YAholics Anonymous! discussion

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I like the second scene you shared. It was cute. The first one was good to, but a little plain maybe?
and this part:
"I got down to work and was so absorbed that I flinched when I saw him leaning against the door yawning lazily. Seriously, I wasn't expecting him at all."

I don't know why but it annoys me that the word seriously is there, so I would change it or just settle with "I wasn't ecpecting him at all".

sorry if my english is bad! :) And i think you have a good story, keep writing.