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::General::
Name: Lightfeather
Age: 38 moons
Gender: she-cat
Clan Specific
Clan: RiverClan
Rank: warrior
Mentor: N/A
Apprentices: N/A
Past Ranks:Kit, apprentice warrior
Family
Father: Duskclaw (Open)
Mother: Spottedtail (Open)
Sibling: N/A
Crush: Iceshade
Offspring: N/A
Description
Eyes: green/yellow
Pelt: light brown, tabby with white
Body Type: Thin, agile
Distinctive Markings: White paws, tail tip, ear tip, and chest
Scars: N/A (Ignore scar in picture)
Personality
General: Lightfeather is very smart, but doesn't ever say much. She likes to keep to herself where tons of thoughts roll around in her head. She likes to take time for herself to think and hunt. She isn't that easy to please and likes the best of everything. She is very nice and has a soft heart. She has what seems like no temper.
History:
Lightfeather was the runt of her litter, but she didn't let that hold her back. She used her smarts to progress. When any attention was called to her she would immediately drew it away from her. She would never really put herself out there and liked to keep to herself. Light feather was teased so much by the other apprentices. She was never bold enough to stand up for herself and had to endure it. She's too afraid to put herself out there, so she doesn't have that many friends. When Lightfeather became a warrior she was very excited. Now she believes her life is starting to become a little boring, so she's breaking out of her shell little by little. She is so happy to have her mate Iceshade. However since they haven't been mates for a while things aren't quite settled down.
Name: Lightfeather
Age: 38 moons
Gender: she-cat
Clan Specific
Clan: RiverClan
Rank: warrior
Mentor: N/A
Apprentices: N/A
Past Ranks:
Family
Father: Duskclaw (Open)
Mother: Spottedtail (Open)
Sibling: N/A
Crush: Iceshade
Offspring: N/A
Description
Eyes: green/yellow
Pelt: light brown, tabby with white
Body Type: Thin, agile
Distinctive Markings: White paws, tail tip, ear tip, and chest
Scars: N/A (Ignore scar in picture)
Personality
General: Lightfeather is very smart, but doesn't ever say much. She likes to keep to herself where tons of thoughts roll around in her head. She likes to take time for herself to think and hunt. She isn't that easy to please and likes the best of everything. She is very nice and has a soft heart. She has what seems like no temper.
History:
Lightfeather was the runt of her litter, but she didn't let that hold her back. She used her smarts to progress. When any attention was called to her she would immediately drew it away from her. She would never really put herself out there and liked to keep to herself. Light feather was teased so much by the other apprentices. She was never bold enough to stand up for herself and had to endure it. She's too afraid to put herself out there, so she doesn't have that many friends. When Lightfeather became a warrior she was very excited. Now she believes her life is starting to become a little boring, so she's breaking out of her shell little by little. She is so happy to have her mate Iceshade. However since they haven't been mates for a while things aren't quite settled down.
NO ONE MAY STEAL ANY OF THIS CAT! General::
Name: Dawn; Honeykit; Honeypaw; Honeyblossom
Age:23 moons
Gender: she-cat
::Clan Specific:: ThunderClan
Rank: rogue
kit
apprentice;
Med cat apprentice
Med cat
warrior(current)
Queen(someday)
deputy
leader
Elder
Mentor: Shatteredice(open,Tom,ThunderClan)
Apprentices:not yet hopefully soon)
Past Ranks:apprentice, kit, rogue
::Family::
Father: Solstice(Alive tried to kill her and is trying to find her to finish the job)
Mother:Luna(deceased killed by Solstice)
Sibling(s): Ghost(tom, pale grey, ice blue eyes might join clan,open)
Jinx(shecat, cream long furred shecat with starting blue eyes her paws are black, open)
Mate:sadly no
Offspring:not yet
::Description::
She is the most beautiful cat in the ThunderClan
She is has long soft fur that is a creamy white color.She has medium sized ginger and brown spots all over her body and she has black paws and ear tips.Her eyes are a glowing blue color.She has a bright pink nose and an elegant and graceful build.
Scars: large one on her belly and some on her sides and one on her neck. Given to her by Solstice
::Personality::
General: She loves to explore and isn't afraid of anything except her father. She is sweet and very graceful. When it comes to toms she is extremely clumsy. She is very agile and a quick thinker.
Strengths: (2 or more) She is extremely fast and is really good at fighting.
Weaknesses: (2 or more) She has this thing where first she shivers and then she passes out and this can happen at any time.
::History::
Dawn was born in a fox den. At first her life wasn't bad, then her parents started arguing about something. She saw Solstice attack Luna and she dropped limply to the floor there was nothing Dawn could do to stop him. Before long, Luna was dead. Dawn gasped in horror and wailed. Solstice heard her and smacked her against the wall. She squeaked as he scored his claws down her belly and down her sides. Ghost saw what was happening and leaped at Solstice ripping at his neck fur. Solstice fell to the ground not dead at all. He scratched her neck and blood poured out. Ghost was terrified. His sister was dying and he didn't know what to do. He then remembered and gently lifted her up and carried her to ThunderClan's camp. He wailed loudly to get their attention and dashed off. The clan took the little kit in and raised her. She grew into a powerful warrior.
Other: She has a flower on her ear. I hope you accept.
Name: DawnfireAge: 30 moons
Birth Time: Sunset
Birth Season: New-leaf
Gender: Male
Breed: White cat
Pelt: White as snow with black ears
Eyes: Bronze
Build: Skinny, muscled, and fluffy
Appearance: https://sp.yimg.com/ib/th?id=JN.J2Z%2...
