Young Writers Group discussion

Here you go, Umer.

My Shadow
Hey hey you ? I am talking to you
Who the hell the are you ?
Why are you keep following me
Do I know you ?

I can see your black character
You can be dark attacker
Why you keep hiding in dark
Why follow me like a tracker ?

There is nothing fun
In the lights you always run
You were never there for me
When I look forward or turn

I know you are my shadow
Who likes to live in dark
Come out and face the light
Fear is nothing but a artificial spark

Come lets face this world together
There is nothing to stay behind
Whatever comes next we will fight
No matter either its day or night

I like it a lot. Most of your poem went right to the point. I love the last stanza the most because it goes right to the point and simple. I think you last stanza have a really void positive message strangers in a weird way and friendship.

thank you .. i am not a poet by profession but my all poetry have some message to convey for this world . if you read my others which i write as " my life " are about me but have a message include things i experience in life ..
anyways thanks once again

Umer wrote: "thank you .. i am not a poet by profession but my all poetry have some message to convey for this world . if you read my others which i write as " my life " are about me but have a message include ..."

Welcome!

Just as great as your other poems. Great Job!

yeah marie I say this but did I said it wrongly? ? I am little confused

From when this world came to been
There is always a difference between

truth is better than lie
walking is better than fly

wrong can never win over right
brighten days taken over by night

working with honesty is hard
dishonesty fells a part

revenge can never bring people closer
forgiveness can win hearts all over

war was never called a solution and,
peace can never be cause of destruction

humans who never learn to take orders
separated by color , cast and borders

love is always superior than hate
been ab-solvable can change our fate

sweet is not equal to bitter
reader has more knowledge than writer ;)

I love it. Only one of the stanzas confused me. When you wrote:

love is always superior than hate
been ab-solvable can change our fate

I don't get what you saying in the last line of that stanza. But overall it was really good. Keep on writing!

Umer wrote: "From when this world came to been
There is always a difference between

truth is better than lie
walking is better than fly

wrong can never win over right
brighten days taken over by night

worki..."






Outstanding work! I agree with Danielle about the one stanza.

absolvable means somewhere near forgive or to neglect the mistakes of people's. . and we all know forgiveness and neglecting mistakes of others can just not change us but the whole world

Thanks. Now the stanza is much clearer.

thank you for reading and liking my poems

You are welcome.

Nov13670 wrote: "Thanks. Now the stanza is much clearer."

Me too. I think now the stanza to me is much clearer

this my latest poem which i wrote today hope you guys like it :)


That day was an like other day
i was enjoying my dreams
with the first shine of sun
i woke up to start my day

there is something and special
which you never told me about
when i check my mail box
it makes me completely freak out

there is something unusual their
make me confused from the start
why my mail is like this ?
why there are so many cards ?

a letter and card from you
saying that " i love you "
i can say that truly
this makes me more closer to you

you give me the best surprise
you hide it till the day i receive
never even mentioned in our talk
neither on the day we went on a walk

when i open your card with smile
honestly it takes me a while
whatever you wrote in with red and blue
everything was undoubtedly true

there is something i want to tell you
living far from you is really hard
And Specially when I'm writing a poem
Called "The Day I receive your first Card"

Loved it. Keep on writing!

I loved it. I love every single stanza, and hope you kept it simple and not complicated. Keep n writing.

thank you very much ..

Umer wrote: "thank you very much .."


Welcome.