Somewhere to Nowhere discussion

What do you experts think of my one-paged mystery prompt?

George was walking home from school on a pleasant, sunny day. His backpack on his shoulders and his baseball cap on his head, he merrily strode through town.
The thirteen year-old boy had shaggy honey-colored hair and piercing blue eyes. Freckles splashed across his face and a smile led to his dimples.

On the peaceful journey to home, he ran into the local bakery shop owner, Megan. “Hello Meg! How are you this fine day?” The country boy had asked.
“Hey George,” said Megan with a cheerful grin. “I’m pretty good, you?” She responded. “Oh, I’m just fine, thank you! Any recent bakes?” Said George when he lifted his head to smell a fresh loaf of bread. “You beat me to it.” Megan chuckled.

Soon the two parted and George ate the piece of bread Megan had offered him. George came to the intersection where he picked up his bike he left in the morning. Crossing the sidewalk, a twenty dollar bill and a piece of paper flew under his tire. Slamming the bikes brakes, which was not a smooth move, George hopped off his bike and lifted the item off the ground’s cool surface.
“Twenty bucks! Today’s my lucky day,” he said as he tucked it into his pocket after removing the piece of paper. What was to say but a message, scrolled in bold ink, was printed across the top. “Whomever may find this, come over here. I’m by the park’s willow tree but please don’t fear me.” The note stated. What’s going on?

I love it! What happens??????!!!!! :D Oh I wish this was, 'finish the story'. XD

would a scary story work?

Firestar/Leon/Akuma/Kratos/Satan The devil has arose from within me beware for this is real wrote: "would a scary story work?"

Sure! Are you thinking of making one? Go on ahead, just remember the rules bud. :)

Aly 'I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying.' wrote: "I love it! What happens??????!!!!! :D Oh I wish this was, 'finish the story'. XD"

For me to know and you to find out. ;) JK. I'll have to figure the rest out when I'm over with the flu... lucky to be writing here right now. XD

At first I thought it was just a dream. But I was so wrong.

The first night this happened I woke up in the middle of the night thinking my dog was on the edge of my bed. So I kicked him off the edge of the bed and said, "Duke, Get off the bed and go to sleep." I heard the clicking of claws and went back to sleep thinking about what would happen the next day

the next night I woke up to the pressure again this time I sat up, and, without opening my eyes, shoved duke off the bed and said, "Duke stay off." but my hands didn't come into contact with fur..... They came into contact with skin, human skin. My eyes flew open quick and I turned on the light and saw nothing but when I lowered my feet onto the floor I stepped in something wet. I looked down and saw a puddle of blood coming from under the bed, I leaned down and looked under the bed and saw a lump of fur, I screamed for my parents to come quickly and had them look under my bed at the lump of fur there, as my dad checked I sat on the bed rocking back and forth while my mom tried to comfort me, my dad pulled the mysterious lump of fur out from under the bed and as I realized what it was I screamed and began crying..... It was duke.

The next night I pretended to sleep and had a flashlight ready I felt the pressure at the foot of my bed again and this time I slowly pulled the covers back and sat up and suddenly flicked the flashlight on, what was sitting there was NOT human. The creature sat there and suddenly, in the blink of an eye, he was right there in my face, just an inch away from mine and instead of fingers he had talons, but that wasn't the scary part, the scary part was that..... he had no eyes just empty black pools of terror, I tried to scream but couldn't and realized my chest was wet, as I put my fingers up to my throat I realized what had happened..... The creature had slit my throat. I bang the wall next to me and used the blanket to stanch the bleeding my dad came in with a Winchester 12 shotgun and the creature jumped out the window my dad called the hospital and I arrived there a few minutes later, lucky us that we lived like, right next to it so we arrived just in time to stop the bleeding and thankfully god was on my side so I lived as I sit here typing this I begin to wonder..... Will it come back to finish the job? Or will it allow me to live this time?

thats part one of two for a book im writing

Wow! That's awesome, you're a good writer! Felt so real!

I could show mine but they suck

thnx and cmon rave i bet they r good

Sylveon~Raven wrote: "I could show mine but they suck"

Nah, they don't suck. We'd be happy if you share them I bet they are very good.

hey kaitie do you think my prologue needs work?

Firestar/Leon/Akuma/Kratos/Satan The devil has arose from within me beware for this is real wrote: "hey kaitie do you think my prologue needs work?"

I think it's pretty good with a strong foundation. The only thing is, you can try playing around with different techniques, like this:

I awoke in the center of the night's black surface. Feeling something brush against my leg, I thought my dog lay at the end of the bed. I shake him off and tell him to go to sleep.