Birth Clan: ShadowClan
Current Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Warrior
Current Apprentice: Open
Trained Apprentice(s): None
Former Mentor: Open
Personality:
Calm: During a dangerous period, she will sit down
Strong: Worked as a warrior for 9 moons
Loving: Loves her Clan to the end
Agile: Can dodge the fastest warriors' paw strikes
Fun: Be silly and let the kits chase her tail
Mischievous: Plays pranks on the older warriors
Fighter: In battle, if a cat gets seriously injured, she takes his/her place with all the energy of LionClan
History: As an only kit, he was often bored and played with fresh-kill until he made it bleed. Then he would get into trouble by his mother, Whitecloud. His favorite thing to do was play pranks on the warriors. Annoyed, the warriors confronted the leader of ShadowClan. They complained that Spiritdawn (known then as Spiritkit) wouldn't leave them alone. The leader, at that time, thought it would be best to give Spiritkit an early apprenticeship. Apprenticeship always tired out Spiritpaw and after every battle practice, hunting patrol, or border patrol, he went straight to the apprentices den to sleep. But, when he became a warrior, he had lots more time to catch up on his pranks.
Likes: She-cats, kits, danger
Dislikes: Herb smells, dark caves, getting lost,death
Family: Firestorm {mother} [elder] (open)
Blazetail: {father} [deceased] (open)
Crush: Brokenrain
Mate: None
Kits: None
Other: Hopes to have a fun apprentice and a mate
Allplay
Name - Creekfur
Age - 62 moons (about 5 years)
Gender - Tomcat
Clan - ThunderClan
Rank - Senior Warrior
Appearance -
Eyes -
Personality - Pretty chill and relaxed. Very wise and tries to respect everyone. Does his best to protect younger members of the clan.
History - Father died of greencough about 3 seasons ago.
Family
Mother - Fernsnow
Father - Smallspring (deceased)
Mate - Does not want one so that he can protect ThunderClan without having to worry about someone hurting if he died.
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Name -
Age - 8 moons
Gender - She-cat
Clan - ThunderClan
Rank - Apprentice
Appearance -
Stonepaw is grey with black stripes, and a white chest and paws.
Eyes -
Stonepaw's eyes are about the color of rasberries.
Personality - Gets excited and bored easily. Has a prissy attitude.
History - Stonepaw's parents never made much time for her, but she always got more attention than Scorchpaw Timbereyes thinks that loyalty to the clan and the warrior code are the most important things in life. The only other thing that has ever really mattered to him is his mate, Honeytalon. Honeytalon is like Timbereyes, but not nearly as extreme and tries to make time for her kits whenever she can.
Family
Mother - Honeytalon
Father - Timbereyes
Littermates -
Crush/Mate - Open, ask first
::General::Name: Cherrypaw
Age: 6 Moons
Gender: she-cat
Clan Specific
Clan: RiverClan
Rank: Apprentice
Mentor: N/A
Apprentices: N/A
Past Ranks: Kit, apprentice
Family
Father: Lionfur (Deceased)
Mother: Fernshadow (Open)
Sibling: N/A
Crush: N/A
Offspring: N/A
Description
Eyes: green
Pelt: white with a ginger tail
Body Type: lithe with long fur
Distinctive Markings: light ginger tail, a slight limp in her back right leg
Scars: N/A
Personality
General: Cherrypaw is a loud, outspoken cat. She can be very direct and blunt, but generally she is kind and well-intended. While her bright personality and limp can make her seem dopey at first, she is quite sharp, and other cats learn quickly to not underestimate her.
History:
Before Cherrypaw was born, a few members of the Clan fell ill with whitecough, including her parents. Her father died before she was born, and her mother survived only until she was three moons old. The sickness caused Cherrypaw to be born with a slight limp. Rather than being brought down by this, Cherrypaw took it in stride and pushes herself as hard as she can to make up for her disability. As she trains more and more, her limp improves. Her ultimate goal and dream is to be leader of RiverClan, and has little interest in toms. Time will tell whether this is merely a phase.
Mod
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Your name is entirely up to you, of course. Just wanted to give some suggestions that might work :)
Ahh, thank you! Sorry, I had misread the thread. I'll go with Foxpaw, if thats all right :)
Mod
Honeyblossom needs much more description in the entire format, if you will. The history also needs some clean-up on the grammar.
Riversong needs an immediate name change. She also needs much more description. Please use complete sentences when writing a character.
Cherrypaw I will approve when the name is changed. Please add more description as well.
Did I miss anyone?
Mod
Lightfeather - Some more history for her would be great, perhaps expand on what she was like as an apprentice and any key events that helped shape her personality.
Honeyblossom - per Arieya's comment: Honeyblossom needs much more description in the entire format, if you will. The history also needs some clean-up on the grammar.
Spiritdawn - more personality description, please, in full sentences. And, sorry, I've just realised that Spirit as a prefix should not be allowed, due to the cats' reasoning that 'spirit' = sacred. Sorry, but you'll need to change the prefix.
Riversong - name change / new cat. Please let me know, Anastasia, and delete Riversong if you will not be using that cat. As per Arieya's comment: Riversong needs an immediate name change. She also needs much more description. Please use complete sentences when writing a character.
Cherrypaw - Foxpaw would be a much better name for her. The personality definitely needs some more description please! As per Arieya's comment: Cherrypaw I will approve when the name is changed. Please add more description as well.
Creekfur - could we have some more description on his history please? Even as a background character, it would help others play him correctly.
Stonepaw - currently mods are discussing what eye colours, pelts, etc. that are allowed, so he will be pending until it is decided and solidified.
