Young Writers discussion

Hey peeps! Here's some of my poetry, please feel free to give constructive criticism, it's always helpful:) Thanks for checking out my poems and be sure to tell me about yours so I can see those too!

Judge:

I talk and speak and laugh all day
They look at me with dead smiles and fake sincerity
But no one really listens
It's silly really
Because they're all thinking about themselves
Selfish people hating selfish people for being selfish
Hypocrisy at it's best!
There it sits
Lying in wait for it's victims
Right in the midst of society
Hiding it's evil shape behind propriety
Polite comments with barbed tails
Spin rumors, gossips, and their own tall tales
Bright white grins
There to pull you in
Putting paint on scorn, disgust, disapproval
Yet, always right there in their eyes
As they try to disguise
Putting a pig in a dress pretending it's a princess
Oh no
It's in our world
Our lives
Our words
Our thoughts
Our hearts and souls
So that when we give in and speak the words that they have to us
Oh that, is when they listen!
And judge
And condemn
But silly little humans
Dont't they know that everybody judges them?

*sigh* I really like this! The metaphor's are amazing!
So true: "Selfish people hating selfish people for being selfish
Hypocrisy at it's best!"
A very brilliant poem, Samantha!