Eros’s Comments (group member since Jan 26, 2013)

Eros’s comments from the Changing Moons group.

okay how about now? I know you will have something to say about it so hurry along...it is not going to be perfect, so I do apologize.

k thnx I am working on it love your critiques

okay how is the intro now?

kinda werewolves are in it, but no spoilers aloud.

Okay and thnx for joining to all of you

I hear someone at the door and I am awoken from my daily sleep. It is only eleven in the morning and Sleeping during the day is my thing. I walk from the couch to the door with a drowned expression of hate for the suns rays of light and happiness. I open the door slowly and find a gun pointed at my head. It was a small caliber pistol and the person holding it came to be an even more shocking sight. Jacob, my sisters ex-boyfriend, looked deadly serious, more than I have ever seen him. His fair skin and ruffed up brown hair clashed darkly with his tall cut figure and eyes seemingly to glow red with fury. "Get in the car." He says coldly. I look behind him seeing a car, jet black sportage eclipse. I nod and quickly close the door behind me complying to his demands as I have never seen such a look in his eyes ever before.
I get into the back of the car and look to the front seats where I saw a a tanned skin driver with curly looking hair much like my own. "Charles?" I ask not believing what I was seeing. Then in the passenger seat short dark brown hair and slightly tan skin, "Little Bock?" I was thinking of why the three guys I looked up to were now kidnapping me, but nothing came to mind of what I ever did.
Jacob slides into the backseat next to me and nods to Charles' waiting eyes in the rear view mirror. The car starts and instantly takes off down my gravel drive. We get out onto the road and what seems like forever a voice finally breaks the deafening silence.
Lest speaks his voice more commanding than I have ever heard, yet still soft, which must have been how he got all the ladies. "Are you hungry, Coty?"
I look up at him seeing he had turned to look back at me. "Yeah, I guess." I turn my head to the window and all of them were so tinted I am unable to even tell what time of day it is, and I never wear a watch so knowing the time was out of the question.
We pull into a fast food restaurant and Charles' piercing green eyes gaze into my own brown eyes. His eyes seemed doubled and reflected in my glasses. "What do you want?" He asks kindly. "Just a small burger." I reply.
Jacob smirks with the light fire in his eyes seemingly gone back to his normal hazel. "You must be more hungry than that, little man." He had always called me "little man" when he dated my sister, it sort of made things less tense hearing it again, but the knowledge of him having a gun still made me uneasy. "No just a burger." I say it not daring to look directly into his eyes.
Charles gives a light nod and speaks tot he intercom. "I'll have four sweet teas and twenty burgers." A voice replies, "That will be twenty-five, thirty-two. Next window please."
Charles pulls around and pays moving to the next window to receive the food. "I have to go to the bathroom." I let it slip out, but I figured this would buy me some time. Jacob looks back at me starting to study me with his eyes, dissecting each of my thoughts. "Be quick.", He says forced out.
The car door clicks and I open it seeing a bright shining sunset, I cannot believe I have been on this road trip all day. I quickly move tot he doors of the building and go straight to the bathroom. After pacing for a moment trying to think I start to notice the time I have been in there, they were bound to start looking for me. I crack the door and see Jacob talking to the cashier as she points tot eh bathroom. He looks in my direction so I quickly close the door and lock it. Breathing for a moment, I look and see the window, "Just small enough for me to get through, I hope." I say to myself climbing the sink and sliding my body through. My feet hit a trash bin and I turn looking back into the restroom. Instantly, screams are heard and people run out of the building as gun shots are fired. Jacob enters the bathroom and looks up at the window just catching a glimpse of me. I forget everything and just start running to the road. With no clue where I am or where I am heading I run out of the parking lot, but only just. I turn my head slightly hearing the screeching wheels of a drifting car. In a black blur, my feet are swept out from under me as hands grab my shoulders with deadly force. I turn shaking in fear seeing now that I am back in the car and Jacob is keeping an arm wrapped on me, with a dark devilish smirk curving on his lips.
I see Charles's eyes meet mine in the mirror once more."You really don't get it do you? You are never going back to your family."
I am still out of breath and frightened to death. Jacob allows a light laugh to escape his mouth and he grips my shoulder lightly. "We are not entirely human," Jacob looks deep into my own eyes warning me to not argue with his words. "And neither are you."

I could hardly speak. What did he mean by not entirely human, and neither was I...I had t be human, right?
Charles lets a deep sigh move from his lips as night fell and the road became lit by headlights. "We are something like werewolves and something like vampires.

I can't believe what I am hearing coming out of his mouth. "Yeah, right and I am one of these vampire werewolves also, right, I get it. You guys are trying to play a joke on me aren't you?"
The looks I receive from Little Bock and Jacob show dead seriousness. "Seriously guys, if I am what you say I am then where are my fangs? Where is all the hair on me growing during the full moons nights? What, in the name of all sanity, do you want with me?" I was full of questions, because at this point were it a joke, one of them would have cracked by now.
Jacob speaks calmly, "We want you to join our pack, so you may have the powers we possess."