Spiritdawn, what Wings meant is that no combinations that are in the books, such as Whitestorm, Jayfeather, or Briarlight. I think some more general names like Berrynose might be okay but that's Ari's call. :)
Mod
That make sense to you guys?
Mod
Flareheart - more background/history please: how did she join her Clan? Did she settle in well? What happened while she was an apprentice?! Expand on her personality as well please.
Berryburr is Approved!
Eelfrost is Approved!
::General::
Name:
Kitewing
Age:
38 moons
Gender:
Tom / Male
Sexuality:
Heterosexual / Straight
Location of Birth:
WindClan nursery
Time of birth:
Sun-high
Season of birth:
Newleaf
::Clan Specific::
Rank:
Warrior
Mentor:
Foxclaw, elder
Apprentices:
::Personality::
General:
Kitewing is as confident as can be. He always has his head held high and will never back down from a fight. He is a ladies' man- ahem, tom- and never hesitates to voice his opinion. He is loud and outgoing, a natural leader, and can win any argument. Unless it's with a she-cat.
Deep inside, Kitewing is caring and loyal to a fault. He would rather die than betray his clan, as his clanmates mean everything to him. He will go out of his way to assist them in any way possible. Nothing can stand in his way when a clanmate is in need of help. Kitewing puts on a front of being fiercely hostile to other clans, but inside he can't help but wonder what their life is like.
Strengths:
~Fighting
~Arguing
~Leading
~Flirting(cat-style)
Weaknesses:
~Stout devotion to his clan
~She-cats' arguments
~Clanmates in trouble
Fears:
~Never be able to prove himself
~Won't be able to save a clanmate someday
~Never be good enough for a she-cat
Quirks:
~Fascination with tree-climbing
~Longs to learn how to swim
Goals:
~Become deputy
~Have another apprentice
~Have a mate
Belief:
StarClan
::Zodiac::
Zodiac:
Aries, the ram
Birth Stone:
Aquamarine, bloodstone
Birth Flower:
Daffodil
Element:
Fire
Lucky Color:
Blue, green
Lucky Number:
3, 4
Best Match:
Leo, Aries, Libra, Sagittarius, Gemini
::Description::
Eyes:
Amber
Pelt:
Short gray fur
Body Type:
Sleek as fitting a WindClan cat, but very muscular with long legs
Distinctive Markings:
N / A
Scars:
Minor scars that are barely noticeable from previous battles, but one large scar on his left foreleg
::History::
Kitted:
Kitewing was a lively young kit that always took charge of the games he and his siblings would play. He could never sit still and was rarely in the nursery. He spent more time gallivanting out in the center of camp, not caring that some unsuspecting warrior could step on him at any moment. He was without a care in the world for his first six moons, with no goal but to become and apprentice. His siblings were quite meek and often didn't want to play with him, since most of the time he got the best deal. He had the fastest legs and smartest mind, and although his siblings weren't jealous, they wished he would come down off his pedestal and act like they were all equals for once.
Apprenticed:
Kitekit couldn't have been more excited when the leader announced he would be apprenticed to Foxclaw. Foxclaw had been the only warrior Kitekit had taken much interest in, following him around and constantly bombarding him with questions. Foxclaw was a patient mentor and taught Kitepaw the importance of looking for the good intentions in others, not just attacking without considering their motives. Kitekit understood how vital peace was to the survival of the clans, but battle training was still his favorite. Hunting he liked to, because it meant he got to run. Battle training got a little different when Kitepaw became bigger and stronger and started defeating his mentor in mock battles. Foxclaw informed the leader Kitepaw was ready to become a warrior.
Young Life:
As a warrior Kitewing was devoted to joining as many patrols as he could. He didn't want to sit around uselessly but also got annoyed when he wasn't chosen to lead the patrols. He did his best not to undermine his superiors but he couldn't help wanting to be the best one. He always tried to throw out his opinion so everyone knew what he thought, since he believed he had excellent opinions. And he did, most of the time, but a lot of times it got annoying in clan meetings when he would stand up and announce how the leader should lead. One day, Fixckaw came back to him and explained to him lightly how he was being a pain and Kitewing obeyed. He settled into a comfortable life style of one or two patrols a day and didn't care whether his opinion was heard or not. As a reward for becoming a better warrior, the deputy made him lead more patrols. Life was good.
The Golden Years:
N / A
The Twilight Years:
N / A
::Family::
Father:
Nighthawk (open)
Mother:
Petaldash (open)
Sibling(s):
Bluerun, sister (open)
Aspenfang, brother (open)
Mate:
Single
Offspring:
N / A
Mod
@Stealthheart - To be the med. cat. apprentice, you need to apply here first and be accepted by the mods. Your history should be written in third person, as all roleplay is, and should have proper sentences, please. Your personality should also be written in full sentences.
@Duckkit - You've missed out strengths/weaknesses that Duckkit will later have, and we need a few sentences on Kitted since he's 2 moons old. I know you'll update later, but 2 moons can equal 2 sentences, heh. Other than that, all good.
@Freckledsky - A little more history would be perfect, since she's 138 moons old, and I don't think that can really be condensed into 8 sentences. I also need Demi to check your app out since it's her open cat.
Mod
Mod
please delete your character profile above once you have copied it to their respective Finished Characters topic
- Kitewing
- Patchwhisper
- Duckkit
- Duckpaw
- Skylark
PENDING
- Honeyblossom [Burntstar] (expand on history/personality)
- Dawnfire [Manga] (write personality in sentences)
- Creekfur [Emma] (more history)
- Stonepaw [Emma] (realistic eyes please)
- Cherrypaw [Wednesday] (name change to Foxpaw)
- Freckledsky [Ash] (needs more history / Demi needs to comment)
I will now be cleaning up comments in this thread that are no longer needed here.
