Write Your Heart Out ツ discussion

Haven't decided what to put in here yet but when I do all of you will be the first to know XD

About Me:

I am 16 years old and will turn 17 on March 22nd. I live in California. I have a younger brother that is 12. I am a junior in high school. I have no pets at the moment but I really want to get a Pomeranian again. I aspire to be a writer but if that doesn't work out then I still want to work with books so I am going to major in either Journalism or English Literature. My dream college is Washington State University. If you want to know more you can PM me or comment below. :D

I suppose I will post the link to the book I'm writing so y'all can read it :) It's called Revealed and it's the first in a trilogy :D

https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...

So I wrote another story last night. It was midnight and I wasn't tired so I wrote XD Its not finished yet but you can read it if you wan to :D

https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...

I will post status updates when I finish a chapter here as well!

Has anyone read it? Yes? No? C'mon! Need feedback! Pwease?

I wrote 6 chapters so far!!

Hehe XD Thanks! I was just bored so I decided to post a buncha random posts xP

Nope. Do you have a link?

Alrighty! *goes off to read*

I'm working on my chapter 7 but it doesn't seem to be meshing well with the rest of my story...anyone want to read it for me and give me some ideas to fix it?

Then read! Pwease?

My 7th chapter is posted!

nice story! I only read the first chapter, but I like it so far! *going to go read more*

Thanks! I've been trying to write as much as I can before school starts again :)

yeah I know how that is...I usually post two chapters each week, but this winter break I've been so lazy that I haven't posted ANYTHING yet. I haven't had that much inspiration to. But I did post stuff in my folder. Ahh, the magic of 'copy and paste'.

XD Yeah The only reason I posted anything these two weeks was because all of my friends were bugging me for more

Yeah...I love that feeling *v*
when I saw my one story at the top of the favorite's list...I was like....(0.0) holy...crap...
I don't see myself becoming a writer though. How about you?

I've always wanted to be a writer but I never thought I was good enough until I shared my stuff with all of my friends. Now I think I stand a chance :) But even if that doesn't work out I still pan on working with books because I want to go into publishing. When I go to college I think I am going to major in journalism

that's cool. I may not want to publish my work, but I still am interested in the creative arts field. I think I'm gonna go for acting. If that doesn't work out, then maybe photography. I don't know.

That's cool! I'm too shy to go into acting. I tried out for a play once and it didn't go so well. Photography is fun too :)

Yeah(:
both are a lot of work, though, since they're self-employed. But I'm willing to work for it!

:D Anything worth doing is a lot of work

couldn't have said that better:)

My 8th chapter is posted!

I love your writing :P But you know that xD

Bahaha XD Thanks Alyssa :D Have you read my current chapter?

Well yes :) I read up to chapter 8, since chapter 9 is not there yet :(

Have you read my new chapter (4)?

:O No!! I'll go read it now!!

LittleMissJunior(Tia) wrote: ":O No!! I'll go read it now!!"

I have it on GR now too ^^ so you don't have to go to wattpad anymore ;)

Coolsies!! I shall go read :D

yay :D

there are a lot of Alyssa s on goodreads, I've noticed. I never thought my name could be so common! lol

Me neither! Before GR I had never met someone with the same name XD

So I wrote another story last night. It was midnight and I wasn't tired so I wrote XD Its not finished yet but you can read it if you wan to :D

https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...

Goodie :D

Alyssa wrote: "Me neither! Before GR I had never met someone with the same name XD"

yeah:) now I know, like, four other people named Alyssa.

I know right xD

This is the first part of a chapter to a story I'm working on and wanted Feedback

Soft light streamed through her window and the sound of blue jays could be heard. The world sounded so happy when in reality everything was falling apart. She hadn't been able to sleep the night before knowing that this day was her mothers' funeral. Why did this have to happen to her? What did she do to deserve this? She had prayed to God asking Him, but she didn't get an answer. She hated that she was angry with God for taking her mother away but she couldn't help it. Her dad had already retreated so far into himself that she had had to plan the funeral all by herself. That's too much stress for a sixteen year old girl.

I have to get up, she thought. She didn't want to though. If she got up then she would be acknowledging the fact that her mom was dead and she wouldn't be coming back. She steeled herself and sat up. She kicked off her covers and stood on shaky legs. See? That wasn't so bad, She told herself.

She stumbled over to her vanity and sat down heavily in the chair. Looking in the mirror she realized that she would have a lot of work to do to make herself look presentable. Dark circles ringed her eyes and her skin was paler than normal. Her dark brown hair hung limp and lacked its normal luster. Her pale blues eyes didn't have their normal spark of mischief in them either. She brought a trembling hand to her face and brushed away a strand of hair. She normally looked like her mom, but since the accident, she hasn't looked like herself at all.

