Young Beginner Writers (closed) discussion

Hey everyone I'd love for y'all to read and give me feedback on my story! the link is

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1L...

I love all suggestions!

Hi! You might want to share this story under the Stories folder! People tend to look there for stories and feedback. Good luck! :)

Hello everyone! So I wrote this story quite a while ago and I was wondering what if some of you could take the time to read the first chapter and tell me what it is I should work on: characters or anything else.
So here you go and I hope you enjoy!
https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...