Name: JuniperpawAge: 81/2 moons
Gender: She-cat
Clan and Rank: RiverClan Medicine Cat Apprentice
Personality: Juniperpaw is a skilled fighter but also thinks through things before doing them. She is loyal to her Clan and has the ability to jump three badger lengths in the air, the leg muscles that once belonged to SkyClan. Around toms, Juniperpaw is either shy or defiant. With kits, she is usually kind and playful.
Quick History: Juniperpaw was a warrior apprentice for a short while, long enough to learn the basic training. After she became a medicine cat apprentice, she started to watch the training sessions and to teach herself the moves in the training clearing when she thought that no one was looking and perfected the moves in only a couple of tries. Juniperpaw would have loved to become a warrior, but she is glad that she chose to be a medicine cat apprentice because this is what taught her the essence of patience.
Description: https://encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/im...
Father: Flameember (view spoiler)
Mother: Morninglight (view spoiler)
Sibling(s): Redpaw (view spoiler)
Mate: None at the moment
Crush: Creekfur
Mod
Shiningpaw -
--Shining- is a prefix already used in ThunderClan, so you'll have to change Shiningpaw's name again please.
--Do you intend to make Ospreyclaw yourself? There are mentors open to apprentices already in ThunderClan, and generally it would be preferential to have a taken cat as mentor.
--I personally would not see "including everyone" as a strength - just pointing that out. Perhaps being "socially aware" or some variant of it? Also, this is the opposite of "forgets about others", really.
--Belief is belief in StarClan/Dark Forest, generally.
--You need to write some biography in her history, rather than flashbacks. You can use both, but we must have at least a few lines in each section above or beneath the flashback. For Kitted, you can describe how she was treated by her littermates, perhaps why she likes to include everyone. For Apprenticed, describe how her training has gone, what she excels in and how her mentor helps her.
This group is really difficult. I need to have someone teach me the ways of this group in careful detail.
Mod
::General::Name: Shadedsilver
Past Names:
Nightkit (as a kit she was born named NightKit but once her mother saw her personality, she decided to change that)
Shadowedkit (became known this at mom's request)
Shadowedpaw (name as an apprentice)
Shadowedsilver (first warrior name but her leader felt a different one suited her better)
Age: 28 moons
Gender: Shecat
::Clan Specific::
Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Queen
Mentor: Lightningheart, Deceased tom
Apprentices:
-all are now either warriors that are living or dead
*Deathstare, Alive tom
*Yellowclaw, Deceased shecat (received as a warrior in starclan)
*Gripestorm, Alive tom
*Juniperlily, Alive Shecat
*Willowflare, alive shecat
Past Ranks:
Kit
Apprentice
Warrior
::Family::
Father: Adder, kittypet ; deceased
Mother: Juneshadow , former queen ; alive
Sibling(s):
Redfeather, Brother
Stormcall, Brother
Cinderfire, Sister
Stolenscar, Sister
Mate: Blackstone of Riverclan, Alive tom
Offspring: unborn
::Description::
::Personality::
General: In general, she is fiery in personality but can be stubborn. She tends to love hunting, but she always loves stories and spends most of her time talking to the kits in the nursery. She loves to speak and she does so fast sometimes. She eventually becomes evil and nothing can stop it, well someone can but not at first.
Strengths: Hunting, caring for others, knowing herbs, her family
Weaknesses: her father, anyone who gets in her way that is not helping, and her brothers at times
::History::
Shadedsilver was born as Nightkit in Shadowclan. As a kit she was very stubborn and most couldn't get anything past her, she was even criticized for being part kittypet. She would always sneak out to hunt and that was when she met Blackstone of Riverclan. He was known as Cleverkit at the time though. A moon older than she, he had been sneaking out since he was 2 moons old. They didn't instantly fall in love. He would tease her and they would hunt together. It started off as a friendship. A moon later, Nightkit became known as Shadowedkit. They continued to hunt and the more they did, the closer they became. Until one day when she became a warrior and they decided to become mates. A couple of moons after that, they decided they wanted a family. She was known as Shadowedsilver then, but a day later her leader renamed her Shadedsilver. Currently, Shadedsilver is expecting kits.
::General::Name: Poisonfang
Past Names:
Lady Blue (Kittypet name and loner name)
Poisonpaw
Age: 25 moons
Gender: Shecat
::Clan Specific::
Rank: Queen
Mentor: Skytree, Deceased tom
Apprentices:
-All are warriors or dead
*Coldblaze, Alive and shecat
*Purplefeather, deceased and tom (received in starclan as a warrior)
*Gorgeclaw, alive and shecat
*Brackenfire, alive and tom
Past Ranks:
Kittypet
Loner
Apprentice
::Family::
Father: Fire, Deceased tom
Mother: Snowy, Deceased shecat
Sibling(s):
*Fireflare, Deceased brother
*Darkstorm, Alive brother
*Mossspark, Alive sister
*Mapleflame, Alive sister
Mate: Burningclaw, Deceased tom
Offspring:
*Bluekit, 6 moons and shekit
*Hawkkit, 6 moons and tom
*Greykit, 6 moons and tom
::Description::
::Personality::
General: Poisonfang is sweet yet she can be fierce. She is a great hunter and fighter but also a very protective mother. She is loving and caring but at the same time willing to die for her clan and family.
