The Future of YA Authors discussion

Have a story, chapter, idea, poem you want some real critiquing on? Post it here~!

I have a bunch of poems on goodreads. I would love some feedback. You can find them from my profile or this link

https://www.goodreads.com/story/list/...

Leo wrote: "Hopefully I could get your response on my poem because you said you write poems.

We Were Once Gods

We were once Gods,
living high in the mountain tops
Free of order, roaming the free land,
The da..."

This is a good idea and structure. There was one line that you might want to look at: Giving time the opening to run aimlessly. I'm not quite sure what you mean there. Then on the third line using free twice sort of breaks the rhythm. You could change free land to open lands, not sure if that has the same effect though. This line: holding me with its bare hands as time marks my new boundaries, you might want to split it ands make as time marks my new boundaries a separate line so as to not run it all together.

That's all I really have. Except for one or two lines, the poem flows freely, and emphasis is added at the right spots with enjambment, and the word choice is splendid. Well done!