Better Than Starbucks discussion

My mentor for Haiku has a collection out at Amazon.

http://www.amazon.com/Three-Turtles-L...

please read and discuss, and/or post your own or your favorite Haiku of others here.

Here is one of his and one of mine:

his:

Only wire grass grows
Where last winter orchids bloomed,-
Wind stirs the pines’ limbs.

mine:


Brown lizard floating
Waits its time on pool toy
Til lunch or escape

Another one by Kevin:

Sound of breaking waves:
A spray of sea water shoot’s
Through the reef’s blowhole.

from cotton fields
crawfish smell the river
and leave their towers

thanks, yes, i like it as long as i dont think of it as haiku:) really like it though

Nice work all, and I especially appreciate Belly's admission of "haiku like."

Just for the heck of it,

FOUR KIGO HAIKU

Fall leaves from blazing
sun drifting down to white ground
await spring budding.

That's what? 8 1/2 pounds? I'm not the best with the metric system.

8.8, not 8 lb, 8 ounces, a bit under 8 13

Anthony wrote: "My mentor for Haiku has a collection out at Amazon.

http://www.amazon.com/Three-Turtles-L...

please read and discuss, and/or post your own or your favorite Haiku of ..."
Thank you for starting this group!
in the spirit, but maybe not the exact form of Haiku, a few offerings of mine:

Green gold on the mango-tree
sun on leaves
Sweeter than fruit


On the forest floor
Dead leaves crackle:
The sound of sunlight.

Something this way comes.
Something this way comes.
Aaah, my shadow approaches me.

The rain cuts the earth
Lines on an old woman's face.

A leaf spirals down
A wasp hums up
Balance.

somewhere,
pythons coil
their strength in deep forests

the listening flower
cocks a purple ear
to the sound of bees

No maybe not exactly haiku, but good and some of them remind me of the Japanese translations of old haiku

Thank you.

thanks
and i love the imagery of knobby fingers sorting memories as life comes closer to a close, beautiful
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blinking sleepy eyes
the turtle watches the pond
on fallen tree

My friend Art offered a suggestion which I think not only puts the 5-7-5 back in order, but improves the verse as well!

blinking sleepy eyes
the turtle watches the pond
from the fallen tree

Art is smART:)

(almost a palindrome, though almost seems to count not at all in that endeavor!)

lol

Otherwise there is the slightest chance one would mistakenly think the pond instead of the turtle was on the fallen tree

Anthony,

I really enjoyed the images in both your and your mentor's haiku, but I especially liked the way the two poems compliment one another. It reminded me of Jim Harrison and Ted Kooser's poetry collection "Braided Creek: A Conversation in Poetry." They sent each other postcards back and forth and then put out a collection. Sometimes, the best books are the collaborative ones.

Braided Creek

Thanks! I'll have to look for it!

The moon in the sky
is a balloon tethered
to a child dreaming.

I like cleverness and sentiment in haiku.

"I found my
cat - one
Silent star." Jack Kerouac

Gregory, thanks for joining in!

Lemon blossoms fall
Into kio filled pond
Green orange yellow shade

I have several volumes of R.H.Blyth compiled Anthology... They are so beautifully done ! e.g. Edo Satirical verse