Strengths: hunting, caring for family, fighting, and being protective
Weaknesses: loosing her mother, the death of her brother Fireflare, and many things that are not known yet
::History:: Poisonfang, just like Firestar, was born into a family of loving parents as a kittypet with a triplet brother named Blaze and a sister named Mapled as well as a younger sister named Mossy and a younger brother named Max as well as a family connection to many Thunderclan cats and Shadowclan cats including Tigerstar, Shadowstar, Thunderstar, and Firestar as well as Greystripe. Only that didn't last very long. As soon as they were old enough to fend for themselves, Lady Blue killed her own father after seeing him kill her mother. After that her siblings and her were found in the forest and taken into Shadowclan. Some of the other apprentices, mainly the toms, gave her somewhat of a hard time but they gave her brother an even more hard time. She got along better with the others eventually.
::General::Name: Stolenscar
Past Names:
Stolenkit
Stolenpaw
Stolenheart
Age: 26 moons
Gender: Shecat
::Clan Specific::
Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Queen
Mentor: Heatherfall, currently an elder shecat
Apprentices:
*Icywinds, Tom; deceased
*Windyfeather, Shecat; currently known as Leslie and is a loner
*Snowyberry, deceased shecat (received as a warrior in starclan)
Past Ranks:
Kit
Apprentice
Warrior
::Family::
Father: Adder, kittypet; deceased
Mother: Juneshadow, Alive and her location is unknown
Sibling(s):
Redfeather and Stormcall ~ Brothers
Cinderfire and Shadedsilver ~ Sisters
Mate: Fangclawed, Alive tom but missing in action
Offspring:
Sweetpaw/Caroline, 9 moons ~ Currently Rogue but plans to be Kittypet and used to be apprentice
::Description::
Eyes: Purple
Pelt: Grey
Body Type: slim
Distinctive Markings: some stripes
Scars: one near her left eye
::Personality::
General: In general, Stolenscar is sweet and outgoing. Sure she has her moments, but she is always willing to sacrifice herself before her family. She is still protective of Caroline, even though it was Sweetpaw's choice to give up her clan heritage and live like she is. Stolenscar regrets every moment she was not with her daughter.
Strengths: caring for her kit, her family, fighting, making friends and hunting
Weaknesses: knowing her own daughter wants to become a kittypet, her father, and sometimes her mate
::History:: Stolenscar was born as Stolenkit in Shadowclan and she was criticized for being partially kittypet as well as being on the smaller side. Her family loved her and still does. When she was old enough, she became known as Stolenpaw. At the time, others thought it was because she loved to steal things when in reality she was just named after her great great great great great grandmother Stolenflare. Stolenpaw seemed to have everything she wanted at the time. Then she met Fangpaw, a sweet little tom who though the smallest and the runt of his litter was also very fierce. They hunted together and slowly built up their relationship until they became mates when Stolenpaw was a warrior known as Stolenheart. About a moon later, her leader renamed her as Stolenscar due to a scar she had gotten in battle near her left eye. After having Sweetkit, Stolenscar became extremely protective. When Sweetkit turned 6 moons, she became known as Sweetpaw. Two days later, she left and named herself Caroline. She then seemingly disappeared into the forest.
::General::Name: Cinderfire
Past Name(s):
Cinderkit
Cinderpaw
Age: 24 moons
Gender: Shecat
::Clan Specific::
Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Warrior
Mentor:
Flaredfang, Currently a possible elder tom but no one knows as he went missing a day ago
Apprentices:
-Are warriors or dead
*Lilyaspen, Alive and shecat
*Waterpaw, Deceased Tom
*Branchflame, Deceased Shecat (received in starclan as a warrior)
Past Ranks:
Kit
Apprentice
::Family::
Father: Deceased (Adder)
Mother: Juneshadow (Alive, but her location is unknown)
Sibling(s):
Stormcall and Redfeather ~ Brothers
Stolenscar and Shadedsilver ~ Sisters
Mate: Wants
Offspring: Wants
::Description::
::Personality::
General: In general, Cinderfire can be feisty or even fiery, but most of the time she is sweet and outgoing. She loves to hunt and she loves caring for her siblings. She also loves helping the med cat find herbs. She loves being outdoors and she hates the fact that she has even some tie to the kittypet world.
Strengths: hunting, fighting, caring for others, finding herbs, and helping out
Weaknesses: her ties to the kittypet world, not knowing where her mother is, and knowing her father is dead
::History:: Cinderfire was born into Shadowclan not knowing that her father was a kittypet, so she got criticized a lot for not havinga father around when all the other kits either had their dad around or knew of their father. When she was 5 moons old, her mother told her of her father's heritage and Cinderkit just walked away not speaking to her mother after that. When she became Cinderpaw, her mother was last seen at the ceremony and then seemingly just hasn't been seen since. Cinderfire sometimes wonders where her mother is, but the only one who knows for certain where their mother is Stormcall.
::General::Name: Juniperlily
Past Names:
Lilies
Lily
Juniperpaw
Age: 15 moons
Gender: Shecat
::Clan Specific::
Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Warrior
Mentor: Shadedsilver, Alive shecat
Apprentices:
all are deceased
Past Ranks:
Kittypet
Loner
Apprentice
::Family::
Father: Viperstone, missing tom
Mother: Ruby, deceased shecat
Sibling(s): none
Mate: thinking
Offspring: wants
::Description::
::Personality::
General: In general, Juniperlily is sweet and she can be distant at times but she is loving and caring. She spends a lot of time hunting and she loves to help other mentors teach their apprentices. She loves getting to know other cats. She loves swimming sometimes, but most of the time she tends to spend her days doing whatever has to be done.
