a sidekick/best friend character than a heroine (or maybe that’s just my memory of Willow from Buffy the Vampire Slayer coming back to me), and Drake is just too obvious and cheesy a name for the villain. Also, the author apparently couldn't decide if the guy's name is Guardian or Gaurdian. She flipped back and forth between the two names (once even on the same page, one line down from the other) that it wasn't clear.
Aside from the names themselves, there were simply too many of them for me to follow! I had just barely begun to correctly identify each of her childhood friends when they are ripped out of the storyline and a few dozen new names are thrown at me in rapid succession. I kept searching for helpful hints in the writing to remind me who was related to whom and how. Then, by the time Willow’s friends’ names are mentioned again, I’d completely forgotten which one Willow was closest to and which one had a crush on one of the guys (who I’d forgotten, as well). I was half-tempted to go back and write out a list so I could keep track of them, but was already getting so frustrated that it wasn’t worth the time.
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Also along the subject of names is the fact that, despite coming from a dozen different dimensions, they all have fairly normal, recognizable names. Even in our own dimension (aka, planet Earth), different countries have different sounding names, but I’m suddenly supposed to believe that a completely different freaking dimension has names as recognizable as Clarrisa and Brady and Rose? And since when does Jeep export vehicles to other dimensions, too?
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I found it a little annoying that people kept asking questions that went unanswered and didn’t think to prod a little more to get the answers. This happened more than once throughout the story. Seriously, if you wanted to know the answer, ask again. If you don’t really care that it isn’t answered, why did you ask in the first place? Most of the time, after the questioner asked said question, the story moved on without ever revisiting the subject. It was almost as if the questions were asked simply to get the reader thinking about it, and the lack of immediate answers served to build the mystery. If that was the strategy, it fell flat as far as I was concerned, because I simply found myself getting frustrated.
The most blatant and annoying question that kept getting deflected was what Drake wanted with Willow in the first place! Seeing that this conflict was the main driving force of the plot, it would have made sense for it to be explained better (and sooner). I understand the point of dragging it out to draw out the suspense, but it just got tiresome.
The way simple expressions and actions were over-explained got a bit old, too. When has nodding a head in response to a question ever meant anything other than yes? It is really necessary to write that “he nodded his head yes” or “shook her head no”? Also, there was a lot of extraneous explanation following the emotions that Willow senses. “Rose gave off an emotion of surprise, meaning that wasn’t what she meant.” Couldn’t we have figured that out on our own?
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What are the odds that, when two soul mates find each other, two of their friends/relatives also discover that they are soul mates? I might be able to forgive the coincidence of that happening to one friend, but two? Come to think of it, I could add that to my list of similarities to Significance.
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I love a good, happy love story as much as the next person, but this one was a bit over-the-top on the lovey dovey happy stuff. There wasn’t enough depth in the main characters’ love story to really draw me in and actually care about them. They dreamed about each other, then they met each other and were instantly in love. We don’t know why they were in love, just that they were, and they made sure everyone knew it. I’m not saying that I need a list of reasons that they loved each other, but most romance novels go through a lot of storytelling before we get to the “I love you”s. Their relationship seemed a little co-dependent to me. Instead of it being a first person narrative, it was almost a two person narrative. We stop hearing “I” and start hearing a lot more “we”s. Can’t she have a single thought on her own anymore?
I find as I sit here writing, that I could go on and on about what annoyed me about this story, but I won’t bore you. Most of the people who read and reviewed this story gave it 4+ stars, so my voice will definitely fall in the minority, but I just found the whole thing a bit boring. The idea was certainly an original one, but there was simply too much going on for me to follow, and, after a while, I stopped caring about trying. I’m just glad it’s finally over.