The Student Prince discussion

I recently heard that the author of this work is going to do some editing and changes in order to make it publishable.

I'm assuming that the Lady Viva bits will be rewritten a bit to avoid any copyright infringement issues.

I'm curious what else folks would like to see changed.

Personally, I loved, loved, loved this story and thought that most of the writing was top-drawer. I did notice a larger than optimum number of references to small furry critters caught in the glare of oncoming headlights though.

I'm guessing that the author had some traumatic experience in her past that's bleeding through here. And that she should change-up her images of startlement but other than that I can suggest no significant changes.

Anyone else have any pet peeves or suggestions?