Strengths: hunting, fighting, swimming, getting to know others, and helping out
Weaknesses: not knowing if she has any siblings, her parents being dead and one missing, sometimes making friends
::History:: Juniperlily was born a kittypet. Not enjoying the life at 8 moons old, she left and named herself Lily. When she came upon the clans at 9 moons, she was allowed to stay in Shadowclan and became known as Juniperpaw but she got bullied for having been born a kittypet. She had to train extra hard just to prove she could fight as well as the others despite her heritage. Soon after she finished her training, she became known as Juniperlily. She then trained a few apprentices herself and they ended up being stupid enough to get themselves killed or jump off cliffs and die. She hopes to have an apprentice one day that will not do the things her previous apprentices did.
::General::Name: Coldblaze
Past Names:
Coldkit
Coldpaw
Coldheart
Age: 12 moons
Gender: Shecat
::Clan Specific::
Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Warrior
Mentor: Poisonfang , Alive shecat
Apprentices: has yet to receive her first
Past Ranks:
Kit
Apprentice
::Family::
Mother: Silversnow, Deceased (32 moons when she died)
Father: Thistlebranch, Deceased (34 moons when he died)
Sibling(s):
Deathstare, 12 moons, Missing In Action brother
Plasmaflames, 12 Moons, Deceased brother
Mate: Wants
Offspring: Wants
::Description::
::Personality::
General: She can be cold hearted, but once you get to know her she easily warms up to you. She is outgoing and talented yet sweet and caring. She loves to spend time goofing off occasionally and she spends time looking for her missing brother. She hopes he will return and she wants her other brother to be reborn as some other cat. She can be very protective as well and she is a great fighter for her size.
Strengths: hunting, fighting, her family, making friends, the hope her living brother will return to her, the hope that her other brother will be reborn
Weaknesses: her brother being dead, the other being missing, her parents being dead, and sometimes her clanmates
::History::
Coldblaze was the first born of Silversnow and Thistlebranch in Shadowclan. When she became a warrior she was known as Coldheart. She used to goof off a lot as a kit with her brother, Deathstare but as they got older and when they had their ceremony they became more mellow. She also used to tease her brother Plasmaflames as kits. When she became an apprentice, the other apprentices often pushed her away and she had a hard time making friends with them. She was there when her one brother went missing and the other fell off the cliff. After the two events happened, she became renamed to Coldblaze. After that she turned a little different and didn't seem to want to talk to others much. She currently spends her time looking for her brother and hoping she will get a good apprentice.
::General::Name: Redfeather
Past Names:
Redkit
Redpaw
Redeyed
Age: 22
Gender: Tom
::Clan Specific::
Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Warrior
Mentor: Damnedheart, Deceased tom
Apprentices: all deceased
Past Ranks:
Kit
Apprentice
::Family::
Father: Adder, Deceased tom
Mother: Juneshadow, Alive shecat but location unknown
Sibling(s):
Stormcall ~ Brother
Shadedsilver, Stolenscar, Cinderfire ~ Sisters
Mate: wants
Offspring: wants
::Description::
::Personality::
General: Redfeather is outgoing and smart as well as loving and caring. He loves to hunt and fish, as well as take care of his siblings. He wants to find their mother so bad but he knows that his brother will not tell any of them where their mother is actually. Redfeather is hoping that the next apprentice he gets will obey him as his previous ones all did not obey. He really loves to spend time making jokes.
Strengths: making jokes, his family, making friends, hunting, fighting, fishing, and the hope of finding his mother
Weaknesses: his father, knowing his brother won't reveal their mother's location, swimming, and his last few apprentices
::History::
Redfeather was born into a family that was happy in Shadowclan. He found out the earliest that his father was a kittypet, but was also criticized and bullied for having a dad who was a kittypet due to ShadowClan having a huge dislike of Kittypets. He didn't like the idea and so he almost ran off to become a loner, but did not as he decided to just take it slow in camp for a few days. When he first became a warrior, he was known as Redeyed due to his eyes. Although, his leader thought that a different name fit him so he was renamed to Redfeather. He now spends a lot of his time caring for his siblings and trying to convince Caroline to rejoin the clans. Redfeather hopes one day that his niece will make the right choice and come home to the clans. For now, he spends time talking to her and hunting as well as looking for his mother.
::General::Name: Stormcall
Past Names:
Stormkit (as a kit before and after he was reborn)
Stormpaw (before he was reborn)
Stormpaw (as an apprentice when he was reborn)
Age: 20 moons
Gender: Tom
::Clan Specific::
Clan: Shadowclan
Rank: Warrior
Mentor: Birdwhistle, Deceased tom
Apprentices: all deceased
Past Ranks:
Kit
Apprentice
::Family::
Father: Adder, DECEASED tom
Mother: Juneshadow, Alive shecat Stormcall and knows the location of her
Sibling(s):
Redfeather ~ Brother
Cinderfire, Stolenscar, Shadedsilver ~ Sisters
Mate: Swiftheart, 18 moons, Alive shecat
Offspring: Wants
::Description::
::Personality::
General: He is outgoing and protective as well smart. He can be stubborn but he loves making friends. He is outgoing as well as sweet. He loves making friends and getting to know other cats. He is well acquainted with the territory and he knows where his mother is but will not tell his siblings as he is one that keeps a promise. He loves to hunting and protect his clan. He would die to keep it safe again if he had to. He loves going to gatherings and he loves spending time with others. He is also very interesting in that he has an australian accent. He spends a lot of time calling others "mate" when really all he means is friend.
