Young Writers Group discussion

Hi my name is Ingrid, I'm thirteen years old, and have been writing for just about four years. Even when I seem to enter into young children's writing contests or essay competitions, I cannot "nail it" and don't even wind up third place. I was wondering if anyone could critique my writing (vocab, spelling, plot, indentations, sentence structure, etc.) on a late piece I am currently revising, called 'Elizabeth'. Its a freewrite, so this is the only chapter I am putting up but I'd really like to know how to contrive visionary emotions from my readers and how that can be so from my writing so far. You may like, or critique as you wish, but please do so in the link!

I also have poems and flash fictions for those who are into that sorta stuff. Funny because I thought I was awful at poetry, but it seems to be better than my writing and usually helps me alot:D

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

Yay, I'm not the youngest now!

I'm only 12, am I the youngest here?

ur younger than me, I'm 13

Dyne wrote: "ur younger than me, I'm 13"

I'm thirteen too.

coolies

Ingrid wrote: "Hi my name is Ingrid, I'm thirteen years old, and have been writing for just about four years. Even when I seem to enter into young children's writing contests or essay competitions, I cannot "nail..."

my name is Elizabeth :o
whats it about?

i deleted the info, sorry for not telling ya earlier.

Dudes I'm only 11-now who's the youngest?