Everything started spinning wildly in my head and out of order. "Wait, slow down. What do you mean by pack?"

With another devilish smirk Jacob's eyes seem to regain their fire. "I am the pack leader; then there is Lester and Charles."
I could not resist correcting him, it was in my nature. "You mean Little Bock, not Lester. He goes by his nickname." With a rage growing in the pits of Jacob's eyes I quickly back down. "No, I mean Lester. He is to be called by his real name from now on. Good, now that we have that covered. We are called hybrids, part werewolf and part vampire. We are born to humans and we stay young for as long as we desire. As you can tell we have chosen to stop our aging process on out twenty-first birthdays. Our power never kick in fully until we turn seventeen, which brings us into luck with you nearing your seventeenth birthday. We are strongest during the full moon and we sleep the entirety of a new moons day. Days become nothing to us and nights become our moments of activeness. Our days are no called around mortal days of the week, but instead by the phases of the moon." He seems to pause for a moment as if debating what to tell me next or allowing me to soak it all in. "Oh, and every first half moon we accept a human sacrifice to feed on."

I look almost as enraged as he does. "I'm not killing anyone!"

Lester shakes his head,"It's okay, they will do it willingly on a normal day."

My glare moves to him. "Okay, fine. But, if they are not willing, I am not killing." Then something strikes my thoughts. I never wanted to say it out loud, but it had to be addressed. "What about my education?"
Charles allows a light kind and charming expression wash over his face. "We are going to California, and you will attend Westwood Coastal High school. All paper work has been finished, and you will be a Junior, like you are supposed to be. Also, don't worry about your other classes. I know you will be fine once you are bitten your brain activity heightens nearly ten times the average humans."

I look out the window through the darkened tinting and see a sign,
Welcome to Little Rock
Arkansas

Then it strikes me what Charles just said. "Wait, bitten? Bitten by what, or whom?"

Lester laughs lightly as if it were nothing."Jacob, must have failed to mention that since you are not fully mature yet, our leader must bite you to give you a slight power boost."

Everything that was unscrambled in my head started to piece itself together. Slowly a small fragment of knowledge started to make sense, "Wait, Jacob is the leader, that means he will..." He quickly cuts me off, "It means I will have to bite you in my current vampire-human form."




To be continued...

There is a world far more violent than the one we believe we live in. Death and war has raged on for centuries and it seems it will never end. Many have died in vain, many are to die in vain, and no one is safe from the horrors of what truly exist in this world.
One boy to rule an army. One Choice to be made. One vast and never ending twist of action, love, violence, sorrow, and honor. In this world the actions of mere mortals is pathetic compared to what one boy must set out to do. With so much of my life twisting around, I just happen to be that one boy, soon to be a man and a king.

As a boy and current prince allow me to introduce myself as Coty, Prince of all species and races. I am kinda short and have really curly brown hair. My eyes are a crappy brown and I wear glasses. I suppose I look like some computer nerd, but computers and good grades are not the greatest of my friends. I am your average sixteen year old teenager and I would like to share my life story from the beginning of my new life. Of course I know you are all thinking, "Oh joy, another stupid autobiography that is going to turn disappointing for us all." Well, I hope it doesn't turn out like that for you. Mainly, due to the fact that I am telling this story from my perspective of the world you probably don't know about right outside your bedroom window.

It all really starts with telling you a bit about my family and myself, of course.
I have two sisters one older and one younger. My older sister recently broke-up with her boyfriend, Jacob, who we have not seen or heard from in nearly three weeks, which is odd, because I thought we were friends.
I also have a cousin who I call "Little Bock". His nickname is only due to his father's being "Big Bock", but his real name is Lester. He has a real good friend named Charles, who I met on several occasions and his parents were good friends with mine.
I haven't heard from either of them in nearly three weeks, as well.

Now, for the boring bit about myself, but know this is only so you can get to know me a bit better.
I lived in a small town, in Tennessee, called Piney Flats. I stayed with my mom, dad, and two sisters in an old, four story, brick farm house. Around there my life was simple, now I can't turn my head without a bit of action happening.
When I stayed there, I was the average kind of guy. Playing video games, riding my bike, swimming, drawing, and writing were all my hobbies I passed time by with.
My favorite time of day currently and always has been at night during a full moon. I don't really know why, but I always feel energized and I am able to stay up for hours on pure energy I feel even up until an hour before I have to wake up or without sleep at all.

My story starts two months before the school semester starting in August. My birthday would be coming up soon on the tenth of June, sweet sixteen, so they say.
I have recently gotten odd dreams and nightmares as well as becoming more restless and irritable than usual. I mainly only sleep during the days and wake up at night, but I will soon learn that things will become a lot more stranger for me.

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