Your Writing ~ Our Comments discussion

All content contained in this folder is to be considered copyright to Joe :)

I miss typed Joe in the title, auto correct saw it wrong, I will fix it when I can but I can't on my ipod

Dark unknowable,
Weightlessness unjustified,
Is it truly death???

Green-choked lake,
Stagnant in verdant growth,
New life belies death.


two haiku there not at all linked, apart form that i wrote them in the same place.

Haha nice... I applaude you for I cannot write a haiku

Again, I unlike most, fail to write in simple verse, so I wrote sagas and haiku, revelling in the cultural history of these to forms and oping to replicate that in my work.

Now, aspiring-heroes, know then that a war is not what you may expect of it:
A battle is a brutal rampage,
A slaughter,
A death-pit,
Your visions of glory; misinterpreted,
That a hero lived where all else died,
My point doth only certify!
Only shows the danger of a real territory contested.
Hark! You call me coward!
But is not a war recalled a war once fought?
So listen you who would go thou to fight,
For the myths I tell the point hath missed.
A hero amongst you I cannot see,
Else blind I am.
So what doth that leave?
A rabble,
Young men, to be killed afore their time,
And headstrong fools who incite them to act thus.
Listen to me, thy bard, appointed for my wisdom;
Fight not now: not later, not ever.
On the fields of death only death awaits:
The scarlet of spilled blood shall paint thee a ghastly shade;
The scent of fear, your own as much as thy foes, fills the mind;
The screams and shouts of pain and panic consume your ears;
And thee a mockery make.
Your courage and bravado so easily assumed far from the fray,
Yet near it tears shall reign, once the dispute sees blood.


I entered this in a school poetry competition, hope you like it.

This is seriously amazing!

I don't believe that, and knowing the style I probs won't win. Bur I really appreciate the opinion of someone as talented as you.

I really do like it, what I can't stand is when poetry doesn't tell a story. (Which sort of explains my aversions to haiku because for most people it is hard to tell a good epic in so few words.

I have a couple new ones for you, I really think they speak.

Haiku are traditionally about taking a passive nonhuman view on things. But what you like is a matter of taste

I did lose.

Category Y7-9

And There Were 4 Prizes

All taken by Y7s

Thats What I Call BIASED.

Haha, probably, but if it helps I got a C on what I thought was one of my best essays of the year... I was seriously put out.

Yeah.
Everything is so subjective...

To normal people's defense I am a bit of a whack a doodle because my style is more... Old

So,
Just like:
TOLKEIN
DICKENS
SHAKESPEARE.

and many other glorious writers

I'd like to think so... that I have that sort of potential, I just have to get the process down to par, and that is, to say the least, difficult and confusing for people who don't know the way I think.

well, best of luck to ya. My english teacher said, and I quote "Joe has a kind of Tolkein-esque writing style, am i right?"

He's a weird teacher, but still pretty cool

I agree, I haven't read a lot on him but from what I have I agree.

yeah, he steals peoples guitars mid-lesson and plays to us...
strange...

Haha... I wish I had cool teachers like that... Nope my English teacher thinks I'm a loon and my adv. algebra teacher thinks I'm stupid and my geometry teacher thinks I sleep too much

WHAT??????

Theres such a thing as sleeping too much?

I think im going to die
O
-|-
/\

And, to quote Tim Burton's Alice in Wonderland:
Yes, I'm afraid your quite mad, but (let me tell you a secret) all the best people are."

Not exact quote, but basically the same.
;)

Haha thanks! :D

Lol
XD
Much appreciated...

Sorry I am not so talkative... Super tired we had two games yesterday

Yeah, thats alright