Strengths: knowing where their mother is, his siblings, being a cat reborn, and hunting
Weaknesses: his father, not being able to telling his siblings where their mother is, and swimming
::History:: Stormcall was born and raised in Shadowclan. He was first known as Stormkit and he was best friends with Silverkit. As they grew, they became interested in each other but by the time they reached apprentice-hood they had promised each other that they would become mates and not just friends. However, that Stormpaw was in a battle and ended up dieing. Then, Stormkit was born and he was Stormpaw reborn, which basically is StarClan saying that he could have a second chance at making a good life for himself. The other kits gave him a hard time about his father not being around and he would often get into fights with some of them. When he became known as Stormpaw, it was different. Silverkit had already become Silversnow and had kits as well as died. He trained extra hard and almost drowned but his call for help was heard through the storm that was going on that day. By the time he became Stormcall, he became mates with Swiftheart a couple of days later. After finding out where his mother went, he promised to keep it a secret and has since then.
::General::Name: Darkstorm
Past Names:
Max
Darkpaw
Age: 23 moons
Gender: Tom
::Clan Specific::
Clan: ShadowClan
Rank: Warrior
Mentor: Sharpfang, Deceased tom
Apprentices: All Deceased
Past Ranks:
Kittypet
Loner
Apprentice
::Family::
Father: Fire, Deceased tom
Mother: Snowy, Deceased shecat
Sibling(s):
Poisonfang, Mapleflame, Mossspark ~ Sisters, All Alive
Fireflare ~ Brother, Deceased
Mate: Wants
Offspring: Wants
::Description::
::Personality::
General: He is generally sweet but has a hidden side of him that only his father knew about. He loves hunting and protecting his clan. He is outgoing and athletic yet sometimes stubborn and he is creative and caring. He loves spending time getting to know other cats but he also loves to spend time keeping his sister and her family safe. He would die to protect the clan if that was needed, but he would also die to protect his niece and nephew. He spends a lot of time on his own sometimes and he is not easily convinced at times as well. He loves to make things a mystery at times as well.
Strengths: hunting, fighting, making things a mystery, his family, and being protective
Weaknesses: his mother being dead, sometimes his other side, and not knowing when death will take him
::History:: He was born a kittypet and was pretty happy. From an early age him and his sister trained with their father to be the best that they could. However, when they were old enough to properly deal with things their father was thinking of killing them. When their mother found out, she was killed and Max was watching along with his older sister. Then the two siblings wandered around the forest for a bit before being found by some Shadowclan cats. Not sure if they would be allowed to stay or not, Max didn't really socialize much with the other cats at first as they gave him a hard time even before he became an apprentice. After being allowed to stay, Max started to socialize more with the others. When he was old enough, he became known as Darkpaw. About 6 moons later, he became known as Darkstorm. Since then he has trained a few apprentices of his own and hopes to have one that lives.
Mod
Just as overall info, we do not follow the multiple-capitalization format for the names. I know there are some groups that do that, but we stick to the format used in the books. If you could please correct the names of the cats in all your characters to Shadedsilver, Poisonfang, etc. that would be much appreciated. As soon as you do that, I will let you know if your characters are approved individually.
dm me about if they are approved, it will be easier to know then or here is fine too
Mod
He needs what Clan he's a part of under his Clan Specific please.
Also could you please put somewhere in his history or somewhere else in his character sheet about what exactly you mean by a cat reborn.
Darkstorm
Same thing with his Clan.
Could you add some more detail in his history please? Maybe something about the fact that ShadowClan doesn't really like kitty-pets and other apprentices gave him a hard time? Or some specific stuff about his apprenticeship?
Mod
@Shiningpaw - APPROVED! But just a head's up: Aspen- is a taken prefix in ShadowClan, but if Aspenfall is deceased then just note that please. if Aspenfall is meant to be open, please change his name. Mistpaw's name needs to be changed, as Mist- is also a taken prefix. Perhaps Fogpaw? Thanks!
Tempus wrote: "@Leopardmint - APPROVED!@Shiningpaw - APPROVED! But just a head's up: Aspen- is a taken prefix in ShadowClan, but if Aspenfall is deceased then just note that please. if Aspenfall is meant to be ..."
Got it thanks!
Alright so Sparrowpaw is pretty good, I just have a few things.~First off, we already have a Sparrow- in ThunderClan. :) Her name will need to be changed. You could check in the Clanmates thread or Finished Characters threads, and use Ctrl-F to find if any cats in the appropriate clan have the prefix you want to use.
~Second, I'm a bit confused about how she is so shy, reserved, and terrified of being front and center, but is also really good with words and great at persuading other cats? It seems like a bit of a contradiction, and needs some more reasoning and explanation. The fact that a kit without much contact or socialization with other kits would have poor social skills furthers the contradicting statement.
~Thirdly, you don't have any of her early history and circumstances of her birth. Who was her father? How did he meet her mother? You say in her apprenticeship that he was killed defending her and her mother from a dog. When was this? Was she born yet? If so, why was she out of camp and wouldn't she remember that? Or was her mother pregnant with her(if so, why was mother out of camp by herself)? Was she the only kit in the litter? If so, I'm assuming that the kits you're talking about her being in the nursery with were other kits? You also need some more elaboration on her apprentice years since she's been an apprentice for four moons already. :)
~Can you elaborate on the goal of making her parents proud in her history? You say she wants to make them proud, but you also say that her father is dead. ;)
~Her name reason doesn't necessarily make sense, but I don't know that it's too big of an issue so it's probably fine. :)
Alright! Once you've edited myself or another mod can take a look and make sure she's good to go! ^-^ Thanks~
Alright Lilian, I have a few things for Icestreak. :)~First off, we already have an Ice- in RiverClan, the current/near future leader in fact. ;) You also can't claim him as the eventual leader, I believe(another mod correct me if I'm wrong). His prefix will need to be changed, and you can check in the Clanmates thread or Finished Characters threads using the Ctrl-F function to search and see if there is already a cat with that name/prefix in the corresponding clan. :) You will also need to remove the future name 'Icestar'.
