Writer Group discussion

You can find most of my writing here: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

That's a bunch of stand alone stories. Most of which follow similar psychological lines and ideas. I also have found that I like writing in a particular style which I use in those stories.

Then there's this 'multi-chaptered' short story which no one has yet commented on. So I'd like people to point out flaws and so on for sure. It's more of an experiment than anything else.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...