Writer's Group discussion

Updated and added chapters. Any feedback would be much appreciated and I promise to return the favor. Thanks.

Kev

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

I enjoyed it Kevin - very funny! It grabbed me from the start. Other than a few small edits, it was a smooth read.

I loved what he does to the girl - so cruel, yet humorous. And what an interesting job!

I thought the lead character already has a strong voice. And even though he's kinda a jerk, you're humor had me liking him anyway.

It's a bit more cussing than i like, but I also understand that if that's what he's around all day, that's probably what he sounds like.

One line I would change was the one tequila, two.... I think its cliché. Plus, anyone who drinks bourbon, scotch and beer, probably doesn't drink tequila. (just my experience in Kentucky where bourbon is king.) But other than that, on a first read-through, I thought it was very original - wanted to keep reading.