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I'd help if I didn't have a similar problem...
Emily wrote: "^^ Same."We all need an anonymous support group or something XD
Ok so I don't mean to sound cocky, but I've been told...THAT I RULE AT FLOW. Thing is...idk how i do it lol. Would it be helpful if i posted a short piece? One that has gotten some credit for its flow? Again, not being cocky, just trying to help:)
Sure, Baylor! No problem. Anything is welcome. :)
Ok:) I'll look for a piece, but also i did some research (asked writing friends) and they said that if a piece isn't flowing it's not you, it's the piece. So keep the idea but just start again. Also they said it's good to work with a partner.
Here's a short piece i did; maybe it'll help:)
Away
Come away with me. Let the world fade into the mist and take my hand. I know you don’t feel the same but could you? Only for a moment, only for a breath. I watch you, your head resting in my lap. Have I told you how adorable you are? I’m glad you’re asleep; it makes it easy for me to admire.
As the street lights rush by and the car speeds on, I think only of you. Of how this innocent nap could turn into you taking me away. How you could wrap me in your arms and steal a kiss. I wish you would, though I know you will never. Lately, I’ve begun to accept this. I can live for these moments, for they are so unbelievably perfect.
For just a moment, I’ll let myself dream. I won’t regret that I’m the only one interested. I won’t let myself think of tomorrow. I’m just going to dream about how comfortable we are with each other. How you make me laugh. How…wonderful you are. You make me feel alive, my darling.
In a few minutes I’ll say goodbye and you will leave. Then I will begin to count the days until I get to see you again. Come away with me, for just a breath?
Here's a short piece i did; maybe it'll help:)
Away
Come away with me. Let the world fade into the mist and take my hand. I know you don’t feel the same but could you? Only for a moment, only for a breath. I watch you, your head resting in my lap. Have I told you how adorable you are? I’m glad you’re asleep; it makes it easy for me to admire.
As the street lights rush by and the car speeds on, I think only of you. Of how this innocent nap could turn into you taking me away. How you could wrap me in your arms and steal a kiss. I wish you would, though I know you will never. Lately, I’ve begun to accept this. I can live for these moments, for they are so unbelievably perfect.
For just a moment, I’ll let myself dream. I won’t regret that I’m the only one interested. I won’t let myself think of tomorrow. I’m just going to dream about how comfortable we are with each other. How you make me laugh. How…wonderful you are. You make me feel alive, my darling.
In a few minutes I’ll say goodbye and you will leave. Then I will begin to count the days until I get to see you again. Come away with me, for just a breath?
Flow.
I just...
Can't. Do. It.
I dunno, my writing seems to be so choppy sometimes that I actually wince at my own writing. How do you make your writing flow?
I know some typical ways, with transition words like "furthermore" "thus" "secondly" "lastly" "in conclusion" blah blah blah, but I mean really flow. Not just simple words here and there, but how to fundamentally connect ideas until they flow in terms of content, not just prose. How to bring together all your points into a single, unified construct that lays our your arguments in an organized manner, but not so dull that it loses its authorial voice.
Help.