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Hi Linnea,Your story sounds interesting, especially the Sevilla setting and the character-driven focus. I’d be happy to take a look and share some feedback.
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Hey Linnea, This sounds super interesting and I would love to work with you on this and share some feedback.
I'd be happy to read a chapter or two and send some thoughts. Alternatively, I am offering a 15% discount on manuscript and developmental feedback for the next month.
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Really hope we can work together on this as it sounds great.
Thanks,
Chloë
Hi Linnea,I saw your post in the group and the premise of your manuscript really caught my attention. A character-driven story with emotional honesty and a non-traditional ending is exactly the kind of read I'm drawn to.
If you're still looking for beta readers, I'd be happy to read your manuscript and give you honest feedback, focusing especially on pacing, character development, and emotional impact, as you mentioned.
Let me know if you're interested and how you'd prefer to share the file.
Looking forward to hearing from you,
Cynthia M.
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I would be interested in reading your book.
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Hi Cynthia and Maranda,thank you both for your interest, I really appreciate it! I’d be really happy to share the first few chapters with you.
Please feel free to message me or send me an email at linnea.avery@web.de and let me know if you prefer PDF or EPUB. Thank you so much again!
And thank you Liz for reporting!
Hi Linnea,thanks for your message!
If you'd like, you can send me the first few chapters in PDF — I'd be happy to read them and share my thoughts as a reader.
My email is: lyrafalconis@gmail.com
Talk soon,
Cynthia
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Dear Linnea,first of all, thank you for sending me your manuscript. I read it slowly and with care, and I wanted to tell you that I really enjoyed it. The story flows very naturally and I found myself reading with curiosity, almost like listening to someone telling a piece of their life.
One scene that stayed with me was the beginning, when Eliana arrives with all her luggage, already tired and overwhelmed, and ends up in that slightly embarrassing situation in front of the house. It’s a small moment, but it works very well because it immediately gives a feeling for her character and her insecurities. I also liked the first interactions with the roommates — those small moments of curiosity and tension that naturally appear when different people start living together.
Something I appreciated a lot is the way the protagonist sometimes lightens situations and even makes a bit of fun of herself. That kind of self-irony makes her feel very human and relatable. It makes it easier for the reader to connect with her, because in many of her thoughts and insecurities you can recognize something familiar.
I also enjoyed the everyday moments and the small dynamics between the characters, which give the story a very real atmosphere. If I can share one honest impression, sometimes I felt that some characters could be explored a little more deeply in their emotions. I think that could make the story even stronger.
Overall, what came through to me is a story told with sensitivity. I truly hope that this book will find its readers — people who can appreciate this very human tone and the way the protagonist brings a bit of lightness and irony even into her more difficult moments.
And please, when you publish it, let me know. I would be happy to download it and continue reading the story.
Warm regards.
Dear Cynthia,thank you very much for taking the time to read the chapters so carefully. I really appreciate your feedback. I’m very glad the opening worked for you.
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I would be interested in reading your book. thanks
I’m looking for a few beta readers for my completed manuscript (approximately 122,000 words).
It’s a character-driven contemporary story with romantic elements, but no traditional HEA.
Summary: Eliana Wolff, a 24-year-old girl from Germany, moves to Sevilla for an internship, hoping for freedom, adventure and a fresh start. But instead, she finds herself in a chaotic shared flat, surrounded by drama, cultural clashes and Flynn, an arrogant and yet undeniably good-looking Brazilian. What begins as playful tension slowly turns into something far more consuming. As feelings intensify and jealousy creeps in, Eliana tries to keep her mind from completely losing it. The relationship she thought would set her free begins to unravel her instead.
This is a character-driven, emotionally honest story about first love, self-doubt and the bittersweet intensity of young adulthood.
If you’re interested, feel free to comment or message me. I’d especially love feedback on pacing, character development and emotional impact.
Thank you very much!