What do you think?

thats..... badass level: over 9000 type: mastery

Well it isnt exactly a page

go for it!

I dont know.....

Why not? :)

Anna wrote: "Once I wrote some similar to these but I don't have them typed up so I can't share those exact ones, was thinking about adding one here! :)"

I'd love to see it! :D

Firestar/Leon/Akuma/Kratos/Satan The devil has arose from within me beware for this is real wrote: "thats..... badass level: over 9000 type: mastery"

Thanks! It's not the best though. :)

Kaitlyn wrote: "Firestar/Leon/Akuma/Kratos/Satan The devil has arose from within me beware for this is real wrote: "would a scary story work?"

Sure! Are you thinking of making one? Go on ahead, just remember the ..."

Feel better!! :)

Aly 'I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying.' wrote: "Kaitlyn wrote: "Firestar/Leon/Akuma/Kratos/Satan The devil has arose from within me beware for this is real wrote: "would a scary story work?"

Sure! Are you thinking of making one? Go on ahead, ju..."

Thank you! :)

Imma brave up and post a story.

Sylveon~Raven wrote: "Imma brave up and post a story."

Awesome! :D

Anna wrote: "The sword was now only two feet away from me. With any luck, I could grab it and lop off Sir Beltor’s head. Or not. Sir Beltor swung his own sword above his head and brought it down at such a speed..."

Wow, you're amazing! Sorry I didn't see this earlier. I love it and it was so realistic!! :D Great job!!

Imma post one of my random stories, soon, I'll have to find one without swear words or I could figure things out about it.

The white snow fell like blankets on to the ground as footsteps crunched on to the ground. Jessie Stripe, a tiger girl born to a human, John, and a were-tiger, Tiger-Lily or just Lily, hoped around in the blankets of snow. It was nearing Christmas and the 10-year-old tiger girl was enjoying the winter air as the snowflakes dropped. "Jessie!" A voice called out to the young feline. "Get ready Queen Alea and King Leo are visiting from the palace of the Ice Fairies. Lady Artemis is also coming over." The voice added.
It's been a year since John's death and all they did was act like it was nothing, they couldn't do anything anyways after he was put on trial by Lady Artemis for an attack on the women of the land. Which was true, John was abusive. Ever since he found out about his Were-tiger wife, whom he knew as Lily after the birth of Jessie, he had started beating on them and coming home drunk after drinking in a bar. The abuse got horrible to where he almost killed Tiger-Lily and he left. Turns out a week later he had done some things......and killed a woman after doing those nasty things to her. After that Lady Artemis took it upon herself to kill him.
Jessie ran inside, shaking the memory of her head and got washed up and cleaned "Look, mommy, I'm done." She said when she finished.
Tiger-Lily chuckled and nodded as she said, "Good job, now get ready, they should arrive soon." Jessie nodded and got ready as the doorbell rang.
"Ah, Lady Artemis, what a wonderful surprise," Tiger-Lily said respectfully nodding her head, her blonde hair falling down her sides. A small smile appeared on Artemis' tanned face. Her purple hair tied up in a bun, a half crescent moon necklace on her forehead.
"Hello, Tiger-Lily. I hope you are feeling better after the incident dealing with your ex-husband." Artemis said as she entered the house. Jessie smiled "Artemis!" She said, hugging Artemis' legs cheerfully. "I've written a song." She smiled happily and ran off.
"Hyper isn't she?" A different, new voice said, causing Artemis to turn around. "Hello, Goddess Artemis." The voice said, revealing a male fairy with blonde hair, holding a staff in one hand.
"Oh. Hello Leo." She said, a small frown appearing on her face as she crossed her arms.
"So, what brings the Goddess of the Hunt here?" He asked.
Artemis rolled her blue eyes and said, "I'm only here to see how Tiger-Lily is doing and to see if when Jessie grows up if she would like to join my huntresses." Tiger-Lily shook her head, the curls bouncing back and forth.
"She can't. She's too involved with music. Her dream is to become a singer." Tiger-Lily stated, wagging her pointer-finger in the air. "Sorry, Lady Artemis." She said.
Artemis let a frown show "Alright then, goodbye." She said, then walked out of the house without a word, stopping in front of Queen Alea to say her goodbye's then left.
Alea entered and said, "Hello Tiger-Lily." Tiger-Lily bowed with the fairy queen happily returned the bow. "You said you needed a place for a studio?" She asked. Tiger-Lily nodded and Alea smiled "Well, you're actually in luck. we know of a studio but please. When Jessie is older, then have her come find us." And with that said, Queen Alea left the house with her husband.


