Let's All Write STORIES!!! discussion

"Raben, no!" Karrisa screamed as the blond haired man in front of me pulled the trigger. I jolted back at the impact as the bullet pierced my chest, puncturing straight through my windpipe. Black spots appeared before my eyes and I could almost feel myself hit the ground. I honestly thought dying would kind of hurt at first... but it isn't as bad as the priests at Warhaden said. Just seemed to feel a little like a bee sting, but that was probably because of the gun being held by my brother... yeah, my brother. Isn't that just a surprise? Truthfully, it wasn't. For one, he works for Zycex, the most powerful company in the world that pretty much rules the world, tell ya more about that later. Two, he promised to kill me and that was cause I told him to. Alright, I'm seeing your confused looks here, so here, why don't we go back to help you understand. For me I can think of it as my life flashing before my eyes.

Three months previous

one... two... three... I counted the seconds slowly, trying to keep my concentration on the orb in front of me. It was about the size of your original hocus pocus crystal ball, only this one was a shade of red. One that tried to catch your mind off guard and toss you off the chair. COS, Concentration Oriented Spheres (Very original) were mind trainers. Used in all soldier trainings for Zycex as well as the usual physical fitness and education, all that jazz.

((um...I don't know what to write. I REALLY like this group, but I can't think of anything yet!!))

((just whatever you want to do. Have another character come in to talk to him, have their become a sudden attack, anything.))

((ok...))

Sudden the orb shattered into tiny pieces, and there was a loud crash behind me. Spinninh around, I squinted at the bright light coming towards me.

((That good? Dragon_eyes told me I "didn't help with the stories much, 'no offense'" so I want to..."make it up".))

Behind the light was a figuer. At least it was human, I thouht. Boots crunched the orb fragments into even smaller pieces on the floor, and then the light swiched off and the human forom morphed into a firmiliar figuer: Amberlyn Foxtail, the master Mind-Reader for Zycex.
"What are you doing here, Jillica?" she demaned, her voice crisp...
And then suddenly the pain of the bullet returned, and I once again saw the hazy forom of Raben, his head thrown back...in laughter?

((fine, honestly I prefer people to add something I don't expect. Usually the people I write or rp with always expect me to continue with my plans...))
"Well... I was working on my mind exercises, like professor Nith suggested to me." Jillica answered honestly.

As I answered, Raben faded and I was once again looking into the dark eyes of Amberlyn Foxtail. "Good for you," she chirruped.

((this is fun!))

((well that's good.))
Jillica smiled, "Um... thank you."

((I gotta go sorry))

((Thanks for posting Janeen-san!))
Foxtail smiled, but it looked kind of like a sneer to Jillica. She tossed her a box, which Jillica fumbled to catch, then promptly dropped. "An assignment from the big-boss. He asked for you and two others specifically." Yes, she decided, she's definitely sneering.

((first person view. And I guess it's a girl?))

((You are welcome!! Can we please keep it at 3rd veiw???))

((sorry, I have problems w/ that sometimes...=D))

((yeah it gets really confusing when ppl swich :())

((alright. That's fine. So it is a girl? I'm really confused about which gender it is now.))

((a girl I think))

((Jillica & Foxtail are girls. working for what I'm assuming is an army/cult (for lack of a better word) called Zycex. Raben is Jillica's brother, and Karissa hasn't actually been introduced yet. I think she's probably a girl too))

Foxtail suggested condecendingly, "try perception exercises next time." then she turned and strutted back out of the room. Jillica looked at the box in her hands. a hololsphere. one time use - it looked like. it held a hologram of someone explaining her mission. it would automatically delete the message after it was played once.
But she didn't know why it was a one time use. Was this a top secret mission she was being sent on? she headed toward her quarters to go see what this mission was.

looking at the image of General Hitori sitting at his desk, she felt slightly awed that he would ask for her specifically for this mission. then she hit the play button. her awe quickly turned to horror. This mission was going to be hell; she didn't have any choice though, Zycex all but owned her. She hadn't really ever liked it here, but now, she was sure she didn't want to stay. Zycex was corrupt & getting worse daily.

((WHY ISN'T ANYONE ELSE POSTING ON THIS?))

((sorry, I couldn't think of anything to write on this.))
With a sigh she snapped it shut and left for the weapons room.

