Young Writers discussion

Hello everyone! Welcome to a topic based solely on my story, Crumbling Magic. You can read it here: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

(I only have one chapter up so far!)

What it's about... well I'll just copy-paste the description to avoid writing it twice:
Hind and Ellie are not related by blood, but they share a much stronger bond: mutual survival. Hind takes it on herself to protect Ellie and her strong magical talent from a society that mistrusts magic and considers it a threat. Eventually the worst happens and Ellie does get taken. Hind's journey to get her back will reveal just how valuable the young girl is.

Interested? I hope so! Please tell me what you think, any constructive criticism or even just criticism will be appreciated. The latter will just be appreciated less. Either way, thanks for reading!

This was really good! I'd like to read more:D

And your writing is perfect. Though there's something about that last sentence. Maybe it's just me, but when two sentences besides each other end with the same word, it seems.. out of place.. I like what it's saying though.
Keep it up ^^

Thank you!!

Oh yeah, and I'll take a look at that sentence :)

O.O

Putting this on my to-read list right now.

I plan on having the second chapter up by Wednesday. Maybe even earlier, at this rate.

Samantha Anne wrote: "I plan on having the second chapter up by Wednesday. Maybe even earlier, at this rate."

niceee. i'm excited to read it. :D

Samantha Anne wrote: "I plan on having the second chapter up by Wednesday. Maybe even earlier, at this rate."

Okay I lied. Chapter two is behind schedule.

That's awesome cant wait to read more.

Olivia wrote: "That's awesome cant wait to read more."

Thank you!

Dearest Samantha Anne,

This is fantastic. The most wonderful piece of unpublished fantasy I have read in months, to be honest (and I read a lot of that).

I'll pick it apart more as a writer later, but as a reader, I am hooked. This beginning was well-crafted and I look forward to the next chapters showing up here. Good work. Keep writing it, because I might be very upset if you don't.

Nicely done, I would love to read more of your story, for just one chapter is not enough to behold the true beauty of the story. I cannot wait for the next chapter to come. Thank you, Samantha Anne, for posting this lovely story. I truly cannot wait to read more.

Taylor [Relationship status: Ever inspired] wrote: "Dearest Samantha Anne,

This is fantastic. The most wonderful piece of unpublished fantasy I have read in months, to be honest (and I read a lot of that).

I'll pick it apart more as a writer later..."

Thanks a lot! This might be just enough motivation to finish chapter two. Nothing like praise to get the creative juices flowing! (Dang that sounds weird)

Samantha Anne wrote: "Taylor [Relationship status: Ever inspired] wrote: "Dearest Samantha Anne,

This is fantastic. The most wonderful piece of unpublished fantasy I have read in months, to be honest (and I read a lot ..."

Yay, motivation! (And yes, that does sound weird, kind of gross actually...)

The.... creative gears are turning. Yes that sounds less weird.

Chapter two is up! Finally!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

Chapter 2 is awesome! I can't wait until you finish the book it has left me hanging.

After I critique another story for someone entering a national contest, I'll take a hard look at both chapters. :)