Young Writers Group discussion

This is a sort of poem I wrote looking into the circumstances of an old saying.

They say that if you love something, you should let it go, and if it loves you too then it will come back. There is a lot of truth to this statement, saying that you should let someone or something you love be free to do what they need to do, and if they love you and need you then they will always find a way to be with you.

But consider this:
What if the thing you love does love you, but because you let it go it thinks you don't love it anymore, so it never comes back. And so this thing you love is out there in the world somewhere loving you and missing you and all it wants is to go back to you, but it dosen't because it thinks you don't love it anymore. And then there you are, staring out the window waiting for this thing to come back to you like they all said it would; but it never does. So you assume it no longer loves you, or maybe never did because it would have come back by now, wouldn't it? So there the two of you are, on oppostite sides of the city, or maybe even the world, waiting for the other to make some sort of sign that it needs you just as bad as you need it. Waiting for a sign that will never come, simply because the other is waiting for it too. Simply being lost in translation. And that is why I think you should speak now; never let someone make you hold your peace. Never listen to what 'they say'. Speak now. Because it might just be the one thing the other person is waiting to hear.

This is very inspirational and different. It has a strong voice to it. It reminds me of my dramatic monologue I had to do for school. With all that said, I think you should consider re-writing this in a simpler way without subtracting any of the things you wanted to get a cross. I thought some of the wording was repetitive but it was still over the top and I would like to read more from you.

Wow. Thank you so much for that. When I posted this I was really scared it wasn't and I would just get negativity back with this. Thank you. I'll definitely rework it.

Katherine wrote: "Wow. Thank you so much for that. When I posted this I was really scared it wasn't and I would just get negativity back with this. Thank you. I'll definitely rework it."



You are welcome.