Stories by Me discussion

ok so here we go. My story name is Part of my soul. It is a story about a girl Emily Thomson born in a very rich millionaire family but bounded in rule and regulation made by her mother she respect her mother very much and so do anything what she say without giving it a thought. But it all is breaking her from inside she want to live her life and enjoy it. Her mother always controlled her whereas her sister and brother are free to go anywhere according to their wish.

but it will change when she met Lucas withers everyone says that he is a cold hearted bastred who dosen't care for anyones feeling. they met on Emily's success party where she won the nationl championship in piano playing. When Lucas saw Emily for first time he saw pain in her eyes which no one was able to see and as he came closer to her the more he realises how much she is being bounded and can't breath from inside.
He help her to see what life have for us and he teach her to live life he helps her to realise her true self.

The truth is that he cares the most but he have his on ghosts which made him this way.

Well this what my story about, this the plot. please give me some Ideas or feedback if anything need improvement. and also I don't know about what is the past of Lucas that made him this way or why Emily's mothers so insecure about Emily although she is her elder daughter. So pls give me some Idea.
Thank you

@ Yamini - what if Lucas is a foster kid who finally ended up in a rich family, but he has ghosts from his past. This way we can have him run in the same circles as Emily but still have a dark seeded past that you leak bits of along the way. He is ashamed of being adopted though and the family (you know millionaire appearances and such) are always encouraging him not to act like he was adopted. They are really a great family, but he is still broken from his past maybe. Don't mention it and such though. So very few people know and people don't talk about it? He feels like he can open up to Emily eventually though.

@ Yamini - And what if Emily is the child from a first marriage and daddy died. Mom remarried and siblings are from second marriage. so anyway Emily went through some issues with losing her father and because her mom fears how it has affected Emily, she becomes overbearing. misplaced love, she just has taken it too far. Mom is fearful and that's the reason for how strict she is with Emily and not so much with the others.

@ Frankie Lovely that is something i would like to write thanx alot for helping me out from this dilema... Thnx....