Inkshares Community discussion

Hi Guys,

I am new to this, and hope I am in the right place to ask.

I would like to have feedback on the content I posted online so far .

let me know what you think,

project page

oh and yeah searching for someone to help with the cover art.

Hi Andre,

I'll read through your stuff in more depth over the next few days. But for what it's worth, I like your cover as it is.

I'm with Craig, I think the cover is solid, well done, and just generally eye-catching. You're on my shortlist of projects to read over, and l'm thinking that with your end date there's probably at most 2 or 3 books ahead of you on that list so I'll try to get back to you with more as soon as I've gotten to it.

Hey Andre,

I was looking at your page earlier today and noticed it's missing an About the Author section. I know it can be an awkward thing to write, but it really does help prospective readers become more invested in your success.

The other thing I wondered about was that church picture. It looks creepy, almost possessed even, and I was wondering if your story went in that direction. It doesn't sound like it from the description, but that's the impression I got from the picture.

On the plus side, your concept is really intriguing and already has me interested, and I think your cover is really great!

btw - You're on my shortlist of next books to order :)

Hi Andre. I'm with Craig and Thomas. It's a clean, solid cover.

I read the first section. I'd almost drop the first paragraph (and work in the fact that she's a doctor at an asylum later, perhaps at the very end - the door swung shut. On it was the doctor's name. Elizabeth Thompson Chief Psychiatrist Mental Health... or something like that.) I'd begin with the "9-1-1 how can I direct your call." followed by the dialog "Help me. He followed me to work. He's killing the patients." Get straight in there. From the rest of the page Elizabeth knows the attacker already so "Someone" doesn't quite fit. e.g. "Why did you run?" and "I told you already." indicates a prior awareness of each other.

Overall a nice premise and something I'd read.

Really intriguing premise, I think you have something that will go far! I left a few small comments on wording, I agree with Peter's comments also.