This is going to be a looooooooong review.
First, I must say that had I read this trilogy as a teenager, I’d probably have loved it.
However, being a literature scholar and well, slightly older, I can’t overlook its flaws, and I am infuriated by the fact that most of them to me, are due to a poor editing job.
For example:
- two many pages are devoted to summarizing the previous books. WHO buys the 3rd installment in a series without having read the previous ones? An editor should have cut those passages
- the book is sometimes VERY repetitive, mainly when characters have to explain to one another something we, as readers, already know. For example, Akkarin’s hearing is the exact same story than the one he told Sonea at the beginning of the book.
- too many subplots lead NOWHERE. You can simply skip them. For example, all of Dannyl’s passages. ALL - OF - THEM. Don’t get me wrong, I loved this character, but I kept on hoping that something would come out of his travels, or his acknowledging he’s gay. Well, no. And it would have been easy to tie to the main plot, for example in book 3, he could have suggested continuing looking for rogue guilds and convince them to fight alongside the Guild, maybe in exchange for more tolerance from the Guild (and then the gay rights subplot would also have been tied to the main frame). His passages are a HUGE waste of space in books 2 and 3, that could have focused on useful things.
- Same for the “Rothen will learn to be a spy” subplot. It doesn’t tell us anything more about Rothen, nor does it move the plot forward.
- Ceryni’s girlfriend is ENTIRELY USELESS. She serves no purpose, had no influence on either the story or the characters, and has no reason to be in this story. And yes, sometimes a character can’t tell their motives or backstory right away (Akkarin for example) but at some point, THEY MUST, to have an interest in the story. Keeping a character tagging along for the sake of it should have been pointed as a mistake by a publishing team.
- Pacing problems: large parts of the books just drag on and on and on, without adding anything further to either plot or characterization. For example, Sonea’s hide and seek game in book 1, takes HALF THE BOOK. Seriously, scratch off 100 pages. We need some of those chapters, to understand the Thieves, how they operate, the Thieve’s Road, and some characterization, but it really becomes repetitive at some point.
Same thing with the bullying in book 2. Yes we get it, she’s being bullied and is too afraid to hurt them to unleash her magic. We don’t need then again 200 pages of her playing hide and seek with her classmates.
Why does it matter?
True, it is still pleasant to read.
So why should an editor have said “these passages should be cut”?
Simply because the story has to fit in 3 tomes and sadly those poor choices meant that some things that should have been better developed were rushed in this book.
Mainly, Akkarin, and the Akkarin/Sonea relationship.
- Akkarin remains purely unidimensional for more than 2 books.
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Ok then ....
It IS problematic because it makes the love story highly unbelievable.
Sonea spends two years fearing and hating that man, granted, because she didn’t know his motives, but then suddenly falls in love within a fortnight. And this comes out of nowhere, as before she questions her feelings for him (book 3 part 2 literally HALFWAY throughout the LAST book!), we have no indication nowhere else that she feels anything for him.
To me, book 2 here wasted a LOT of opportunities to develop their relationship. Akkarin imposés her to dine with him once a week. We SHOULD HAVE SEEN some interaction between them, maybe some conflicting feelings emerge in Sonea. Not necessarily love per say, but something that would have made her doubt he was truly evil, something that would have paved the way for her love for him. Instead it felt like she suddenly realizes he's not a reptilian and "a girl got needs", and whenever he touches her it's suddenly hellfire in her panties and lots of blushing and sighing and swooning ... jeez..
It was also important to flesh out the character of Akkarin a bit better, as before we learn that he loves / desires Sonea, we had no indication that he considered her as anything more than a hostage, or a pupil. Before she kills the spy and for the first time he touches her, there is no intimacy between them, there is nothing but a purely teacher / student relationship. Which makes their love story slightly yiiirk.
Not only is he older, but he is an authority figure. The part when they’re in exile serves no other purpose than putting those 2 together, so more chapters should have been devoted to establishing a new ground for their relationship, to show that they’re on a more equal footing.
It DOES always help a story to have more fully fleshed characters. It is not a waste of time to focus on their development. Focusing on useless characters and subplots is.
- The end is problematic too. Ok the writer wanted to have Akkarin die, that’s HER story. However this death was EGREGIOUS. You just CANT say there’s a solution, and then 3 pages later have your character die because they simply didn’t use it. It is BAD WRITING. Moreover, WTF are all the other characters doing? Why is nobody fucking helping?
And I usually don’t mind not having the happy ending (even if I’m a sucker for it), but I hate when the death of a character makes no sense within the frame of the story.
Not to mention it is highly incoherent with the character of Sonea. That she would rather take energy from her dying significant other rather than a building makes no sense whatsoever. I mean, WHO in their right mind would choose a BUILDING OVER THEIR LOVED ONE? Any reading team in a publishing house should have pointed this out.
And that is what infuriates me.
Because this story could have been much better than what it is, if some different choices had been made.
I would therefore have cut the trilogy differently, as, when you think of it, nothing much happens in books 1 and 2, and too much is rushed in book 3.
I’m not sure of course whether the publishing house suggested some of those changes to Trudi Canavan and she disregarded them, or if the editor simply did a poor job, but as a result I feel like I read the 1st draft of the trilogy, not the finished product.