~Secondly, instead of having his previous mentor open, it would be preferred that you post in a collab thread to find someone that has a cat old enough to have been his mentor, that way we minimize the amount of 'opens' floating around. :)
~Thirdly, you say he's born at dawn, then you say he's born at 1:00 am. While this isn't a big part of the character, I don't believe dawn is at 1 in the morning? ;) The majority of the time dawn is around 5:30-7:00 ish in the morning, typically between 6 and 6:30 am. :)
~His personality is currently blank. :) We need you to fill it in, or if this character is in progress please move him to the workshop. (Though keep these edits in mind if he is in progress, because the same or similar feedback will most likely be given so it would be easier to just edit him now rather than to post again and wait.)
~You didn't finish filling in his zodiac either? Which again while not a big issue, if you are going to keep those fields there it would be nice if you could fill those in. :)
~I don't quite understand his appearance, specifically the eyes and pelt. The eyes section I'm not quite sure what you mean... it's a bit jumbled and confusing, and the part about him going blind doesn't make much sense. As far as his pelt, the length of his fur doesn't determine what clan he's in ;) What do you mean by a 'hidden white mark' on the back of his head? And what do you mean by the part about him not fighting?
~In history, do you mean they had four one-kit litters? Littlepaw and Halfpaw are listed as the same age at the bottom, so you either need to change one of their ages or edit to say there were only three total litters and the third was both of them. Also, we're going to need a reason behind Halfpaw's name since the prefix Half- is typically only for injury name change purposes. You also say that Icestreak is the second born of their second litter. That would mean there was more than one kit in the second litter; otherwise he would be the only born kit from that litter. :) I don't quite understand what you mean about him being second born and it being easy for the clan and all that bit, and the 'plans by StarClan' thing. What exactly are you aiming for here? It doesn't quite make sense. Next, in his apprentice stage, I don't quite get why you mention StarClan messing up his life. They don't necessarily decide or put things into motion. Secondly, if he didn't learn how to fight and couldn't fight the leader wouldn't allow him to become a warrior. Warrior training and learning to fight and protect your clanmates is half of being a warrior, it would be incredibly difficult to be a warrior and not fight. Next, how would his mother have died from being pushed into the water? They are RiverClan cats after all, they can swim, so you'll need to explain that further. You also need to explain the rest of his apprenticeship history after his mother dies. Next, you need to write his history up until the roleplay starts when he is 24 moons old. Apprentices are usually made warriors around 12/13 moons old, so that's half of his life so far(approximately) that needs written and explained.
Alright, once you edit these myself or another mod will be glad to take a look! ^-^
Ah, okay. Well generally, since most cats are not going to become leader, we just leave that off of the sheet. :) Since it's more likely than not that they would simply stay at warrior status, that communicates your point more clearly. Name progression also is supposed to include only their past, current, and future names. :) If you could remove the crossed off Icestar, that would be much appreciated.
DemiDragon~[semi hiatus]~ Go directly to hell, do not pass go, do not collect $200. wrote: "Alright Lilian, I have a few things for Icestreak. :)~First off, we already have an Ice- in RiverClan, the current/near future leader in fact. ;) You also can't claim him as the eventual leader, I..."
FIXED!
@Lilian I went ahead and put it in a spoiler since it's fairly long. :)(view spoiler)
Alright! Once you edit I'll take another look. :)
@Raya I'll try to take another look soon ^.^ I have homework to do, so I'm not sure when I'll get it done. :) Another mod might take a look, but I'm not sure since I think we're all pretty busy atm.
DemiDragon~[semi hiatus]~ Go directly to hell, do not pass go, do not collect $200. wrote: "@Lilian I went ahead and put it in a spoiler since it's fairly long. :)Okay, I still have some edits for you to make.
~Where did his prefix come from? I need a reason behind why his mother would ..."
Thanks
Name-cottonkitGender-she-kit
Age-5 moons
Location of birth-riverClan nursery
Time of birth-dawn
Season of birth-new leaf
Rank-kit
Mentor-open (need someone to make)
Apprentices-none yet
Personally
General
She is easily distracted but still has the heart of a warrior. She has many skills and loves to help out anyone who needs is. She she doesn't like when other cats mess with her but when they do they will ... Well they shouldn't. She is and will always be a loyal Riverclan warrior.
Strengths
-fighting
-swimming
-helping
-looking after young(when she gets older)
-her siblings
Weaknesses
-hunting on land
-staying positive
-swiftness
Fears
-being hated
-being alone
-her siblings dieing
Quirks
-can't climb trees at all
-likes watching butterflies and moths fly
-likes eating herbs
Goals
-to be a great mentor when she gets older
-to someday lead riverclan
Zodiac
Aries
Birthstone
Aquamarine
Element
Leaf
Lucky colour-green
Lucky number-6
Description -
History/future
Nothing important happens to cottonkit she lives a medium length life and dies a warriors death in a battle
Family
Mother- whitewater (open to make)
Father -(need someone to make whitewater a mate)
Siblings -sproutkit, dewkit (open)
Grandma -cindersplash (dead)
Grandpa-troutclaw(dead)
Mate-(need someone to make future mate)
Kits-none yet
