☀Ignite Your Creativity☀ discussion

One of my personal favorites... Anyone willing to give me feedback is welcome! Though I can't really pride myself on my own feedback-giving talents, I'd be happy to look at your writing too. Enjoy!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

Maybe I should preface a little more. This is one of the first stories I wrote in a long long time. I'd call it magical realism, because generally it's set in a contemporary universe, but I inserted one fantastical element that makes it just a little more interesting. Remember Jeckyll and Hyde? Picture of Dorian Gray? It's kind of like that, only it's a short story and it's probably not half as good as those books :p

Well, what do you expect? I'm only a beginner ;)
But nevertheless... Take a look?

I really liked this story. It was an interesting concept and well-executed. I also like your writing style, I would only suggest a little more revision. There were minor errors and some awkward phrases.

Thanks for the tips! I'm just a little confused where I should revise more; I had my English teacher look at it - so I'm not sure where the minor errors are. Then again, if you've been looking at a story for such a long time, you can stare at it for half an hour and just not see very obvious (sometimes embarrassing) mistakes. It's a thing.

Thanks again for reading!