Young Writers discussion

Hi Lillith,
Why don't you split your story into paragraphs? That way, it's much easier to read. When I see a whole big blob like this, I tend to just skim it!

I didn't even get past three lines. :P

I second Sam's suggestion; splitting it up into paragraphs would make it much more readable.

Also, I'd rather that you posted your writing on your profile ... You can do this by going to the Goodreads homepage; on the right side of the screen, if you scroll down a bit, there's a section called "My Profile" and if you select "writing" under that, then you can add writing to your profile. This group works better if you have a single topic for your story (rather than having a topic per chapter) and in that topic, provide a link whenever you update the story. You can look at the other topics to get an idea of what I mean. Thanks!

Yep, I agree with the paragraphs idea, also, you seem to have a lot of spelling mistakes - perhaps try an online spell checker? Both of these suggestions make your writing so much easier to read!

Sorry. This is just a ruff draft. The full thing probably won't be done for quite some time. All tell you wen it is.