Supernatural Academy (An Advanced RP) discussion

I have an extra bed

( add brackets and I need a room )

"Want this bed"

(Okay my character isn't actually talking to yours so add brackets not quotations)

(Ok do you want the bed ?)

(Sure )

(Whats you super natrual)

( I have 4 but only two can be in your dorm do you want a gypsy or summoner)

(First one)

(Kay her name is rose)

Ok

(You forgot the () )

"Thats your bed" points in the corner

(I am not in the room)

Om(oh)

(Your getting better)

(Thx)

(I just got anew room sorry)

(Nevermind)

(Whenever your character does something, remember to type their name. Ex. Luna swirled her finger around in the air.)

(Thx)

(Also, this if not Facebook, thu it is annoying there too, you need to avoid using text-talk. It's not hard to type the whole word.)

(Well sorry)

(Look kid. I'm trying to be nice here, and that is really hard when everytime I explain something. So grow up and take criticizm like an author.)

( i dont have a face book

(Not my point. However you should know what I mean when I say Text-Talk.)

(I do)

(Do you wanna roleplay with me in the bakere)

(No.)

(No. Both of my characters are busy)

(K)

{Didn't we all just talk about text talk? An 'O' isn't hard to type.}

(Sorry forgot)

(Rose wanna roleplay in our dorm

)

Katlyn is making her bed and tideing up her jouse when she hears a noise

She saw a mouse tirned into a wolf ate it then turned back

Brielle knocks on the dorm room door, her knuckles rapping impatiently on the wood door. She waits for someone to answer, holding her clipboard to her chest.

Katlyn walks to the door and askes who is this"who is there?"

"Uh, Brielle?" She didn't really know what she was supposed to say: she didn't really know quite what she was doing anyways.

Oh ok come in"kate sai as she oponed the door what you see when you walk in is a purple sofa and mini tv on a stand.in the next room a counter and frige with a sonk and stove upstaris is a bathroom and purple and orange bed room nxt to there is jere room mates bed it is blue and hreen then thier is a empty room with on ly bed next door

"Thanks." Brielle nodded to the girl, happy to be inside. It was scorching hot outside. "So, I'm here for..." She flipped through her pages, "Uh, this." She holds up a sheet of paper that was given to her by the office. "I'm supposed to go around and have everyone new fill one out. It's basically just a survey that let's the school know basic information about you: your former school, parents, stuff like that." She didn't know why it was so important to do this or even why the office had asked her to do this, but she didn't protest.

((Hey, just a little pointer. You should always try to use proper grammar when writing. Like, use capital letters after periods that kind of thing. It doesn't have to be perfect, just readable. Also, it's always a good idea to read over what you've read so you're sure it's perfect :) ))

(Thx)"oh"she says in a sad tone

((Uh-huh! And thank you for putting the quotes around the speech. It gets kind of confusing when people don't (I read a book with absolutely no quote marks... It was awful DX ). ))

Brielle noticed the look on the girl's face, "It's not that big of a deal, really. We all have to fill one out sooner or later." She tried to nonchalantly nod to the girl, wanting the girl to take them out of her hands. Before she did though, she looked down at the papers, "Wait, you are Katlyn, right?"

"What are the qustions on there?"she asked in a sad tone rememebering her parents befor the accedant

"I am katlyn yes"she states

Brielle glanced down, "Ah... How old you are; where you lived before the Academy; time at academy; grade..." She sighed and then gathered another breath. She really didn't have enough patience, "Parent's names; date of birth; and, finally, what species you are and from what side of the family." She let out her remaining breath.

"12,apartment,4 days,6 grade.on latlyns face atear rolls down her cheek befor the next qustion



Mark lesa shannon lesa,july 23 2001 ,female,and dad.

((Don't forget to add quotes: "Mark Lesa, Shannon Lesa..." They're important (as are capital letters, punctuation, etc.), that's why they're there ;) ))

Brielle quickly took up a pen and jotted down the facts the girl rattled off. She didn't look up until she was done and her how shaky the girl's voice was. The outline of a tear was on her cheek, "What? What's wrong?" She asked, lowering the clipboard.

"M-m-my parents died in a car accidnent when i was 6"another tear rolls down her face and another