Julie’s Comments (group member since Dec 12, 2017)

Julie’s comments from the Books, Books and more Books group.

Anna wrote: "thanks for feedback! It's nice of you to rewrite it for me, but I would rather do it myself so I can practice."
That's why I stopped rewriting. It is your story. I think writing a novel is harder than writing a screenplay. You have to paint the picture for your reader. They need to feel like they are right there in the story - my readers said that about my book. If you have time, check out my book - Secrets By The Knoll by Julie Metros

I'm not an expert but I did indie publish a book (with great reviews) but my suggestion would be:
Try not to use "was" or "is" unless there is no other option.

Separate the scenes with "meanwhile", "In front of the building" or "a few miles away".

Introduce the characters separately. You don't have to name the intruder, just call him "a stranger."

I started to rewrite for you but it's your story.

I have search everywhere - I find late 1800's and after 1910 but nothing from the early 1900's.

Hi! My name is Julie and I recently wrote (& self published) my first book - an historical mystery that is inspired by a true story. It ends with a cliffhanger and those who read my first book are anxiously waiting for the sequel. I'm looking for historical books - USA but preferable Midwest that take place 1900 to 1907. Anyone have any suggestions?

Secrets by the Knoll