She pushed away from the mirror and staggered across the hall to the bathroom hoping to wash away her grief so she could help her dad stay strong. At least for today.

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She felt better after she showered and dressed. Stronger. She knew her mother would disapprove of how she was acting so she put on her bravest face even though she knew it would crumple the second the funeral started.

Her father wasn't up yet. That wasn't unusual these days so she went to his room and began opening curtains. "Wake up dad." She said.

He groaned and covered his head with his comforter. "No. Today doesn't exist."

She tugged the blanket off his head. "You have to. I know it't hard but I need you." Her voice broke and that was the only thing that got him to sit up and get out of bed. He stood and patted her on the cheek.

"Okay Bethany. For you. I will get up for you. And your mother." He said, his eyes already shining with tears.

She gave him a watery smile and went downstairs to make something to eat even though she knew neither of them would be able to stomach even the thought of eating.

First Chapter to my book Revealed

(Taylin)
Let me just say that moving sucks. I've been sitting in this godforsaken car for the past 5 hours and my mom hasn't even said a word since we've been driving. I don't know. Maybe she's going to miss me. We've never had a great relationship. The only thing she ever talked to me about was my dad. She told me stories about him; about how he was amazing, yet ignorant at the same time. She said that I look like him. In fact she says that all the time. He must have been a great man.

When I was younger I searched for him. I was searching for about 13 years. Maybe it's just meant to be that I don't find him. I've dreamed about him to imagining what he looks like. I still do sometimes. My imagination has always been a little weird because i pictured him with the brightest blue eyes I've ever seen. They always held a hint of amusement. I used to imagine that he was just away at some work conference and he would be back soon, but those dreams were quickly replaced by reality. I will never meet my father and I'm okay with that. If he doesn't care enough to try and see me then I don't care to know him.

I nearly squeal in delight when my mom signals to get off the interstate for a rest stop. I jump out of the car before it even stops and almost fall flat on my face. My legs are stiff from sitting in the car for so long. I waddle into the store in search of some snacks and fill my arms with an assortment of chips and candy. When I dump the contents of my arms on the counter the cashier looks at me strange. I just smile and shrug at him before looking out the window. I see my mom pumping gas and wish she would talk to me more. This whole trip has been basically silent and i wish she would have said something since I'm about to leave and not return home for months. I shake my head and look back at the cashier. The total of my food came to $15.30. I throw a twent on the counter before grabbing the bags and saying, "keep the change." I'll use that as my good deed for the day.

When I get to the car, I pile my bags in the front seat and walk around to the other side and stand by my mom.

"How much farther?" I ask.

"Not much. Maybe a couple miles," She says only sparing me a glance.

I just nod and go back to the passenger side but don't get in, wanting to stretch my legs more. So, instead of standing there like an idiot i decide to walk farther.

I head in the direction of the forest behind the store, humming "Radioactive" by Imagine Dragons. I have had this song stuck in my head for days now and nothing I do will get rid of it.

Before I even get close to the back of the store I hear my mom calling me. I sigh and walk back to the car for another hour of driving. Yippee.

As we pull out of our parking space, black car pulls in next to us. A guy around my age steps out of the car and heads into the store. All I can see is a head a midnight black hair and a small glimpse of bright emerald green eyes before my mom turns the corner and he's out of my line of sight.

For the next hour of the drive those magical eyes stay burned in my memory.

luv that story! hope you update it soon, btw;)

I will. I think it is going to be my late night writing project and my book will be my daytime one

alrighty!

Okay so Mimi wanted me to try and write a poem...Well here it is:


Whispers in the Moonlight.
Shouting in the Dawn.
Can you help my aching soul
so that I may carry on?

My life is in shambles.
My heart just wants to break.
I am terrified of you
and what you leave in your wake.

So help me lord, I beg of you.
See that I am good.
I want to make it through this life
and escape the coming flood.

Really? It's good?

:D I will try and write some more then

Our Love

I'm calling you
You're calling me
Is there anywhere
you want to be?

I see your face
and I know
There is nowhere else
I want to go

So stay with me
I beg of you
So I know
our love is true

I told you they wouldn't be bad! You're really good a poems!

Struggle

Can it be?
Is it true?
I can't hold on
what must I do?

My grasp is slipping
My strength has waned
How can you endure this?
All the pain?

Heaven help me
I know not what to do
The world is ending
But you say that can't be true

You take my worries
you take my doubts
you make it so
I don't scream and shout

Can we fix this?
Together I mean
I know you see me
as your queen

I need your help
I can't do this alone
so someone throw me
a freaking bone

Reann wrote: "I told you they wouldn't be bad! You're really good a poems!"

Thanks :D

You know I already love both your stories.. :)

Alyssa wrote: "You know I already love both your stories.. :)"

I worked on chapter 9 a little last night but it's not flowing as well as before so i might take a break from writing my story for a while and focus on poems