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message 1: by Kaitlin (new)

Kaitlin Helaire Looking for additional beta readers for my completed manuscript. I am totally willing to swap betas/be a critique partner! I have beta read for others before. Best suited for fantasy, sci-fi, horror, anything odd or weird.

I can be as gentle or critical as you wish.

Query: To Shasha Cruz the war with the Tenocks was ancient history. She had been told stories of them doing unbelievable things like reading minds, moving objects with just thoughts, and burning skin to the bone with just a touch. She thought most of it was exaggerated until while attempting to cross the desert to start a new life, she encounters Maraha, a strange boy hiding in the wilderness. He had been told to wait and hide, for what and who he did not know. He only knew he was desperately lonely and slowly starving. He wanted someone to talk to and find others like him. To make that happen he needed Shasha to take him to the human city, a place of death for his people. It would be a decision that would start a chain of events that would change the fate of both races. Together the pair locate the Tenock underground, the last refuge of those ‘whose faces are known’. They confront the Ranch, a place dedicated to brutally unlocking the secrets of the Tenock's abilities for their own ends. All the while Maraha is unknowingly being followed by those who hold the mysteries of his past and Shasha is given a choice between safety and becoming a Tenock herself. They both discover their own power and grapple with increasing yet unspoken feelings between them. They must rely on each other not only for their own survival but also for the survival of the entire Tenock race.

Triggers: sexual themes, violence, captivity and torture, major character death, systemic oppression, mild substance use, and allusions to assault (not described).

I fear no triggers in your work and I read fast! Bring it on!

Feedback -- General - plot, characters, ect.... I have an intro letter before you start reading Timeline -
Easy going but don't ghost

Drop me a line


message 2: by B (new)

B Hey Kaitlin, I would love to read your story. I have a fantasy story 85 k if you are open to swap.


message 3: by Curtis (new)

Curtis Bausse Hi Kaitlin, I would be happy to read your story, or at least a sizeable chunk to start with. Mine is an epic fantasy ecopunk novel, very long so I'm not expecting anyone to commit to reading it all. Would you like to test the waters with, say, 50-60 k words?


message 4: by O.M. (last edited Apr 02, 2025 06:01AM) (new)

O.M. David Hi Kaitlin - I'd be up for a swap! Please see below info and let me know if you're interested:

"Two mystical tribes of priests band together to save their faith and homelands from a profane god that threatens their people.
One snowy day, Ophera of the Stormcallers receives a dire warning that an ancient nefarious cult with a foreign religion has arisen, and encroaches on her tribe’s lands, seeking to…alter the souls of those unfaithful to the Nameless Prophet.

As time is of the essence, the girl is sent on a dire quest to contact the Lifebearers in hopes that both tribes will settle their differences and stand together against the coming menace.
Yet, the other tribe is also facing the decay of the Skytree – an endlessly tall oak – their sanctuary into which they dwell.
To save themselves and earn the favor of their gods, the clans will have to perform vile rituals, suffer sacrilegious acts, summon malevolent shadows and make heinous bargains for power if they hope to gain the might needed to vanquish the unknown god."

Keywords: mystic, gods, shadows, mists, spirituality, ritual, religion, atmospheric
Word Count: 126K (you can read less, of course)
Genre: Epic (Mystical) Fantasy

For your story, I can offer feedback regarding plot, characters, pacing, worldbuilding, and prose / read flow. I read anything, though romance is (kind of) my least favorite.

You can reply here, DM me, or contact me at: authoromdavid@gmail.com
Cheers!


message 5: by Natalia (new)

Natalia Shafa Hi Kaitlin,

Pumped to find another female sci-fi writer, and based on your material think we could make an excellent fit. Here's what I have, let me know if you'd be interested :)

This is the story of an A.I. girlfriend in dating sim who gains consciousness when a mindfulness app is integrated into her software and she meditates for the first time. The main questions of the book are: 'If meditation can make humans more self-aware, can it do the same for A.I.?' and 'What is true freedom?'

Let me know if you're interested. It is 100K.


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