((I don't think this has swear words, it includes some mythology and fantasy :D))

Sylveon~Raven wrote: "The white snow fell like blankets on to the ground as footsteps crunched on to the ground. Jessie Stripe, a tiger girl born to a human, John, and a were-tiger, Tiger-Lily or just Lily, hoped around..."

Oh, how wonderful! It was a very enjoyable read and I had a great time reading it!! It feels so real and I love the detail. :D

Thank you :D I'm stil a beginner.

No problem!! Me too, I'm all over the place with writing but it's not that good when I finish as when I start. Lol.

(Sorry, this isn't exactly one page tbh)

“Ellie!”
“Wake up Ellie! Seriously Ellie? Are you going to sleep all day? Get your lazy bum up.”
“No.” The blonde mumbled as she turned away from her friend. She was under her red and white-striped blanket, sleeping the day away.
After all, that’s all you are ever good at Ellie. She remembered her teacher had told her that after abruptly waking the girl up. You can’t just sleep in every day.
Ellie didn’t care though, why should she when she didn’t do anything wrong, all she did was missed a couple of notes for a potion class. She sighed and opened her grey eyes. “What do you want Sam?” She asked, getting up and making her bed neatly, the elven teenager sighed and looked at her dorm mate.
Sam shook her head, her curls bouncing as she said, “I never understood you, Ellie, I thought elves needed about 4 hours of sleep not 20.”
“I don’t take 20 hours to sleep. I’m a half-elf so I need more than 4 hours; I don’t meditate either like many other elves. I only sleep for the same amount of hours as a human, only one hour less then a normal human should be sleeping.” She said, shaking her head at her dorm mate.
“Elves are confusing.” Sam complained as she walked to her dresser “So what type of elf do you come from?” She pulled out a pink dress with a purple ribbon on the back and heels.
“Wood Elves, known as Forest Elves by some people.” The half-elf explained as she walked to her dresser pulling out a white T-Shirt with tear marks on the bottom and Sam rolled her eyes.
“You obviously like guy stuff, why not cut your hair as well.” She said sarcastically as she went to the bathroom and shut the door.
Ellie heard the shower start and smiled, shaking her head Sam doesn’t understand the hardships of being an elf, or worse, a half-elf. She thought with a sigh as she pulled out ripped jeans and got dressed in her outfit.
“Ellie, you idiot!” Ellie stiffened at the voice as a guy walked over. “You are supposed to help me like your slave of ancestors helped humans.” He said, narrowing his eyes “You’re lucky I’m a nice guy.”
“What do you want Nicolas?” Ellie asked, staring blankly at the school bully.
“Simple, you, as an elven descendent, was born to help me, a human, just like it’s always been. But you ditched us.” He said, pounding his fists against each other “Why are pathetic elves allowed in our school anyway, they should’ve never started that rebellion 100 years ago.”
Ellie felt her blood boil; oh this jerk will get what is coming to him. She closed her eyes and let instinct happen when he threw his fist at her. She took a step to the side and hit him in the face, hard.
“Ouch. You stupid half-elf.” Nick said, rubbing the area she had punched, he pulled his hand away from his face and saw red “B…blood?” He said horrified. “That elf punched me, she made my nose bleed.” He said as he stared at her, his face showing a mix of horror, hatred, and disgust. “You elves should be killed.”
“Ellie!”
Ellie blinked away the flashback and looked at Sam. “Oh good, you’re alive. You need to not stare into space, it scared me.” She said, giving her friend a hug. Sam deeply cared about her friend, her crush, who always seemed to be staring off into space or having flashbacks.
“Don’t worry about me Sa–“
“Samantha! There you are!” A voice rang out, hurting the half-elves ears.
“What do you want Beth?” Sam asked with a frown on her face as a pale girl jogged over to him.
“Oh, you’re with the elf again.” She said, disgusted. She ran her bony fingers through her strawberry hair and asked, “Why don’t you ditch the elf?” Beth glared at the half-elf and she glared back. “Elf freak.”
“Vampire trash!” Ellie shot back, for a moment grey eyes stared into blood red eyes.
“What kind of elf has grey eyes?” Beth asked, narrowing her blood red eyes at the blonde.
“A kind that will kick your butt if you don’t leave!”
“Fine, I won’t leave.“ Beth stopped when Sam got in the way, blocking their view of each other.
“Enough! Both of you quit it.” She demanded. “Why can’t you two get along, I mean seriously aren’t vampires and werewolves supposed to be the ones with petty rivalries?” She asked, combing her finger through her curly brunette hair. “Come on, we have to head to the library.” She smiled and walked towards the library, the vampire and half-elf running to catch up.

It's kind of like fantasy level racism and how a half-elf(Or any elf) is treated like they shouldn't belong or something