When she got there, the man standing guard saluted her and said, "Jillica, what's your assignment this time?"
She smiled at him. he was a nice man, a friend of hers. "Sorry, can't say:top secret."
"Oh, well I still have to see your pass." she handed him the card that had been tied to the holocube and he opened the door. swiping the card through the slot in the machine, he whistled. "That's some heavy duty stuff, they're giving you this time around!"
"Yeah, and all the smallest newest models too." she picked up the box that the machine had delivered into the room and opened it to check that everything was there. Just standard procedure, Everything was there, and it was all small enough to easily hide on her body. She only got more upset about this mission with the weapon choices.
"Thanks," Jillica told the man. "I've gotta go meet Raben now."
"Raben?" he asked. "I haven't seen you 2 together in nearly 10 months."
"It's been too long." Jillica agreed.

((I have no idea what to post))

((Something about their meeting, and that other lady...Karrissa))

The man seemed to laugh in his eyes. Jillica saw him as a friendly person and continued talking with this man.

((Is this okay, I'm new and enjoy writing, but I am not sure if anybody likes my writing))

((feel free to just jump in and put whatever you want. it's fine if you want to write a whole paragraph!))

((OR SEVEN PARAGRAPHS!!!))

((Yes I did that the other day in Spell singer. it was really long...haha))

((lol))

There was something about this man that wanted to draw out even more information. His eyes, still laughing and colored in a magnificent blue continued to gaze deeper and deeper into Jillica's own eyes. Every second, more of Jillica's personal security was being worn down. She noticed it to.
"Hey," she almost yelled, trying to break the trance."You said together, have you seen Raben elsewhere?"

"Oh, he was here last month. New weapon's delivery. Aparently the higher ups have given him a work partner - not just a single mission partner either."
"Oh? they don't do that very often." privately she wondered Why would they give him a long term partnership? "You're a gossip monger, old man"
The man grinned. "You already knew that." She shook her head and left. Some day that man would get into trouble for doing that. Someone would notice what he did and report it.

((complicated...whoa but love it!, so can jilica write in the frst person even if she could be dead!! heehee ))

So that's how I remember meeting Karissa, she was quite something, a legend practically. The story went that she was found in the outerworlds living by herself in an extremely hostile environ. She had lost her ship in a surprise attack, couldn't even send out an sos before the ship communications failed. So, anyway she was known as a tough woman, the best in the Zycex Corp.

And she was to be my combat leader for this dangerous mission.

((You think we can find out some details for this mission now? I don't want it to end up like the prophacy from Welcome To Your Magic Life))

(( yeah that would be nice...I was thinking more like a bug attack of some kind on a planet in the Zycex 'empire'...feel free...))

((I'm not so good at the evil parts of stuff. Give me an idea and I can work with it, but I have trouble comming up w/ original stuff... well there goes my career as an author down the drain...
So Zycex isn't necessarily evil at this point, right? it's just ruling the military force of some kind. Whatever mission this is going to be must be bad, though because Jillica says it is, and who knows what kinds of other nasty stuff she's done for them already. that plus she tells her brother to kill her, so what's the motivation for that? Does the reason for that come up later on because of something she - or quite possibly he - does, or is it simply because she can find no other way to get away from Zycex (though that seems too much like giving up on fighting to me.)
Obviously this mission has to be covert, or they wouldn't be sending in only three agents/soldiers (I'm not sure what they are.) /i'm thinking that they're being sent to do something small that triggers something big, Kinda like the terrorists destroying 3 buildings threw the whole US into relative chaos for several weeks...

Sorry about the babbling, I was just typing things as I though about them...))

((whoa cool with the thinking! ...maybe she is being sent with the ohers to cause an outbreak of mutant something so they can overthrow the ruling queen,,...covert bio warfare so they would eed to getinto the lab and release the bugs, maybe she gets the bug ...we'll come up with that later, Kataury's here remember?/ :)))

((Does it really matter who's here to help w/ the stories? we should come up w/ stuff too you know, not ust rely on Katuary all the time...))

(( So...you wanna continue? ))

I headed up through the compound. It was true, I hadn't met my brother for almost a whole year. We had been inseparable as children because we were twins, but Zycex had been using us for our strengths and those were different so we hardly ever saw each other any more.
I walked into the cavernous mess hall and scanned the room for Raben's familiar face. There he was, talking to some woman with black hair that was obviously dyed. That must be his new partner then.

((i'm bursting...so ...may i?))

I stood awhile near the door, looking at them both as they stood there. And the feeling of doom pierced my hear again, there was something wrong with this mission, I had felt that from the start. I watched as Raben again turned to Karissa and said something to her. He hadn't smiled like usual, he knew I was there. Something had changed in our relationship since that vacation in the countryside. I knew things would never be the same again.

((What happened on this vacation nausheen? fill us in!))

((anything you want, errmmm maybe his dog died cos of her??? is that lame? ))

((nope))

(( thankie :D ))

((Or maybe thrie parents died because of something and he blamed her?))

((you mean she caused their death?))