Inkshares Community discussion

'Ello, 'ello, y'all.

I've been trying to get some feedback for my book, Blurred Weaponry, now that I'm done with the story content (all 405 or so pages of it). Good or bad comments are welcome, doesn't matter which - anything constructive would be awesome.


Here's a link: http://bit.ly/1HXuNq8

It's available in four formats, including .epub and .mobi. The epub file works perfectly, and should be able to be tossed into readers on devices without issue.

I'm also on the hunt for an editor, but everyone I find seems crazy booked, so that'll take a bit.

Finally, thanks, Goodreads folks for this community. It's a lot more positive and unselfish than some of the other writing forums I've tried to join. That has nothing to do with my feedback request, just a thought I was having ^_^.

ALSO!: The link will be changed / removed at the end of November 2015, so if someone sees this post and wants to have a look in December or later, you can contact me via the info on my Inkshares page [or private message now that I know Goodreads can do that].

EDIT: Whoo boy, reading the book on my phone is making me notice some minor errors that I hadn't seen before. Admittedly, a professional editor would probably fix those little things, but until I save up for that, I apologize if I use the wrong word here and there :P.

Exciting. I grabbed a copy and I'll put it on my Kindle. I'm a bit busy, but I will try to make reading it a priority.

Hah, no hurry. I've got time and can make changes very quickly. Plus I have a bad feeling it might need a ton of work, so if a reader gets bored by it I need to know that, too.

I'm interested. Sign me up! :)

One question: after we had finished with the feedback, do we email the book back to you with revisions and comments? If so, what is your email address?

Oops! I'm very clearly new at this.

I'll share my public-facing email address if you want to do it that way, but I'll also get automated messages from this topic.

I'm at 48saints@gmail.com

Also, though I assume most feedback will be about pacing or characters (had so much trouble with both that I can no longer figure out what to add lol), if you have anything positive to say, feel free to also say it on my book's page (which I think gets you Inkshares credits if it's the first time you've done so)

Michael wrote: "Oops! I'm very clearly new at this.

I'll share my public-facing email address if you want to do it that way, but I'll also get automated messages from this topic.

I'm at 48saints@gmail.com

Als..."

Oh, I use track changes n google docs and adds comments on what I think is good and what needs to be looked at. It's not always gong to be about pacing and character. There might be plot holes, inconsistencies and general nitpicks I'll point.

I'm going to ahead of time going to tell you that I might come of as a bit too harsh on things, so yeah. Just a heads up.

Yicheng wrote: "Michael wrote: "Oops! I'm very clearly new at this.

I'll share my public-facing email address if you want to do it that way, but I'll also get automated messages from this topic.

I'm at 48saints..."

Ah, right, Google docs! I think I've only used that stuff a couple times, mostly for school. In any case, like i said I'm in no hurry at all (for now), and I've been pretty harsh on my own darn self during some of my drafts, so I can honestly say you probably won't be as hard on me as I am :)

Some changes I'm working on since putting this beta here:

-I noticed I still need yet another line-by-line run through. I guess that's why editors make their money, because despite dozens and dozens and dozens of hours of work in October, I still missed some minor things. Oh well, it's not meant to be perfect just yet.

-I'm adding to the prologue section and maybe one more chapter from the character Mill's POV. It's explained later on why he's doing what he's doing, and obfuscating the enemies throughout the novel was done on purpose, but I felt like the book was missing some humanity, and his POV will do exactly that without interrupting events.

-Smells. For some reason I didn't too much info on the olfactory because I didn't think it was necessary. I'll keep that in mind for my January edits (I work way too much in December to do much more than sleep on my day off).

Grabbing a copy. I'll try to have some sort of feedback for you in a week or so.

Looking forward to reading it!

Well, no comments or feedback of any kind, so I think this Beta is over. I'm making big changes to the book in January and have found a professional editor to hand it to so I can guarantee it gets looked at.

Thanks to those who clicked the link, and I apologize if they didn't like the unfinished book. I'll be working on perfecting it over the next few months in a professional manner, so I may be looking for beta readers for the final version in some months, and I'll post that on Goodreads, too :)

Sorry, I was supposed to be reading it...but I ended up forgetting all about it. :(

I promise I'll get around to it soon.