Young Writers discussion

My name is Misty and I love to write and read and yea...this would be so much more detailed if my head wasnt pounding right now. Anywho, this is a part of my story "Secrets of Vex". Please, tell me what you think. Also, I apologize if I put this in the wrong place. Thanks and bubble-byes! :)


Slowly, I stepped toward the old man, who layed in a quickly growing puddle of crimson. I knelt, taking his rough hand into my own, staring into his grey eyes that matched my own.

"I will miss you father," I said softly, squeezing his hand. "Even though I never really knew you, you changed my life for the better."

He squeezed my hand back, coughing slightly. "Valinca, my daughter. I believe in you," His words were corse and broken. "I believe that you can do whatever it is that you put your mind too, no matter how big or small. I love you, my baby girl."

I watched as his eyes slid shut for the very last time. Slowly, I let go of his hand, laying it on his chest, just over his heart. "I will evenge you father," I said, the courage in my voice strong. "You and all the other people who have been hurt by Mayburn and the Vex men."

I stood up and Cro took a step forward, putting his arm over my shoulders. "This isn't over yet, is it?" He asked, though I slreafy knew that he knew the answer.

"No," I whispered, staring up into his blue eyes. "Its just the beggining."