What do you think?
Rate this book
Finding Heaven
What would you do if some rich guy saved you from being beaten and raped? That if he took you back to his hotel, offered you everything your heart desired; a home, clothing, food? The only Stipulation is that you are to be his lover.
This story is no longer online, it was taken down by the author
This story is no longer online, it was taken down by the author
- GenresM M Romance
online fiction
2 people are currently reading
88 people want to read
Ratings & Reviews
Friends & Following
Create a free account to discover what your friends think of this book!
Community Reviews
Displaying 1 - 5 of 5 reviews
December 15, 2010
I read this about a month ago and forgot to rate it, maybe because I had to put some distance and think about. I felt very conflicted by this story mostly because there where were parts that I really enjoyed and there were parts that just got on my nerves.
Once Armand and Destin began to have sex, they just wouldn't stop. This is a long story and after about a quarter of the way through the sex was repetitive and overwhelming. I wouldn't be surprised if the story is at least 50% sex. That was easily dealt with by just skipping the suckers and once I did that, the story flew by. There were rarely any distinctions between scenes, so I'm reading about something happening in one place and then had to backtrack because I was thrown elsewhere without warning. The head hopping was hard to figure out at times as well. There were an obscene amount of typos and words that didn't make sense in the context they were used and I had to once again stop and figure out what was being said. I mean when you keep reading Brain and it's supposed to be Brian it kind of throws you off.
Now I'm aware that this is free online fiction and some people would ask what do you expect, right? At one point I might have agreed. That is, until I read some incredible free stories online that would put many published works to shame. Just because it's free should not be an excuse for sloppiness.
What's so heartbreaking about this is that heart of the story is lovely. It has a very nice cast of characters that you end up caring about and I WANTED to know what happened. There is romance, humor, angst, heartbreak...all the good stuff that engage your emotions. Unfortunately, all the other things I mentioned were so overpowering that it disrupted the flow and overall enjoyment of the story. There is a sequel to this, but I don't think I'll be revising Armand and Destin. :(
Once Armand and Destin began to have sex, they just wouldn't stop. This is a long story and after about a quarter of the way through the sex was repetitive and overwhelming. I wouldn't be surprised if the story is at least 50% sex. That was easily dealt with by just skipping the suckers and once I did that, the story flew by. There were rarely any distinctions between scenes, so I'm reading about something happening in one place and then had to backtrack because I was thrown elsewhere without warning. The head hopping was hard to figure out at times as well. There were an obscene amount of typos and words that didn't make sense in the context they were used and I had to once again stop and figure out what was being said. I mean when you keep reading Brain and it's supposed to be Brian it kind of throws you off.
Now I'm aware that this is free online fiction and some people would ask what do you expect, right? At one point I might have agreed. That is, until I read some incredible free stories online that would put many published works to shame. Just because it's free should not be an excuse for sloppiness.
What's so heartbreaking about this is that heart of the story is lovely. It has a very nice cast of characters that you end up caring about and I WANTED to know what happened. There is romance, humor, angst, heartbreak...all the good stuff that engage your emotions. Unfortunately, all the other things I mentioned were so overpowering that it disrupted the flow and overall enjoyment of the story. There is a sequel to this, but I don't think I'll be revising Armand and Destin. :(
December 11, 2010
this is a great read full of romance angst and smexxiness one of those storys you will come back and read again :)
to-buy
September 20, 2013Anyone know if this one was ever published? It isn't online and I don't see it on Amazon either.
August 7, 2014
Read this a million years ago. Can't wait to re-read this (if author ever finishes it)!!!
Edit: From the author's Fictionpress profile:
Hello all
Just to do an update. I had major brain surgery on June 3, 2014. Thank goodness, it turned out to be a non – cancerous, a stage one tumor that needed to be removed and now I just get to be watched for the next ten years. So its going to be a long road to being healthy again, but I am on the recovery and starting to feel wonderful.
Keep an eye out for anything I will post. I am excited about being able to actually work again with my writing and even working and school. I am hoping in a while to be back up and running like I was years ago and to be able to update again.
Here's to hoping for a swift recovery!
Edit: From the author's Fictionpress profile:
Hello all
Just to do an update. I had major brain surgery on June 3, 2014. Thank goodness, it turned out to be a non – cancerous, a stage one tumor that needed to be removed and now I just get to be watched for the next ten years. So its going to be a long road to being healthy again, but I am on the recovery and starting to feel wonderful.
Keep an eye out for anything I will post. I am excited about being able to actually work again with my writing and even working and school. I am hoping in a while to be back up and running like I was years ago and to be able to update again.
Here's to hoping for a swift recovery!
December 15, 2010
See Td's review.
Displaying 1 - 5 of 5 reviews