Express Yourself, Discover! discussion

I've learned in my experience, even though I am only fourteen, that poetry is much more difficult to write than prose. When I write poetry, though, I don't care what other people say, it's what I feel and that's how I express myself. Usually if my poems are sad or dark and mysterious, it's because I've experienced that. I have only two poems on goodreads where I didn't write what I felt, but that shouldn't stop you! Continue writing and doing what you love, it will get you far.

You can give each other advice for writing poetry and share some of your poetry (if it's smaller than five stanzas) if you want and let other people comment on it.

If anyone wants to read my poems just go to my profile page because mine are usually quite a bit longer than five stanzas. I would like to hear opinions of what you get from reading my work and any constructive criticism you may have for me.

Ok here is a poem that I would like your opinions on. I don't think it's that great I actually think it needs some work.

Hey Stranger
I think I've seen you some where before
I recognize your face
I knew you
when my world was starting to take shape

Hey stranger
your shape stands out in a crowd
your image is forever imprinted in my memory
keeping a bond
that has since been broken with words

Hey stranger
I still remember your name
I'm sure you know mine too
they have passed through our minds so many times

Hey stranger
I will never forget you
When I think about it
I can recreate everything that has happened

Hey stranger
Don't be a stranger
There is still time to remember
and time to forgive and forget

I think it's a great poem, Becca!

you don't think I need to change anything at all? Wow, I guess if you think its great I" should take it as a compliment and not second guess myself.

no, you shouldn't. it could probably be better, but i like it.

I like the story of it, but, to me, it reads funny. It's like the meter is off or something.

Do you have any ideas how I could change that?

ok guys I just wrote a new poem and would like your opinion before I post it. It's kind of dark but it's about the same person that a lot of my other poems are about. It's sad that after a little more than a year I can still write something about the same thing/person. Anyways it's called I Wish and by reading it you should be able to figure out what it's about pretty easily.

I wish I could forget
The words that you said
The pain that I met

Just the thought
Makes the blood drip
From the gash that you made

I wish I could say
That I’ve let go
And got over it

Your fake smile
Burns into my flesh
Like salt in my wounds

I wish I could understand
What it is
That made you feel that way

I told you no lies
But you twisted my words
Like you did the knife in my back

I wish I could make it go away
Erase everything
That made you change

But you cut me too deep
Everything about you causes me pain
And so the scars remain

I wish I could tell you
How much it hurts
Just to think

Words fall on deaf hears
The guilty don’t want to hear
The damage they’ve done

I wish for the day you’ll see
Just what you’ve done
And how miserable you will become

You’ll feel the pain
And realize you’re hurt
But I won’t care it’ll all be done

ok tell me what you think and maybe give me a few words that I could use besides pain.

i like it